The Return
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Comment from Judy Lawless
Glad to hear you're feeling so much better, Sandra, and managed to complete another intriguing chapter to this story. I found nothing that needs attention. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Glad to hear you're feeling so much better, Sandra, and managed to complete another intriguing chapter to this story. I found nothing that needs attention. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Judy. I've been standing to type and been careful not to bend to help my ribs. My breathing is so much easier now, but I'm still feeling rather washed out, but I was told to expect that for a while because I'd been hit so hard. I can cope with that!! I'm on the mend, and that's what counts.You've all been so kind, I've been quite emotional.
I'm so pleased you enjoyed this chapter, I'm getting closer to the end now. Thank you so much for the sixth star, my friend, and this lovely review. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
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You?re most welcome, Sandra. You have an excellent writing style that keeps my attention.
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Aw Thank you! xxx
Comment from amahra
I'm really sorry I didn't start reading this at the beginning. The conflict that seems to be going on in this story appears to be right up my alley. People threatening and allegedly murdering each other over a Will? Good stuff.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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I'm really sorry I didn't start reading this at the beginning. The conflict that seems to be going on in this story appears to be right up my alley. People threatening and allegedly murdering each other over a Will? Good stuff.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2022
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Aw, thank you, that is so encouraging!! I've decided to write a series of mystery books with Bessie having more assignments through the centuries. I hope you'll join her? :)) Thank you, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment from alexisleech
What a wonderful chapter! As expected, the ghost scene with Gwendolyn and Jenkins was truly entertaining (you do it so well!) and the following scene involving Miles and Crankston-Smythe was intriguing, to say the least. At least Gwendolyn should be too scared to put Meg's life in danger, and the Brandon's are fast becoming the main suspects. Having said that, I'm sure you will make your readers go through a few more hoops before the murderer of Meg in the past is exposed.
I can't wait to find out!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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What a wonderful chapter! As expected, the ghost scene with Gwendolyn and Jenkins was truly entertaining (you do it so well!) and the following scene involving Miles and Crankston-Smythe was intriguing, to say the least. At least Gwendolyn should be too scared to put Meg's life in danger, and the Brandon's are fast becoming the main suspects. Having said that, I'm sure you will make your readers go through a few more hoops before the murderer of Meg in the past is exposed.
I can't wait to find out!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, my dear Alexis, for this fabulous review and the golden sixth star! Both mean such a lot. I'm glad you like me ghosty part, Bessie loves it when I do that to her!!!!! LOL. We are beginning to whittle down our suspects, and stop a few from getting started. Love and hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from dmt1967
This is another great chapter and I love this tying up loose ends chapter. Does this mean the book is coming to an end? I have enjoyed it a lot. Thank you for sharing and have a good week.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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This is another great chapter and I love this tying up loose ends chapter. Does this mean the book is coming to an end? I have enjoyed it a lot. Thank you for sharing and have a good week.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thanks so very much for this lovely review, Jackie!! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this chapter, I had such fun writing Bessie's part. There are a few chapters left, but yes, we are gradually getting there. You've been a great support, my friend, thank you big time for the golden star!! Love and Hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Sanku
God is great! Take care and with all our prayers you will soon be fully alright.
The novel is getting more and more exciting .i am waiting to see how the ghost and the non ghost will solve this mystery!!!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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God is great! Take care and with all our prayers you will soon be fully alright.
The novel is getting more and more exciting .i am waiting to see how the ghost and the non ghost will solve this mystery!!!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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I don't know what I would have done without you all, your are amazing, caring people, and I love you all. Thank you, Sanku.
And, thank you for another wonderful review, my friend, and the golden star! I think you're so kind. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from tfawcus
You've had great fun with the ghostly encounter, and the subsequent meeting between Miles and Crankston-Smythe makes a good contrast with its more impetuous pace. I'm enjoying this canter down the home straight!
