One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this Haibun with us. I because a few years ago. They were popular on the site. Everybody was writing them. Not so much now, for some reason.
The new patient sits next to me at the edge of me (because of the definition of 'next to' and 'beside', when it's people it should read 'patient sits beside me' )
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you for sharing this Haibun with us. I because a few years ago. They were popular on the site. Everybody was writing them. Not so much now, for some reason.
The new patient sits next to me at the edge of me (because of the definition of 'next to' and 'beside', when it's people it should read 'patient sits beside me' )
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Hello,
Barbara, I don't know why fanstorians don't write more Japanese Poetry, I love it. Haibun is a great type of poem. How wonderful of you to take the time to read and review my haibun. I am happy you like it. Have a great day.
Gypsy
"Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn." - Ralph Waldo Emerson
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved that film, and those people are vulnerable and need to be protected from society. Mental illness used to be a stigma but so many people suffer from some kind of mental illness these days that it has become commonplace, your words here say it all, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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I loved that film, and those people are vulnerable and need to be protected from society. Mental illness used to be a stigma but so many people suffer from some kind of mental illness these days that it has become commonplace, your words here say it all, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Hello,
Dolly,
Thank you very much, I am happy you like it. Have a great day.
Gypsy
"Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn." - Ralph Waldo Emerson
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a sad story of three long paragraphs of prose and one Haiku sums it up with eleven syllables.
It's a unattractive life there. You did a good job describing it. I need to see the movie but I'm not sure I want to after reading this piece.
Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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What a sad story of three long paragraphs of prose and one Haiku sums it up with eleven syllables.
It's a unattractive life there. You did a good job describing it. I need to see the movie but I'm not sure I want to after reading this piece.
Well done.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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I should write a note in my author notes section. The haibun and the movie are not related, other than it's about a mental hospital and how mentally ill people may feel. I just like the picture and the title.
Thank you very much, I am happy you like it. Have a great day.
Gypsy
"Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn." - Ralph Waldo Emerson
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your nutty Haibun poem- good picture presentation of the Asylum- scrambled words lends itself to the theme- pointing out how disjointed they are in that environment- where meditation keeps the piece in an open setting- keeping displays of aggression to a minimum - for the safety of all - patients and caregiver as well. "A brief moment in life" - is probably optimistic- sadly- good job
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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I like your nutty Haibun poem- good picture presentation of the Asylum- scrambled words lends itself to the theme- pointing out how disjointed they are in that environment- where meditation keeps the piece in an open setting- keeping displays of aggression to a minimum - for the safety of all - patients and caregiver as well. "A brief moment in life" - is probably optimistic- sadly- good job
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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AP,
Thank you very much, I am happy you like it. Have a great day.
Gypsy
"Every sunset brings the promise of a new dawn." - Ralph Waldo Emerson
Comment from aryr
I loved the picture, it was a group picture of 'one flew over the cuckoo's nest,' Gypsy. This was a great haibun. It showed the path of the mentally ill. Thank you for providing the information. Blessed Be n Hugs!
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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I loved the picture, it was a group picture of 'one flew over the cuckoo's nest,' Gypsy. This was a great haibun. It showed the path of the mentally ill. Thank you for providing the information. Blessed Be n Hugs!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much, Aryr. I appreciate the review and kind words. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome, Gypsy. Blessed Be n Hugs!
Comment from royowen
I think you've done this proud, who could forget that movie? And Jack Nicholson's role, the perfect actor for the part...those eyes, beautifully written Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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I think you've done this proud, who could forget that movie? And Jack Nicholson's role, the perfect actor for the part...those eyes, beautifully written Gypsy, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Roy,
I love that movie, is one of my favorite and Jack is one of my favorite actors. I am glad you like it. Thank you very much for the kind review.
Gypsy hugs
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Well done
Comment from Thomas Blanks
1) I loved that movie.
2) Great Idea to turn it into a post like this.
3) Quicksand mind is a great concept.
Question: Did you purposely misuse the verb on the predicate adjective?
I wish I were dead is the correct form, not I wish I was dead. I assume you did it on purpose.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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1) I loved that movie.
2) Great Idea to turn it into a post like this.
3) Quicksand mind is a great concept.
Question: Did you purposely misuse the verb on the predicate adjective?
I wish I were dead is the correct form, not I wish I was dead. I assume you did it on purpose.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Hello, Thomas, I corrected it, another reviewer let me know. Thank you for the exceptional six stars review and helpful feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Carlos' girl
"When I wake up is visitation time" should be when I wake up it is visitation time".
This is funny but for all the wrong reasons. Sort of like an anti-social teenager lol. Very Sylvia Plath. But at the end we realize this is to be taken seriously after all with the 800 number, etc.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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"When I wake up is visitation time" should be when I wake up it is visitation time".
This is funny but for all the wrong reasons. Sort of like an anti-social teenager lol. Very Sylvia Plath. But at the end we realize this is to be taken seriously after all with the 800 number, etc.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, you are very kind. Yes, it's not meant to be funny but human nature often is.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, you are very kind.
Gypsy hugs
Gypsy hugs
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Ive been there lol sleepy from medication. Face down on the bed til all day. I also was an activities shirker.
Comment from Bill Schott
This haibun, One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest, makes me feel that the speaker is not really crazy, like McMurphy in the story. In that case, the apparent numbness of the disturbed mind does not buffer the cruel realities of the institution.
Found this: When I wake up (it) is visitation time...
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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This haibun, One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest, makes me feel that the speaker is not really crazy, like McMurphy in the story. In that case, the apparent numbness of the disturbed mind does not buffer the cruel realities of the institution.
Found this: When I wake up (it) is visitation time...
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Bill,
Thank goodness for reviewers, I need all the help I can get. I will correct it. Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, you are very kind.
Gypsy hugs
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Comment from Heather Knight
This is a very interesting form that I would like to try one day. The topic you chose is a tough one: society still has a long way to go to fully accept mental illness without prejudice.
I saw the film for the first time not long ago and I found it bittersweet. Really good.
Very well written and classy as usual.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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This is a very interesting form that I would like to try one day. The topic you chose is a tough one: society still has a long way to go to fully accept mental illness without prejudice.
I saw the film for the first time not long ago and I found it bittersweet. Really good.
Very well written and classy as usual.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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One flew over the cuckoo's nest is one of my favorite movies. Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, you are very kind.
Gypsy hugs