The Chronicals Of Bethica: The Rise
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Comment from lancellot
This was a very interesting chapter. I enjoyed the groveling before the God of the dead. And he was correct, no matter what people win or lose, he will win more souls.
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"There are many chambers in my kingdom. They house many things. Some are set aside for those who disappoint me.["]
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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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This was a very interesting chapter. I enjoyed the groveling before the God of the dead. And he was correct, no matter what people win or lose, he will win more souls.
notes:
"There are many chambers in my kingdom. They house many things. Some are set aside for those who disappoint me.["]
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much. I made the correction. Blessings.
Comment from royowen
Barthod the Shaman comes before Nalchael the Lord of the underworld, to promise to destroy Gangus and their host and give a promise of destroying them, but the god promises if he doesn't he will occupy the space that Gangus. Afterwards Gangus congratulates Dinary on his victory, but Dinary says his dad is the bravest of them all, mutual admiration society. Beautifully written Amahra, blessings Roy
Typo : The (Sherman's) spirit. Shaman's?
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Barthod the Shaman comes before Nalchael the Lord of the underworld, to promise to destroy Gangus and their host and give a promise of destroying them, but the god promises if he doesn't he will occupy the space that Gangus. Afterwards Gangus congratulates Dinary on his victory, but Dinary says his dad is the bravest of them all, mutual admiration society. Beautifully written Amahra, blessings Roy
Typo : The (Sherman's) spirit. Shaman's?
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Roy. I made the correction. Blessings.
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Most welcome Amahra
Comment from dellsworthpoet
This chapter flows well. The pace is good. The images are crisp. The language is appropriate for an epic tale. The dialogue is believable. It seems well edited.
Thanks for a good read.
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This chapter flows well. The pace is good. The images are crisp. The language is appropriate for an epic tale. The dialogue is believable. It seems well edited.
Thanks for a good read.
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much.
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You are welcome.
