The Return
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Comment from Judy Lawless
Oh, the plot thickens, Sandra! I can imagine how Bessie is going to make use of her invisible presence to assist Margaret. I can't wait to see the look on Gwendolyn's face. This is an exciting chapter. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Oh, the plot thickens, Sandra! I can imagine how Bessie is going to make use of her invisible presence to assist Margaret. I can't wait to see the look on Gwendolyn's face. This is an exciting chapter. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Judy, for another lovely review. Bessie will be having a wonderful time in the next chapter. 😊 I'm really glad you enjoyed this part, it took me ages to write. It's been such a tiring week, but I'm sure I'm over the worst of it. Thank you, dear friend. Your support has helped me through. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
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You are most welcome, Sandra. I hope you are indeed over the worst of COVID.
Comment from estory
I thought it was a great chapter, nice lively, emotional dialogue, and also very visual. I could see Miles and Fellows talking about how his father and connived to kill Meg and destroy her family, and that scene between Margot and Gwendollyn was terrific. The door closing in her face, the steely butler, and the icy staring Lady facing them down were all very well done. I also liked the invisible Bessie inserted here to keep Gwendollyn and her butler honest. Nice reference from Margot that she is there to keep an eye on them, mysteriously. estory
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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I thought it was a great chapter, nice lively, emotional dialogue, and also very visual. I could see Miles and Fellows talking about how his father and connived to kill Meg and destroy her family, and that scene between Margot and Gwendollyn was terrific. The door closing in her face, the steely butler, and the icy staring Lady facing them down were all very well done. I also liked the invisible Bessie inserted here to keep Gwendollyn and her butler honest. Nice reference from Margot that she is there to keep an eye on them, mysteriously. estory
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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What a really lovely review for this chapter, Estory, thank you so very much! I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my story, I'm having some fun with Bessie in the next chapter.😊
And thank you, my friend, for the sixth star, I appreciate them both, the review and the stars a lot. Sending love and hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment from alexisleech
What a beautifully crafted chapter. You managed to seamlessly take the reader through every scene, step by step, with just enough detail to hold our attention. Knowing how creative you are with 'ghost' encounters, I can't wait to find out what you have in store for us in the next chapter. Bravo!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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What a beautifully crafted chapter. You managed to seamlessly take the reader through every scene, step by step, with just enough detail to hold our attention. Knowing how creative you are with 'ghost' encounters, I can't wait to find out what you have in store for us in the next chapter. Bravo!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Aw, thank you, Alexis, what a lovely review. You're right, I love writing about ghosty things and Bessie enjoys it, too!!! LOL. Thanks dear friend. You never sent me the photo of your new communial garden!! Love and hugs, dear friend. Sandra xxxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
HAHAH, She has their attention now doesn't she. Just the mention of the Police can make a guilty person stand up and take notice that they are in danger of exposure. The pen and paper is going to be proof that Meg is not alone. Oh I can't wait! Hope you are better. Lots of Love. Nancy:) xxx
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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HAHAH, She has their attention now doesn't she. Just the mention of the Police can make a guilty person stand up and take notice that they are in danger of exposure. The pen and paper is going to be proof that Meg is not alone. Oh I can't wait! Hope you are better. Lots of Love. Nancy:) xxx
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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I've started it already, and having a lot of fun with Bessie as Gwendolyn's father's ghost. I love writing time-travel stories with ghosts, no one can tell me I have the facts wrong! Lol.
Thank you so much, dear Nancy, for this loveley review, and the golden star. You're a lovely friend, and I really appreciate you. Do you realise we have known each other for over 11 years now? And I still love you lots. Thanks dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Yes! Eleven years. I still love you lots too. My how time flies. Big Hug. Nancy:)
Comment from Shirley McLain
An excellent chapter as always. It feels as if everything will be coming together quickly. I'm curious about what will happen with Margot and Miles. Does Margot stay in the past? Great job. Enjoy your day. Shirley
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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An excellent chapter as always. It feels as if everything will be coming together quickly. I'm curious about what will happen with Margot and Miles. Does Margot stay in the past? Great job. Enjoy your day. Shirley
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Yes, we are steadily putting the puzzle together. Who is the murderer? Does Margot stay in the past? No, she has to give Meg her body back, it's not Margot's timeline. There's a bit more to be sorted, before the time comes when, hopefully, I can pull it off and everyone is happy.... hmm.
