Junebug
A No Rules Contest Entry22 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute and well written poem you have penned for the No Rules contest about your adorable little granddaughter. The photo you used goes so well with your words. I love her name and nickname too. Thank you for sharing. This made me smile! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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This is a very cute and well written poem you have penned for the No Rules contest about your adorable little granddaughter. The photo you used goes so well with your words. I love her name and nickname too. Thank you for sharing. This made me smile! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and for the kind feedback!
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, June Bug, profiles a child discovering the world and gives the readers this poignant thought about our ability to describe the world:
"...insufficient as all words are for the (abundance) they seek to reveal"
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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This poem, June Bug, profiles a child discovering the world and gives the readers this poignant thought about our ability to describe the world:
"...insufficient as all words are for the (abundance) they seek to reveal"
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and for the kind feedback! Yes?caught the typo and fixed it!
Comment from Susan Newell
Chris,
I really like this one. It is so true that when we name things and talk about them, they lose some of their mystery. But it is also true that by combining those words we can create new mysteries to be observed, or at a minimum respected. Ad let's not forget how in the beginning of Genesis we learn the power of speech. I'm not sure what you mean by "tobagan." Is that a foreign word for boots?
Sue
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Chris,
I really like this one. It is so true that when we name things and talk about them, they lose some of their mystery. But it is also true that by combining those words we can create new mysteries to be observed, or at a minimum respected. Ad let's not forget how in the beginning of Genesis we learn the power of speech. I'm not sure what you mean by "tobagan." Is that a foreign word for boots?
Sue
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Susan,
Thanks as always for your support of my work. You actually identified a typo which I missed. It should have been spelled "toboggan" which in the States we also use for the gray cap she has pulled over her head.
Watching her learn to name things made me think about the creative power of God?s spoken word?and how as writers we use them to create as well. Thanks again for the kind review!
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You are welcome, Chris. I suspected the typo but wasn't thinking of the winter cap. Perhaps a note would help other readers.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You have a different way with words, my friend that I find sublime and lowly at the same time. Maybe you come from a far off land where what you write is understood better than where I sit. Still, as previously, I enjoyed the thrill of the hunt for understanding what? idk. Junebug is a granddaughter?
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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You have a different way with words, my friend that I find sublime and lowly at the same time. Maybe you come from a far off land where what you write is understood better than where I sit. Still, as previously, I enjoyed the thrill of the hunt for understanding what? idk. Junebug is a granddaughter?
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2022
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Tom,
I come from the woods of East Texas but live in Dallas now. But hey?many of us still believe Texas is its own Republic so that far off land thing might not be too far off. The photo is indeed my granddaughter Willow June who I call Junebug. She?s in that phase where she is learning new words and its been fascinating to watch her do what we all have done but can?t remember.
Thanks for the kind review!
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I can only imagine watching grandchildren grow. My daughters are 35 and thirty, and I see neither thinking of giving birth.
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There?s hope. Mine are 34 and this was the first!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job describing the wonderment and awe
of a young child exploring the world around her. As she
makes sense of it, one wonders if something is 'lost in
translation.' However, you bring readers back to the awe
she experiences with the reference to the snowflake.
The picture is precious.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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You did a great job describing the wonderment and awe
of a young child exploring the world around her. As she
makes sense of it, one wonders if something is 'lost in
translation.' However, you bring readers back to the awe
she experiences with the reference to the snowflake.
The picture is precious.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank Jan!
Comment from harmony13
I found the author's words to be uplifting, interesting, descriptive
and creative. I enjoyed the poem. It made me think of the days I
lived in NY and it snowed. The poem flows and connects well. I love
the artwork and the beautiful little girl loving the ride! Great Poem!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I found the author's words to be uplifting, interesting, descriptive
and creative. I enjoyed the poem. It made me think of the days I
lived in NY and it snowed. The poem flows and connects well. I love
the artwork and the beautiful little girl loving the ride! Great Poem!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Harmony13,
Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and for your kind review.
Comment from Tina Crute
Well, this is a sweet surprise! A snow poem in summer and a the writing of collecting fireflies compared to collecting new words. Brilliantly executed and slightly emotional, this poem has many facets and they all shine to make a gem of a poem!
Tina
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Well, this is a sweet surprise! A snow poem in summer and a the writing of collecting fireflies compared to collecting new words. Brilliantly executed and slightly emotional, this poem has many facets and they all shine to make a gem of a poem!
Tina
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Written for my grand-daughter Willow June(bug)!
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Aww, even sweeter! Cute name, too!
Tina
Comment from royowen
I don't think there's anything better to listen to than watching see a child's joy and the laughter when they enjoy the inexpressible moment of exciting emotion that lights up their face. This is beautifully written my friend, the artwork is priceless, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I don't think there's anything better to listen to than watching see a child's joy and the laughter when they enjoy the inexpressible moment of exciting emotion that lights up their face. This is beautifully written my friend, the artwork is priceless, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
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Well done
Comment from Fleedleflump
It can be amazing, I think, to watch another learn and experience life in a way that we can never recapture for ourselves. Imagine how many 'first' experiences we have when we're little! I very much enjoyed this beautifully written piece.
Mike
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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It can be amazing, I think, to watch another learn and experience life in a way that we can never recapture for ourselves. Imagine how many 'first' experiences we have when we're little! I very much enjoyed this beautifully written piece.
Mike
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thanks for the read and the kind feedbak!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a vividly descriptive, expressive piece that conveys a powerful message about how a young one drinks in his/her surroudings with joy--in this case, the snow.
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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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This is a vividly descriptive, expressive piece that conveys a powerful message about how a young one drinks in his/her surroudings with joy--in this case, the snow.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and for your kind review.
