The Maelstrom
In chaos lies the truth we cannot speak40 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Maelstrom, after reading it and imaging how tisanes work in, makes me think of sun-heated tea swirling in a large clear ewer.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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This poem, The Maelstrom, after reading it and imaging how tisanes work in, makes me think of sun-heated tea swirling in a large clear ewer.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I think my brain is a tea, soaked in nuttiness! Thanks Bill - really appreciate it :-)
Mike
Comment from Marienkiefer
I found this poem extremely interesting. So I began reading, appreciating the layout, the equilibrium and balance in verse, the depth of thought, interesting word choices and rhyme.
Then I found myself searching for the truth hidden deep in the lines...that which we cannot speak.
So I read again, and then I found this: speak of abuse, our minds filter, the pain in our verse, refrain...hearse. Permit terrors grip, daily pit, we seek, cannot seek. Awareness of self-inflicted hate, decode, escape, emancipating, awaking to walk. In chaos lies the truth.
Very clever and astounding read, when read between the lines. A fantastic brain puzzle, elaborate thought. Lovely work, very nice poem.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I found this poem extremely interesting. So I began reading, appreciating the layout, the equilibrium and balance in verse, the depth of thought, interesting word choices and rhyme.
Then I found myself searching for the truth hidden deep in the lines...that which we cannot speak.
So I read again, and then I found this: speak of abuse, our minds filter, the pain in our verse, refrain...hearse. Permit terrors grip, daily pit, we seek, cannot seek. Awareness of self-inflicted hate, decode, escape, emancipating, awaking to walk. In chaos lies the truth.
Very clever and astounding read, when read between the lines. A fantastic brain puzzle, elaborate thought. Lovely work, very nice poem.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you :-). I really appreciate the time taken to delve a bit deeper and excavate the nuances.
Mike
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Comment from dragonpoet
MIke,
I like that this sonnet is circular like life can be. The tells of how goods and bads move in the maelstrom to find their way to be expressed to clear or heads. Writing is one outlet for this.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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MIke,
I like that this sonnet is circular like life can be. The tells of how goods and bads move in the maelstrom to find their way to be expressed to clear or heads. Writing is one outlet for this.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Joan. Yes, that's very much what I had in mind (along with the chaos!). So glad you liked it :-)
Mike
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No problem, Mike. I am glad I got your intended meaning.
Joan
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like this poem, especially the following phrase.
" in chaos lies the truth we cannot speak."
This is true in almost any situation, be it at work, at home, romance or even politics.
Right now our country is in a big chaos. Our capital cannot be protected.
It is t safe to send kids to school.
It is even not safe to go to church to pray.
The truth is politics which is not focusing to solve these issues . Sad?
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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I like this poem, especially the following phrase.
" in chaos lies the truth we cannot speak."
This is true in almost any situation, be it at work, at home, romance or even politics.
Right now our country is in a big chaos. Our capital cannot be protected.
It is t safe to send kids to school.
It is even not safe to go to church to pray.
The truth is politics which is not focusing to solve these issues . Sad?
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much - I'm really glad you liked it :-)
Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Okay, I read this poem yesterday and my head was swimming. I liked the flow but had no clue what you meant. I decided maybe I was tired from traveling so waited until today. Guess what, I'm still pondering the meaning. I'm guessing you're trying to get meaning from our messed-up world.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Okay, I read this poem yesterday and my head was swimming. I liked the flow but had no clue what you meant. I decided maybe I was tired from traveling so waited until today. Guess what, I'm still pondering the meaning. I'm guessing you're trying to get meaning from our messed-up world.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Barbara, and I'm sorry if I tied you up in knots! This is all about poetry being a release from the madness going on in my mind :-)
Mike
Comment from Lilly Flowers
My first impression was that you were feeling really depressed when you wrote this, or maybe you just read the daily news. That's always depressing.
On second read I think you're speaking to how writers release emotions. That goodness we can! Regards, Lilly
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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My first impression was that you were feeling really depressed when you wrote this, or maybe you just read the daily news. That's always depressing.
On second read I think you're speaking to how writers release emotions. That goodness we can! Regards, Lilly
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Lilly - you got it spot on :-)
Mike
Comment from C2
Mike,
I enjoyed thinking through this one. I agree with you that writing is a type of exorcism (at least I think you meant that) and the scariest part of letting other writers read your work is that they may more clearly see the demon inside you fighting to stay put, that "supermodel driving beauty's hearse."
Even so, the very act of placing ink on paper clears the mind of darness's clutter:
"But steam escapes when ink-based vents permit,
emancipating love from terror's grip,
awaking hope from nightmare's daily pit
to walk in sun, enjoy the rays we sip."
These lines a prayer almost.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Mike,
I enjoyed thinking through this one. I agree with you that writing is a type of exorcism (at least I think you meant that) and the scariest part of letting other writers read your work is that they may more clearly see the demon inside you fighting to stay put, that "supermodel driving beauty's hearse."
Even so, the very act of placing ink on paper clears the mind of darness's clutter:
"But steam escapes when ink-based vents permit,
emancipating love from terror's grip,
awaking hope from nightmare's daily pit
to walk in sun, enjoy the rays we sip."
These lines a prayer almost.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much :-). I like exorcism as a description - that's exactly how writing poetry feels at times!
Mike
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This, in every respect, an excellent sonnet--skillfully written, fulfilling the standards for the English sonnet with accurate (and creative) rhyming and meter, and the "turn" in the third stanza, which many writers do not include. Most importantly, it vividly describes the catharsis made possible by venting, enabling us to live with the chaos we can't fix!
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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This, in every respect, an excellent sonnet--skillfully written, fulfilling the standards for the English sonnet with accurate (and creative) rhyming and meter, and the "turn" in the third stanza, which many writers do not include. Most importantly, it vividly describes the catharsis made possible by venting, enabling us to live with the chaos we can't fix!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Janice :-). Exactly - catharsis through creativity!
Mike
Comment from Kevin McNeany
Although the maelstrom isn't what we seek,
in chaos lies the truth we cannot speak...wow, this is so interesting. It stands out with wonderful content and brilliant use of repetition and assonance. Well done kindest regards Kevin.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Although the maelstrom isn't what we seek,
in chaos lies the truth we cannot speak...wow, this is so interesting. It stands out with wonderful content and brilliant use of repetition and assonance. Well done kindest regards Kevin.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Kevin. I'm really glad you liked it!
Mike
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Mike,
I really like this poem: the unique phrases and the way it flows.
Great phrase: in chaos lies the truth we cannot speak; emancipating love from terror's grip. How many people fear love or just fear and are freed by love?
Exceptional poem, Mike.
Good luck!
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Mike,
I really like this poem: the unique phrases and the way it flows.
Great phrase: in chaos lies the truth we cannot speak; emancipating love from terror's grip. How many people fear love or just fear and are freed by love?
Exceptional poem, Mike.
Good luck!
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much, Cindy. I'm thrilled with your awesome response :-)
Mike
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