One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Beautifully stated Gypsy. I am sorry you lost your mom at such a young and impressionable age. This poem reads as a lullaby because of the three repeated words at the end of each verse. The presentation is so well-done.
I would drop the first line one or two spaces down to balance the poem better on the black background. You have lots of black space at the bottom.
I pray your sister, Mina, gets better soon.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Beautifully stated Gypsy. I am sorry you lost your mom at such a young and impressionable age. This poem reads as a lullaby because of the three repeated words at the end of each verse. The presentation is so well-done.
I would drop the first line one or two spaces down to balance the poem better on the black background. You have lots of black space at the bottom.
I pray your sister, Mina, gets better soon.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Hello, Sandra,
Thank you very much for for your kind review and feedback. I added the line space.
Gypsy
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You are welcome. The spacing looks better now.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this pray need with us. I will pray. I know many here on FanStory who will join in with prayers. We are a praying community. The poem is very well written.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Thank you for sharing this pray need with us. I will pray. I know many here on FanStory who will join in with prayers. We are a praying community. The poem is very well written.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Barbara
Yes, i like the picture too. Thank you very much for for your kind review and feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
Of course I'll pray for your sister, in fact I already have, this, of course, is so beautiful written, I love these marvellous, this is such a great post, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Of course I'll pray for your sister, in fact I already have, this, of course, is so beautiful written, I love these marvellous, this is such a great post, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Roy
Thank you very much for the prayers.
Thank you very much for for your kind review and feedback.
Gypsy
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for sharing about your sister, Mina. Loved the gentle, rocking lullaby of your poem. I like that your reference your mother's lullabies which comforted you and you send comfort to your sister. We are praying with you!
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Thank you for sharing about your sister, Mina. Loved the gentle, rocking lullaby of your poem. I like that your reference your mother's lullabies which comforted you and you send comfort to your sister. We are praying with you!
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2022
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Thank you, Helen, you write the most beautiful heartfelt prayers. I really appreciate it. Mina and I were very close growing up. She is 10 years older than I so when my mother died she filled the void somewhat. She is a positive and joyful person and has a beautiful voice. I'm really worried. She is getting a pace maker and antibiotics for a pulmonary infection. She has smoked all her life. On top of that she is having problems with her liver. Anyway, hopefully she will be alright.
Thank you very much for your time and kind review, as always. Hugs!
Marival