The Morning After
Unfortunate incident, for an innocent man.36 total reviews
Comment from Thesis
This is a well written story. The scene setting, descriptive language, and stereotypes for the detectives, portray a very confused victim.
The mystery lingers, but it doesn't seem like anyone will aid the character to uncover what really happened that night.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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This is a well written story. The scene setting, descriptive language, and stereotypes for the detectives, portray a very confused victim.
The mystery lingers, but it doesn't seem like anyone will aid the character to uncover what really happened that night.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, Thesis, for your kind words and generous review. I tried to create many questions, with few answers, hoping to make readers think and decide where they want the story to go. Thanks for taking time to read and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Much appreciated!
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My pleasure.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Ric, Good one, do we have another series going here? There are too many unanswered questions for this to end. Your writing is fast-paced, fun, and has great word choices, and is excellent as usual. Good work. Terry.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Ric, Good one, do we have another series going here? There are too many unanswered questions for this to end. Your writing is fast-paced, fun, and has great word choices, and is excellent as usual. Good work. Terry.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Terry, for your kind words and generous review. I tried to create more questions than answers with this one. Hoping that readers would have to use their own minds to decipher and decide what happens. I intended it to be a stand alone, giving readers a break from the long and drawn out stuff. But so many have asked that I keep it going that, I might have to reconsider. LOL. Much appreciated!
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Good thinking, either way.
Comment from Sally Law
Par excellance! This is fast moving and intriguing. A masterful write and six worthy. Poor guy, I understand his situation. Sounds like there are more games afoot! I'm staying tuned.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Par excellance! This is fast moving and intriguing. A masterful write and six worthy. Poor guy, I understand his situation. Sounds like there are more games afoot! I'm staying tuned.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, Sal, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I tried to create more questions than answers with this one. Making readers think and use their own minds to decide what happens. I intended this to be a stand alone, but who knows now that a few have asked that I keep it going. I thought they'd all be worn out with Tucker. LOL. I always appreciate reading your stories and receiving your reviews!
Comment from rockinm76233
Well glad to see you are back at it. I enjoyed your story so far but bet it's a chapter in a book. If so things are looking good. You like the cops and robbers type of writing I bet. Either way good job.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Well glad to see you are back at it. I enjoyed your story so far but bet it's a chapter in a book. If so things are looking good. You like the cops and robbers type of writing I bet. Either way good job.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, J.R., for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I tried to create more questions than answers with this one. Hoping to make readers think and decide what happens for themselves. It was written as a stand alone that leave you hanging. But so many have asked that I keep it going, that I might have to consider it. LOL. I've had withdrawals every day for the last week or so without your posts. Get busy! I need my morning fix. I hope all is well in your world! I appreciate YOU!
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Well Ive posted all my books I think. I may post some short stories. We will see. Your Bengals looked good yesterday.
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I thought your Cowboys looked much better. They out played the Bengals from start to finish. Congrats on a big win!
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well let's just say the cowboys showed up kind of.
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I would figure you to be a hard boot! LOL.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was terrifying, Ric! How easy it would be to frame someone, especially if the nurse on duty is either in on the frame-up, or the doctor is who told her to give him a sedative to 'calm' him. The detectives weren't that bothered even though what Richard told them made a whole lot of sense. They never even thought to question it. Well done, my friend, this was a fabulous story. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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That was terrifying, Ric! How easy it would be to frame someone, especially if the nurse on duty is either in on the frame-up, or the doctor is who told her to give him a sedative to 'calm' him. The detectives weren't that bothered even though what Richard told them made a whole lot of sense. They never even thought to question it. Well done, my friend, this was a fabulous story. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, Sandra, for the extra special six-star review and kind words for a story that was written more to create questions than answers. But it could happen to any one of us any day. And if the authorities think they have a clear cut killer, they stop looking for the guilty party. Glad you liked it. I appreciate reading your stories and your encouraging reviews!
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You are very welcome, Ric. You should write more. 😘😊
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Now you've set us up for your next series, since I assume you don't intend to leave us dangling.
You've done a good job of introducing our character, the first paragraph makes the reader believe that Hoskins is telling the truth.
Good dialogue with the coppers, introducing questions that will need to be answered.
We'll written, Ric. The only thing I wondered about was the detective with a laptop to pull up Facebook. Why would he have a computer with him? He could pull it up on his phone.
Looking forward to the next one:-)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Now you've set us up for your next series, since I assume you don't intend to leave us dangling.