I know this passage is direct speech and, therefore, there is more licence. However, I wondered if you might want to review the close proximity of really and actually:
Even though you told me I wasn't mentioned in Richard's will, you can't really be sure, can you? And for that reason alone, just in case I am, you want me out of the way. Well, let me reassure you. I can actually tell you, Gwendolyn, without even seeing the will, Richard most assuredly would not have mentioned me.
I'm fairly certain that finale requires no accent.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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You've had great fun with the ghostly encounter, and the subsequent meeting between Miles and Crankston-Smythe makes a good contrast with its more impetuous pace. I'm enjoying this canter down the home straight!
I know this passage is direct speech and, therefore, there is more licence. However, I wondered if you might want to review the close proximity of really and actually:
Even though you told me I wasn't mentioned in Richard's will, you can't really be sure, can you? And for that reason alone, just in case I am, you want me out of the way. Well, let me reassure you. I can actually tell you, Gwendolyn, without even seeing the will, Richard most assuredly would not have mentioned me.
I'm fairly certain that finale requires no accent.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for finding my nits, Tony, I've sorted them. I've take both 'really' and 'actually' out of that paragraph. They weren't needed. When I deleted them it read fine, so I didn't change them for other words. And I've taken the accent off of 'finale' I thought it was needed to change the sound of it. That's the joy of this site, I'm relearning all I have managed to forget over the last century! Lol.
Thank you very much for this helpful review, Tony, and the sixth star, both mean a lot to me. Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
How are you and your wife feeling now? Better, I hope. xxx
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Thanks for your concern, Sandra. I'm still plagued by extreme lethargy and a bassoon cough but on the mend. I have been feeling for you with your cracked ribs. I had them once years ago. Agony, especially when coughing or laughing.
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It's when I forget and bend, or, as you say, cough or laugh. If it wasn't for those, I think I can say I'm getting there. Writing takes my mind off it. I have my laptop on my breakfact bar, it's the perfect height for me to stand and work. Just rest up, Tony, you'll get there. I don't know what your weather is like, but for the first time in history, we are seeing 40+ degs, over 100+ fahrenheit, and London really is on fire! The fire engines are coming from all over to try and deal with them. Global warming is happening. ☹️ xxx
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I feel for you. 40C with July humidity must be unbearable. At least when we get those temperatures it's a dry heat.
We're going through one of our coldest winters ever. The world's crazy.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This feeling like we are winding up to an ending when Margot has to go home. She is not going to like it. The one thing I noticed is talk about calling the police. I'm not sure when this story is set, but I didn't think England had police until the Peelers and I thought they were mid-1800's. Could be wrong. But out in the country wouldn't the authority be the sheriff? Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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This feeling like we are winding up to an ending when Margot has to go home. She is not going to like it. The one thing I noticed is talk about calling the police. I'm not sure when this story is set, but I didn't think England had police until the Peelers and I thought they were mid-1800's. Could be wrong. But out in the country wouldn't the authority be the sheriff? Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Carol. This story is set in the market town of Romsey, Hampshire, in1886, when Meg was/should have been/ murdered. Before I began writing this story, I checked out all the relevent details and put them in my notebook. In fact, we haven't had sheriffs since way, way back. This is what I found out...
The Peeler is a nickname for a police constable who was a member of the first modern professional police force, the Metropolitan Police in London, and later, in Manchester, formed by Sir Robert Peel in 1829. Later called 'Bobbies', after his Christian name and that carried on until mid 20th century.
The first fully constituted police force formed in Hampshire was the Winchester City Police, founded in 1832. The Hampshire County Constabulary was established seven years later in December1839.
I'm so pleased you asked. I was able to use my research!! Lol, but I bet you didn't expect a history lesson when you mentioned it! Thanks again, my friend. I really appreciated your continued support and interest. Yes, we are slowly winding up now. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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I love history lessons or any kind of research. Sometimes I've gotten so involved in research that I never got around to writing what I was doing the research for.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Another sparkling chapter, full of deception, trickery and fun.
