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Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your beautiful and wonderful poetry. It is clear and concise. Exceptional work! No mistakes found in your poetry. I like it. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your beautiful and wonderful poetry. It is clear and concise. Exceptional work! No mistakes found in your poetry. I like it. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much for reviewing and for the six stars. Greatly appreciated.
Wendy
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You're welcome!
Comment from royowen
Well done with this Wendy, your word power is amazing, the collusion of words and inventive ways to express them, took the focus ofbthe clever meaning, but what the heck, this is well done Wendy, blessings Roy
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Well done with this Wendy, your word power is amazing, the collusion of words and inventive ways to express them, took the focus ofbthe clever meaning, but what the heck, this is well done Wendy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you for reviewing Roy, and for your thoughts about this one. All appreciated.
Wendy
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Most welcome
Comment from Paul McFarland
I think we are on the same page. One of my goals in life, from now on, is to stay home. I am lucky to live in the country. What were you thinking when you wrote , "Man's attempt at hibernation"?
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I think we are on the same page. One of my goals in life, from now on, is to stay home. I am lucky to live in the country. What were you thinking when you wrote , "Man's attempt at hibernation"?
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I live on the far edge of suburbia, nearer to country with river, lakes, parks, national parks and hills. Prefer staying away from the city!
In that line I was thinking of my preference to be away from the boiling cauldron of humanity, and the fact that if one lives in the city one tends to emotionally withdraw/hibernate/hide away in apartments. It is so much harder to establish meaningful friendships and relationships with the superficiality of city living.
Thank you so much for reviewing - I always appreciate it.
Wendy
Comment from karenina
You're right! This was not what I expected from you and isn't that great? It's so nice to let the muse just have at it! The fast pace of this poem mimicked so well the frenetic feel of city chaos. I prefer to stay away from a large metropolis but, believe me, when I must go, I feel just as you've so brilliantly expressed!
Each verse is a gem, but I resonated with:
"Jostle, jangle
What a tangle
Harsh vibrations
Weird sensations"
My brain feels like scrambled eggs after a day in the city!
Keep coloring outside your lines! It's a kick!
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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You're right! This was not what I expected from you and isn't that great? It's so nice to let the muse just have at it! The fast pace of this poem mimicked so well the frenetic feel of city chaos. I prefer to stay away from a large metropolis but, believe me, when I must go, I feel just as you've so brilliantly expressed!
Each verse is a gem, but I resonated with:
"Jostle, jangle
What a tangle
Harsh vibrations
Weird sensations"
My brain feels like scrambled eggs after a day in the city!
Keep coloring outside your lines! It's a kick!
Karenina
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much for your super review - so encouraging! Yes, to be honest, this one mostly wrote itself, and I love that feeling.
I both like and dislike the result. It's not a poem to "like" yet it achieves that aim - of verbalising (and rejecting) that frenetic jarring pace of superficial life.
Wendy
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It is a poem to like, actually! Better than kicking a pillow! I felt so "Zen" after getting all that tension out of my system!
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Yes, you are right! Definitely better than kicking a pillow! Lol! Many thanks - you gave me a good laugh.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is, maybe, not your style, but definitely well written. You have some great rhyming words chosen for your poem. It is obviously, intentionally noisy and jarring and makes lots of good points.
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This is, maybe, not your style, but definitely well written. You have some great rhyming words chosen for your poem. It is obviously, intentionally noisy and jarring and makes lots of good points.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you Verna! You are right. It is not a poem to "like", because it does express that jarring superficial harsh reality of city living. I appreciate your review, as always.
Wendy
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Wendy,
Terrific exercise in rhyming, onomatopoeia, and action in a city. Not my cup of tea to live any closer to Saint John than we do. We moved from the country, sleepy Grand Bay, to the outskirts of the city in September of 2015. It is nice to be closer to doctor appointments, AJ's Restaurant, two of our kids and their families, etc. But I don't care for the traffic or the hustle and bustle. I'd prefer farther out in the country actually. Preferably, with a brook nearby for fishing, and woods for hunting partridge in the fall.
My favorite verse,
"Jostle, jangle
What a tangle
Harsh vibrations
Weird sensations"
One trip to the city center per year is good for me... shopping and lunch in uptown Saint John. My favorite uptown spot is the City Market. You name it... it's there!
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Hi Wendy,
Terrific exercise in rhyming, onomatopoeia, and action in a city. Not my cup of tea to live any closer to Saint John than we do. We moved from the country, sleepy Grand Bay, to the outskirts of the city in September of 2015. It is nice to be closer to doctor appointments, AJ's Restaurant, two of our kids and their families, etc. But I don't care for the traffic or the hustle and bustle. I'd prefer farther out in the country actually. Preferably, with a brook nearby for fishing, and woods for hunting partridge in the fall.
My favorite verse,
"Jostle, jangle
What a tangle
Harsh vibrations
Weird sensations"
One trip to the city center per year is good for me... shopping and lunch in uptown Saint John. My favorite uptown spot is the City Market. You name it... it's there!
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you Kimbob. I'm like you. We live on the far edge of suburbia, nearer to country with parks and national parks, lakes, river, hills, yet accessible to all we need without going into the city. I have only been into the city a couple of times in the last three years. Love your review, appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
This is a fun poem that is a play with words. So great that you could find all these rhymes and string them into a strong poem about city vibes. I like the way it ends too, but my favorite section is "Jostle, jangle
What a tangle."
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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This is a fun poem that is a play with words. So great that you could find all these rhymes and string them into a strong poem about city vibes. I like the way it ends too, but my favorite section is "Jostle, jangle
What a tangle."
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you very much Kate. Quite a departure from my usual. I appreciate your thoughts.
Wendy
Comment from Pantygynt
I was going to say this was a departure from yourt usual style, but you said it yourself. Your abhorrence of frenetic city life comes over very clearly in this rhythmically jangling piece of verse. I can't say I like it but it is very effective at doing what it sets out to do.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I was going to say this was a departure from yourt usual style, but you said it yourself. Your abhorrence of frenetic city life comes over very clearly in this rhythmically jangling piece of verse. I can't say I like it but it is very effective at doing what it sets out to do.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you Jim. Yes, I agree - it is not a poem one would like, but I am glad that makes it effective for accomplishing the aim. I appreciate your review!
Wendy
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I'm so used to reading your prose that this took me by surprise! Reading it was like riding a roller coaster at high speed!!
Perhaps you should do "different" more often:-)
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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I'm so used to reading your prose that this took me by surprise! Reading it was like riding a roller coaster at high speed!!
Perhaps you should do "different" more often:-)
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much Pam! I knew this one would shock a few people! I think I achieved the aim of expressing my distaste for the jarring clashing city life. Lol. Many thanks for the wonderful rating and the six stars. I greatly value the honour.
Wendy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is wonderful. Not only did you accurately describe living in the city, but the pace of this poem also hit it perfectly. This is some great writing. I am not a fan of city living. I've had to do it when my husband was in the military. I don't like it at all. Give me rural American. LOL
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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This is wonderful. Not only did you accurately describe living in the city, but the pace of this poem also hit it perfectly. This is some great writing. I am not a fan of city living. I've had to do it when my husband was in the military. I don't like it at all. Give me rural American. LOL
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much Barbara! I knew this one would shock a few people! I think I achieved the aim of expressing my distaste for the jarring clashing city life. Many thanks for the Exceptional rating and the six stars. I value the honour a great deal.
Wendy
