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Comment from Kevin McNeany
I am new to Haiku although I understand the form. I love this though. It's a good contender for the competition, breezy and refreshing, an excellent entry. Good luck and well done kindest regards Kevin
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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I am new to Haiku although I understand the form. I love this though. It's a good contender for the competition, breezy and refreshing, an excellent entry. Good luck and well done kindest regards Kevin
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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cool!👍 thank you kevin 😎🌥️🖊️
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Great entry for the Haiku contest.
Good syllables count and connection between lines. I like your presentation and imagery. It flows well with descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture. The satori is clever. Shady spot... I like how you described the sun.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Great entry for the Haiku contest.
Good syllables count and connection between lines. I like your presentation and imagery. It flows well with descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture. The satori is clever. Shady spot... I like how you described the sun.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason".- Novalis
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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thank you gypsy! 👍😎🌥️🖊️
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This a wonderful haiku, in that it contains all elements by definition.
You have captured a moment in time that if not observant will be missed.
I am a lover of the sky, sun, moon, and clouds, let me not forget the precious
rainbows. I have a tremendous appreciation for sunsets and rises, and this haiku
truly spoke to me.
Thanks for sharing.
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This a wonderful haiku, in that it contains all elements by definition.
You have captured a moment in time that if not observant will be missed.
I am a lover of the sky, sun, moon, and clouds, let me not forget the precious
rainbows. I have a tremendous appreciation for sunsets and rises, and this haiku
truly spoke to me.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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😂lol me too!👍 thank you kl 😎🌥️🖊️
Comment from irishauthorme
Hey, this time of year with almost every day in the 90s, we really appreciate a cloud or two obscuring the hot sun for a while!
We have mostly Cirrus clouds during the summer, this and spotty, not much good for anything except for the odd shapes they take, I have a giant bird passing by at about 40,000 feet.
Good workirish
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Hey, this time of year with almost every day in the 90s, we really appreciate a cloud or two obscuring the hot sun for a while!
We have mostly Cirrus clouds during the summer, this and spotty, not much good for anything except for the odd shapes they take, I have a giant bird passing by at about 40,000 feet.
Good workirish
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
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LOL! thank you irish 😎🌥️🖊️
Comment from R.B.Bunn
I never thought of clouds being the stars of the daytime. That's an interesting way to put it, though the sun is also a day star. Looking up at the clouds on a summer day is a childhood favorite of mine. Thanks for sharing.
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I never thought of clouds being the stars of the daytime. That's an interesting way to put it, though the sun is also a day star. Looking up at the clouds on a summer day is a childhood favorite of mine. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
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yup - the sun☀️ is a ⭐star! thank you rb 😎🌥️❤️🖊️
Comment from Terry Broxson
As usual a really good haiku from one of the best high princesses of this realm, and a good entry for the contest, good luck. I will say in Texas today there is no respite...105! Yikes. Good job. Terry.
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As usual a really good haiku from one of the best high princesses of this realm, and a good entry for the contest, good luck. I will say in Texas today there is no respite...105! Yikes. Good job. Terry.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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i could never live in texas.... thank you terry! 🌥️😎🖊️
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You are welcome, by the way, I posted a story "Ode to Humpshistle" a little while back, it is in my portfolio, and there is a little "shoutout" to you in it, if you care to look.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I've never seen the sun referred to as a bright day star before, but that's what it is for us, isn't it? One always finds clever words and a unique way of looking at the ordinary in your poetry.
Thanks for sharing another interesting read:-)
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I've never seen the sun referred to as a bright day star before, but that's what it is for us, isn't it? One always finds clever words and a unique way of looking at the ordinary in your poetry.
Thanks for sharing another interesting read:-)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
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yup! thank you pam 😎🌥️🙂❤️🖊️
Comment from rspoet
Hello Michelle,
This is an excellent 4-5-4 poem for the contest
with wonderful concrete imagery of nature and connection in lines one and two, plus a very good contrasting satori line.
If it was simply a poem, I'd keep the two colors,
but, as a haiku in a contest, I'd recommend only one color.
Simplicity is one of the elements of haiku.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
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Hello Michelle,
This is an excellent 4-5-4 poem for the contest
with wonderful concrete imagery of nature and connection in lines one and two, plus a very good contrasting satori line.
If it was simply a poem, I'd keep the two colors,
but, as a haiku in a contest, I'd recommend only one color.
Simplicity is one of the elements of haiku.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2022
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thank you robert 😎🌥️🙂❤️🖊️
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I remember working in the fields as a child--rejoicing when the clouds covered the sun for just a little while. Your excellent ultra-concise haiku
called forth those memories.
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I remember working in the fields as a child--rejoicing when the clouds covered the sun for just a little while. Your excellent ultra-concise haiku
called forth those memories.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
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thank you janice 😎🌥️🙂❤️🖊️
Comment from Frances Jean
A lovely Haiku obeying the requirements of the form and incorporating nice alliteration. Your choice of picture to support your work is delightful. Good luck with your writing. Franky
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A lovely Haiku obeying the requirements of the form and incorporating nice alliteration. Your choice of picture to support your work is delightful. Good luck with your writing. Franky
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
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thank you frances 🌥️😎❤️🖊️