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Blended Reality

Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "A Summer Storm in the Blue Ridge"
A collection of stories: Some True, some not

26 total reviews 
Comment from Tpa
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Remarkable composition pertaining to a storm. Vivid images well described like 'tendrils of sun rays, lick of winds' An adventurous and exciting ride through Mother Nature climatic changes. NICE WORK,

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
    Tpa, thank you. Prose writing is very new terrain for me.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
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An extremely well-written story. Your very descriptive words made this story so interesting and captivating.
Good luck with the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
    Mary, thank you! Prose writing is new terrain for me and I appreciate your validation.
Comment from Paul McFarland
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Nicely told. The narrative is very smooth, and the reader is well hooked after a paragraph or two. You finish it off very nicely with some good advice.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
    Thanks Paul.
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
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Nicely descriptive, I could imagine myself in that storm with you. In fact, even now I am kind of breathing like it's hot and humid and I'm battling the rain. I very much appreciated my trip to North Carolina today! Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
    Donna G. I am so grateful for your validation.
Comment from zanya
Exceptional
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So expertly told here, the prelude, the storm and its aftermath. The reader feels almost part of the drama which bears resemblance also to a movie clip - has to be in the winner's enclosure -has my vote - any more like this in the repertoire ?

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
    Zanya, Wow, and wow! I am not a writer of prose, but I found myself caught in the river of life, started writing and the words just floated in. I can not express my feeling of deep gratitude for your validation! 🙏🙏🎶🎶🎶🎶
Comment from Sarah Robin
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I enjoyed reading your story. The descriptions of the approaching storm were spot on. And, your descriptions of Blue Ridge made me homesick. You did a great job! Tar Heel Sarah

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
    Hey Sarah, then you know! I am so incredibly honored by your validation! Thank you!
Comment from Thomas Blanks
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A Summer Storm in the Blue Ridge is a well-written and descriptive story. Reading about the lightning almost raise the hair on my arms. If the author's job is to make the reader feel like they are there instead of just being told about something, this piece succeeds.

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
    Thomas, Wow! Thanks many time over, While I am not a writer of prose, I dipped my toe into the river of life and let the words float to the surface. Best always!
Comment from Wendy G
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A very descriptive piece about the storm and its prelude. The reader could feel your thoughts and emotions as the day progressed, and the increasing fear because such an event was not typical. Well written. Good wishes for your story in the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
    Wendy, while I am not a writer of prose, I dipped my toes into this river of life and just let the words flow. Thank you for reviewing this little entry.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Very well-told tale about an approaching storm. I lived 5 years in the Rockies and never saw a storm like yours, but the wind in the Rockies is deadly. I did notice a couple problems you might want to fix: after "open land" you have some weird symbols and a missing word in . . . made going ( ) slope . . . Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
    Carol,Thank you! While I am not a writer of prose, I dipped my toes into this river of life and just let the words flow. Thank you for reviewing this little entry.
Comment from RodG
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This action-packed narrative kept me enthralled from start to finish. You are especially adept at SETTING THE SCENE and making the reader see and feel the approaching storm. Better yet is your description of your downhill rush and that rushing creek that almost trapped you. You have the tools to create a thriller, Writer! Great job. Rod

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2022


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
    Rod, while I am not a writer of prose, I dipped my toes into this river of life and just let the words flow. Thank you for reviewing this little entry.
reply by RodG on 22-Aug-2022
    You are very welcome.