Assassin Who Would Not Listen
Did she take too many chances?12 total reviews
Comment from royowen
You've done an extra good job with this, a romance blossoming between two seperate types, one a henchman of a mutual acquaintance, you've woven a whole plot around this almost romance story, beautifully written, excellence in a flash fiction, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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You've done an extra good job with this, a romance blossoming between two seperate types, one a henchman of a mutual acquaintance, you've woven a whole plot around this almost romance story, beautifully written, excellence in a flash fiction, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Roy, for your exuberant response to my story.
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Well done
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is interesting. I would rethink your assassin screaming because two thugs grabbed her. That she didn't notice. The help being there at that time and place well... There is a lot of telling or exposition too. Be careful.
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Hmm, this is interesting. I would rethink your assassin screaming because two thugs grabbed her. That she didn't notice. The help being there at that time and place well... There is a lot of telling or exposition too. Be careful.
Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Lancellot, for sharing my story and your comments. Yes, there is a bit of coincidence, but her world?Las Vegas?is a strange one.