Bamboo Moon
a 5-7-5 poem23 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Love the double entendre of the final line. The moon is illuminating the bamboo while the narrator is being illuminated through the action of meditating. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Love the double entendre of the final line. The moon is illuminating the bamboo while the narrator is being illuminated through the action of meditating. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much Helen!!
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I love your 5/7/5 poem. Great imagery of the bamboo moon. I like the presentation too. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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I love your 5/7/5 poem. Great imagery of the bamboo moon. I like the presentation too. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thanks so much Gypsy!!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from royowen
Displaying your skill and adaptability is quite a good thing to do, as always Melissa, and this 5/7/5 is a good example of that versatility my friend, a good last line, which completes a good entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Displaying your skill and adaptability is quite a good thing to do, as always Melissa, and this 5/7/5 is a good example of that versatility my friend, a good last line, which completes a good entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you so much sweet Roy. So appreciate you and your comments! :)
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Is this faintly Japanese Melissa? A serene and peaceful write and I just want to jump inside your poem and enjoy the view, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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Is this faintly Japanese Melissa? A serene and peaceful write and I just want to jump inside your poem and enjoy the view, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you Dolly. I will jump in with you and we will just sit under that gorgeous moon and speak of poetry. :)
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
Beautiful picture to accompany your lovely words. I like the idea of a pale bamboo moon, as the full moon seems to be surrounded by fields of bamboo. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Beautiful picture to accompany your lovely words. I like the idea of a pale bamboo moon, as the full moon seems to be surrounded by fields of bamboo. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you Carol! :)
Melissa
Comment from Mark D. R.
Melissa,
I am calmed by this contest entry. Do like your combo of words and illustration to match the feel for your poem.
Mark
P.S. Never care to know when the three dot ellipsis requires a space before and after (-;
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Melissa,
I am calmed by this contest entry. Do like your combo of words and illustration to match the feel for your poem.
Mark
P.S. Never care to know when the three dot ellipsis requires a space before and after (-;
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Hello there Mark. I am glad you liked this 5-7-5 form. They are always a challenge as you well know. I always use ellipsis whenever I like, irregardless of what the rules are. LOL. They are so fun. ;). Thank you!
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
I like this, Melissa. Just when you think there can be no new adjectives for "moon," you give us "bamboo." And your last line is perfect with its double meaning.
I started yoga again last week. I find this poem to be oh so true. And with Halloween coming, I like to think about the Harvest Moon.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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I like this, Melissa. Just when you think there can be no new adjectives for "moon," you give us "bamboo." And your last line is perfect with its double meaning.
I started yoga again last week. I find this poem to be oh so true. And with Halloween coming, I like to think about the Harvest Moon.
Nice job.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Hi Debbie. Thank you so much for your lovely words. I like the thought of sitting and thinking while looking at a pale moon. So glad you like it.
Melissa
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I like the phrase bamboo moon. What a great mindset for meditation. I also like the consonant connection between Meditation and Illumination, Bamboo and Moon.
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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I like the phrase bamboo moon. What a great mindset for meditation. I also like the consonant connection between Meditation and Illumination, Bamboo and Moon.
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Hey Lisa. Thank you. I really liked that artwork and wanted to write about a bamboo moon... it spoke to me LOL. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Abilene Riley
Very nice little haiku that evokes serene feelings. I feel like it's perfectly written for thus time of the year, when the moon seems to illuminate our meditations even more powerfully.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Very nice little haiku that evokes serene feelings. I feel like it's perfectly written for thus time of the year, when the moon seems to illuminate our meditations even more powerfully.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Thank you very much Abilene!! I am glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Douglas Goff
My floors are bamboo, but that's probably not what you are going for here.
Great picture. Gives it a surreal feeling.
Nice Haiku. I like your work!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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My floors are bamboo, but that's probably not what you are going for here.
Great picture. Gives it a surreal feeling.
Nice Haiku. I like your work!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2022
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Haha... thanks Douglas... no, bamboo flooring was not on my mind. Glad you enjoyed it.
Melissa