You've done a good job of introducing our character, the first paragraph makes the reader believe that Hoskins is telling the truth.
Good dialogue with the coppers, introducing questions that will need to be answered.
We'll written, Ric. The only thing I wondered about was the detective with a laptop to pull up Facebook. Why would he have a computer with him? He could pull it up on his phone.
Looking forward to the next one:-)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Pam, for your kind words and generous review. This story is one of those where I started writing and was done in less than an hour. I intended to create many questions and offer few, if any, answers. Sort of let the readers' minds answer the questions to suit themselves. Hoping they could invision how easily the same nightmare could happen to them. Your question about the laptop to pull up Facebook is one that was answered by a detective friend who goes nowhere without what looks like a woman's handbag hanging on his arm. When I asked why he carried his purse, he said to keep his computer with him. I asked why not just use his phone, he replied to save time and effort, typing faster and it has a bigger screen to share more detailed and clearer information, among other things. Much appreciated!
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A great read. Full of suspense and intrigue and mystery. You weave in the background about the witness protection program effortlessly in the discussion, as you did with the facts about the events of last night. Very well written.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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A great read. Full of suspense and intrigue and mystery. You weave in the background about the witness protection program effortlessly in the discussion, as you did with the facts about the events of last night. Very well written.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, Tim, for the extra special six-star review and kind words. I tried to create more questions than answers. Letting readers use their own minds to decide what happens. I'm glad you liked it. I always appreciate reading your posts, and receiving your reviews!
Comment from lyenochka
Oh no! So this sweet nurse, Patti, is also in on the framing of the poor narrator? Great storytelling, Ric! Lots of action right from the beginning. Now if this were Tucker, he'd find a way to get away!
and walked away." (no quotes here as it isn't part of the speech.)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Oh no! So this sweet nurse, Patti, is also in on the framing of the poor narrator? Great storytelling, Ric! Lots of action right from the beginning. Now if this were Tucker, he'd find a way to get away!
and walked away." (no quotes here as it isn't part of the speech.)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, Helen, for your extra special six-star review. I tried to create more questions than answers in this one. Letting readers decide what's happening themselves. Is nurse Patti in on the frame or is she just following the doctors instructions. Maybe the doctor is a bad guy. LOL. I'm glad you like it. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from karenina
Well! Look who has dropped in just in time for my weekly batch of sixes to arrive!
(Actually I had ten reviews to answer and saved yours for last...which ticked my noisy clock past midnight!)
Fortuitous for both of us!
Ah, come ON, Ric! You can't leave this as a "stand-alone."
There are sooooo many directions you can take this!
Zambrano/Hoskins could be guilty as sin! Set up his own fake FB page!
More please!
Karenina
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Well! Look who has dropped in just in time for my weekly batch of sixes to arrive!
(Actually I had ten reviews to answer and saved yours for last...which ticked my noisy clock past midnight!)
Fortuitous for both of us!
Ah, come ON, Ric! You can't leave this as a "stand-alone."
There are sooooo many directions you can take this!
Zambrano/Hoskins could be guilty as sin! Set up his own fake FB page!
More please!
Karenina
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, Karenina, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I truly had planned to leave readers with more questions than answers to let them decide for themselves. But surprisingly, so many people have asked that I keep it going, I might have to reconsider. LOL. I appreciate YOU!
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MIGHT? Do I have to start a PETITION?
LOL...
I know you'll acquiesce to your loyal fans...
Right? Right, Ric? No nagging, but right?
(No pressure! :) )
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
You definitely have found a niche for yourself.
This is an excellent crime story!!
You have written a winner here.
It has all of the elements that make a great story.
Intrigue...
Well developed characters...
Suspense...
Creativity...
Strong plot..
The sensory details pull the reader into the world that you have created, thus allowing them to actively participate in the story and connect to the characters.
Love the ending!
Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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You definitely have found a niche for yourself.
This is an excellent crime story!!
You have written a winner here.
It has all of the elements that make a great story.
Intrigue...
Well developed characters...
Suspense...
Creativity...
Strong plot..
The sensory details pull the reader into the world that you have created, thus allowing them to actively participate in the story and connect to the characters.
Love the ending!
Well done!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much, K.L., for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I tried to create more questions than answers in this one. Hoping to leave readers desperate to figure things out in their own minds. But so many have asked they I keep it going that, I might have to reconsider. I'm glad you like it. Much appreciated!