Thank you so much, Shirley, for another very nice review and the sixth star, that really meant so much to me. Now I'm waiting for the 3rd book from you...?? Love and hugs, my friend, :)) Sandra xx
Comment from aryr
What a great continuation chapter, Sandra. You definitely maintained the suspense and mystery. By switching the scenes from Miles and Joshua and Sarah to Margot/Meg and Bessie simply increased the suspense. Gwendolyn and Jenkins definitely have an interesting and intriguing role. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Hugs.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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What a great continuation chapter, Sandra. You definitely maintained the suspense and mystery. By switching the scenes from Miles and Joshua and Sarah to Margot/Meg and Bessie simply increased the suspense. Gwendolyn and Jenkins definitely have an interesting and intriguing role. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Hugs.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Alie, for this lovely review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm having fun writing the next part, with Bessie as the ghost of Gwendolyn's father. It's starting to creep towards the part where the would-be murderer will be discovered! Thanks, my friend. Your continuing support means a lot to me. Love Sandra xx
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You are so very welcome, Sandra. This is rather entertaining, love Alie.
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Now that is really encouraging! Thanks, dear friend, xxx
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(Smile)
Comment from Ric Myworld
There's never a dull moment in your stories, my dear. You keep me on guard for the unexpectable, a right, left punch coming from all directions. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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There's never a dull moment in your stories, my dear. You keep me on guard for the unexpectable, a right, left punch coming from all directions. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Lol, you mustn't make me laugh, Ric, I cough! But I loved your review, you're always so positive in what you say. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, and thank you for that shiny star! Love and hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from John Ciarmello
I hope I'm finding you well, Sandra? This is another excellent chapter. There is so much going down now. The unexpected visit from Meg to Gwendolyn and Jenkins and now miles paying a visit to Crankston Smythe will be exciting and add that much more to the ongoing saga. Loved it!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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I hope I'm finding you well, Sandra? This is another excellent chapter. There is so much going down now. The unexpected visit from Meg to Gwendolyn and Jenkins and now miles paying a visit to Crankston Smythe will be exciting and add that much more to the ongoing saga. Loved it!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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I'm a little better, thank you, John. It's been so slow. But, I'm a tough old bird! Lol Thank you for reading this chapter, my friend, and the lovely review you've given it. I'm over the moon that you are enjoying it. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Pantygynt
Aha! Is the whole time travelling thing about to be bust open and Bessie revealed as a supernatural character~? That will need careful handling.
Just a couple of points for your consideration and I am not even sure if the first one is valid:
'But shouldn't you's go to the police and report them?' >> Is this something of an anachronism? I thought we were in the regency period. Or maybe I got this wrong.
'...I'm here on my own volition, Gwendolyn.'
>> As I understand it the expression is 'of my own volition' rather than 'on'.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Aha! Is the whole time travelling thing about to be bust open and Bessie revealed as a supernatural character~? That will need careful handling.
Just a couple of points for your consideration and I am not even sure if the first one is valid:
'But shouldn't you's go to the police and report them?' >> Is this something of an anachronism? I thought we were in the regency period. Or maybe I got this wrong.
'...I'm here on my own volition, Gwendolyn.'
>> As I understand it the expression is 'of my own volition' rather than 'on'.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Hi Jim, thank you so much for another lovely review and that golden star. I'll nip in and change 'on' to 'of', you were the only one to notice that, so thank you! :))
The point you raised about the police, I did my research on that before I put it in. We are in the year 1886 now, and the characters live in Hampshire. This is what I found out about the police...
The first fully constituted police force formed in Hampshire was the Winchester City Police, founded in 1832. The Hampshire County Constabulary was established seven years later in December 1839 as a result of the passing of the County Police Act that year.
Thank you, my friend. Oh, it was revealed in a much earlier chapter that Bessie comes from nowhere, she is just sent to wherever something has gone wrong, and has to put it right. (That is the joy of fantacy, I can almost do what I want.) But, Margot has time travelled here with the help of Bessie. It will be brought up again later. Thanks, friend!! Love and hugs. Sandra xx
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I stand corrected. Well done with the research. One of the problems with serialisation is that readers can easily forget what has been established earlier.
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I know, I've just had a query about the contents of the letters. That was discussed in a much earlier chapter, but some bits of it will be brought up again when Miles confronts his father. xxx
Comment from Scott Rhodie
Only a couple of grammar points, but no biggies. Line 10 - freshly-baked = freshly baked. Line 25 - life-long = lifelong Line. Again, everything flows well, and I know I'm in halfway it's halfway through I came in, but it's very enjoyable and well done.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Only a couple of grammar points, but no biggies. Line 10 - freshly-baked = freshly baked. Line 25 - life-long = lifelong Line. Again, everything flows well, and I know I'm in halfway it's halfway through I came in, but it's very enjoyable and well done.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Scott, for pointing out those nits. I've made the corrections, and was so pleased to see that was all you found. I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading this chapter, that is very encouraging. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
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No problem.