Jack and Bumkin's Play Date
As they baby talked cheek to cheek36 total reviews
Comment from Cecilia Lynne1
Well thought out. Humorous and appears to meet all of the contest requirements that fits into the 5-7-5 metric requirement ending with a total of 17 syllables. Your choice of art to accompany your presentation is excellent and appropriate. Supporting your witty expression of words. All the best to you in competition.
Only comment for change would be to use an explanation sign (!) after Hi ! rather than a comma(,). For me that would immediately grab more exciting expressive attention as an introduction into your excellent presentation.
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Well thought out. Humorous and appears to meet all of the contest requirements that fits into the 5-7-5 metric requirement ending with a total of 17 syllables. Your choice of art to accompany your presentation is excellent and appropriate. Supporting your witty expression of words. All the best to you in competition.
Only comment for change would be to use an explanation sign (!) after Hi ! rather than a comma(,). For me that would immediately grab more exciting expressive attention as an introduction into your excellent presentation.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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I thank you so much Cecilia, for your very kind and fun comments about the picture and the poem. You are very thoughtful! ! It feels so good to hear that people are smiling big or laughing. They have been making my whole day, as it is so contagious. I will go try to see what a different punctuation mark would look like. I may have to use a period because the font made the exclamation look like another letter. Y'know what I mean? Thanks for the generous six stars and for the awesome feedback my friend!
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Well deserved and you are most welcome. Will look forward to many more.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Well, the picture is absolutely adorable, and even though their faces are turned away from the camera, the body language says they are having a good time. And who wouldn't be with a pumpkin painted on their booty.
Nice 5/7/5 featuring the little one's bum, cheek, and booty:-)
Pam
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Well, the picture is absolutely adorable, and even though their faces are turned away from the camera, the body language says they are having a good time. And who wouldn't be with a pumpkin painted on their booty.
Nice 5/7/5 featuring the little one's bum, cheek, and booty:-)
Pam
Comment Written 10-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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I thank you so much Pam, for your very kind and fun comments about the picture and the poem. You are very thoughtful! ! It feels so good to hear that people are smiling big or laughing. They have been making my whole day, as it is so contagious. Thanks again my friend!
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Mission accomplished. You made me laugh. It always amazes me what can be accomplished in poetry with so few syllables. Thank you for the booty-ful poem. Well done.
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Mission accomplished. You made me laugh. It always amazes me what can be accomplished in poetry with so few syllables. Thank you for the booty-ful poem. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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I thank you so much Charles,, for your very kind and fun comments about the picture and the poem. You are very thoughtful! ! It feels so good to hear that people are smiling big or laughing. They have been making my whole day and evening as it is so contagious. Thanks again my friend!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute and humorous 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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This is a very cute and humorous 5-7-5 poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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Oh thank you so much Teri, for your very kind and fun comments about the picture and the poem. Also for your gracious gift of six stars, as so many don't believe in them for 5-7-5 poems. So you have no idea what it means to me. You are a sweetheart! It feels so good to hear that people are smiling big or laughing. That makes my whole day as it is so contagious! Thanks again my Sweet friend!
Comment from Michael Cassar
Quite a dialogue between these toddlers. A humorous dialogue with perfect two year old pronunciation. They even show distinguished poetic knowledge of Haiku. Little concern over their orange butts...but they might be colored for the picture. ð???
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Quite a dialogue between these toddlers. A humorous dialogue with perfect two year old pronunciation. They even show distinguished poetic knowledge of Haiku. Little concern over their orange butts...but they might be colored for the picture. ð???
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Hi Michael. Could you tell that their little bottoms were painted to look like pumpkins? Maybe you were joking, but not sure. It was all in fun and supposed to be adorable, but everyone else has loved it. Thanks for your review and kind words my dear friend.
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I 🥰. Good luck with the contest.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, this poem is hysterical. I love those little chubby babies.
Perfect photo choice. A pleasure to read. This poem made me laugh.
Mission accomplished. Job well done. LateBloomer
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Hello author, this poem is hysterical. I love those little chubby babies.
Perfect photo choice. A pleasure to read. This poem made me laugh.
Mission accomplished. Job well done. LateBloomer
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Why thank you very very much Margaret! As always you are so sweet and I appreciate your kind and fun comments. I have gotten so many smiles from the contagious happy reviews! Thank you for your laughter!
Comment from Raul1
This is a flat out hilarious and very funny poem you have penned for the contest. It is interesting and it made me laugh all the way through the end. Excellent work! Good luck!
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This is a flat out hilarious and very funny poem you have penned for the contest. It is interesting and it made me laugh all the way through the end. Excellent work! Good luck!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Thank so much Raul! Everyone has been having so much fun with this that the laughter has been contagious. Thanks for the returned smile you gave me.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Wendy G
Super image! Fun and humorous poem to go with it. The words are very original and creative and did indeed make me laugh. Best wishes for your fine entry.
Wendy
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Super image! Fun and humorous poem to go with it. The words are very original and creative and did indeed make me laugh. Best wishes for your fine entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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I thank you so much Wendy, for your very kind and fun comments about the picture and the poem. It feels so good to hear that people are smiling big or laughing. That makes my whole day as it is so contagious.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I know not how to give five and a half stars and I don't believe the 5-7-5 is to be rated that high but the picture is worth at least six stars and more if it could be given. Cute.
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I know not how to give five and a half stars and I don't believe the 5-7-5 is to be rated that high but the picture is worth at least six stars and more if it could be given. Cute.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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Wow Tom, that is a very nice compliment. Thank you. Yes, maybe not as hard as a regular poem, but it takes a lot of changing things around until it feels right. However my dear friend, I appreciate the thought every bit as much. And I thank you so vey much for your kind comments.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! This is just too cute! Where in the world did you find such a picture and of course, it is pumpkin season so those two "booty-full" pumpkin butts are great to bring some cheer! Best wishes in the contest!
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Lol! This is just too cute! Where in the world did you find such a picture and of course, it is pumpkin season so those two "booty-full" pumpkin butts are great to bring some cheer! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2022
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OH Helen, I like your booty-full much better than my boo-ti-full. Do you mind if I use it? Booty just fits even better than my boo. I just thank you so much for your lovely comments. You made my day, my dear friend as your excitement of things always ends up being so contagious. You are so sweet and I appreciate it so so much!!
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I'm honored you liked my "booty-full" but yours was much more original. It's completely up to you if you want to use it. 💖