The plot slowly begins to take shape. It seems Cranky is a minor player in the scheme. It looks more and more like Lady Brandon is a the heart of the deception (and maybe even murder). :)
Suggestions:
It appear the "ly" gremlin was at work in the passage below.
Well, let me reassure you. I can [actually] tell you, Gwendolyn, without even seeing the will, Richard [most assuredly] would not have mentioned me. The main reason being, he [probably] despised me more than he detested you!'
But you don't. Lady Crawley is a respected and well-liked member of society[,] so I insist you stop upsetting her with all you (maybe add the comma)
Well done. Hope you're feeling better.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Hello Sandra,
Another sparkling chapter, full of deception, trickery and fun.
The plot slowly begins to take shape. It seems Cranky is a minor player in the scheme. It looks more and more like Lady Brandon is a the heart of the deception (and maybe even murder). :)
Suggestions:
It appear the "ly" gremlin was at work in the passage below.
Well, let me reassure you. I can [actually] tell you, Gwendolyn, without even seeing the will, Richard [most assuredly] would not have mentioned me. The main reason being, he [probably] despised me more than he detested you!'
But you don't. Lady Crawley is a respected and well-liked member of society[,] so I insist you stop upsetting her with all you (maybe add the comma)
Well done. Hope you're feeling better.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Robert, for another lovely review, and for pointing out the 'ly's. I've removed most of them, I think there is just one left in that sentence now. I've also added the comma. :)) While I was doing it, I noticed a couple of other nits and got rid of them. It doesn't matter how many times I go over it, there are always more still to find. :(
Thank you for the golden star, my friend, it means a lot. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Oh, Ms Bessie, what a fun time she had. I enjoyed reading this
chapter, Sandra. You gave readers some great information and
clues along the way. Margot as Meg has really come a long way
in dealing with issues/people. She showed strength many would
never have believed she possessed. I believe Gwen and Jenkins and
Mr. Cranky know their gig is up. It will be interesting to see if any of
them turn on the other in the end. Miles showed more of his anger
when dealing with the individuals involved in the scheme. Of course,
he has every right. I believe when all the bits and pieces are put
together, Miles and Meg will figure it out in time--with Bessie's help,
too. When Bessie acted as she did, sight unseen, that was great.
I imagine those scenes were fun to write.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Oh, Ms Bessie, what a fun time she had. I enjoyed reading this
chapter, Sandra. You gave readers some great information and
clues along the way. Margot as Meg has really come a long way
in dealing with issues/people. She showed strength many would
never have believed she possessed. I believe Gwen and Jenkins and
Mr. Cranky know their gig is up. It will be interesting to see if any of
them turn on the other in the end. Miles showed more of his anger
when dealing with the individuals involved in the scheme. Of course,
he has every right. I believe when all the bits and pieces are put
together, Miles and Meg will figure it out in time--with Bessie's help,
too. When Bessie acted as she did, sight unseen, that was great.
I imagine those scenes were fun to write.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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What a lovely review, Jan, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Bessie's part truly was fun to write. It was nice doing the funny parts, and then the serious part with Miles and Mr Cranky! (love that name, lol) Thank you, dear friend for the golden star, you are always so generous, I thank you muchly. Love and hugs, :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
What another fantastic continuation chapter, Sandra. My prayers continue with you, my friend, for a speedy and healthy recovery. This was great, I am so glad that Margot/Meg and Bessie were able to pull this off before Gwen and Jenkins, while Miles confronted Roger Crankston-Smythe. I really enjoyed the descriptive phrases you use throughout. Hugs!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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What another fantastic continuation chapter, Sandra. My prayers continue with you, my friend, for a speedy and healthy recovery. This was great, I am so glad that Margot/Meg and Bessie were able to pull this off before Gwen and Jenkins, while Miles confronted Roger Crankston-Smythe. I really enjoyed the descriptive phrases you use throughout. Hugs!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Ali. I love it that you are enjoying my story, and I appreciate you telling me what you liked about it. Have a wonderful week, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
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You are so very welcome, Sandra. Hugs!