The piece of yarn
a gift of love20 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Supernatural Encounter writing prompt contest.
I enjoyed reading your story. It moved along nicely and the plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development.
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Excellent entry for the Supernatural Encounter writing prompt contest.
I enjoyed reading your story. It moved along nicely and the plot was easy to understand and follow. Good character development.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
Comment from Terry Broxson
Lol, what a great creative story! Good luck in the contest, you will get my vote! I also love the cat picture, you get one star for that, plus five more for a very fun story, Great job! Terry
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Lol, what a great creative story! Good luck in the contest, you will get my vote! I also love the cat picture, you get one star for that, plus five more for a very fun story, Great job! Terry
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
Comment from jessizero
This was a fun story with supernatural elements. I very much enjoyed reading it. The ending was cute, too. Thank you for sharing this story here, and best wishes to you.
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This was a fun story with supernatural elements. I very much enjoyed reading it. The ending was cute, too. Thank you for sharing this story here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! This is so fun and creative, Iza! This mentally plays with the idiom of "yarn" being a story. Hope your story does well in the contest!
we where not able to finish in time (were)
and hunt that house (haunt)
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Lol! This is so fun and creative, Iza! This mentally plays with the idiom of "yarn" being a story. Hope your story does well in the contest!
we where not able to finish in time (were)
and hunt that house (haunt)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
Comment from royowen
This is a most imaginative and different tale from the usual and quite definitely unique in its plot. I enjoyed it very much Iza. I admire the way you've grasped English and the expressive way you've done it. An excellent post, my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
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This is a most imaginative and different tale from the usual and quite definitely unique in its plot. I enjoyed it very much Iza. I admire the way you've grasped English and the expressive way you've done it. An excellent post, my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an unusual ghost story, but it is certain to appeal to children all the more for that. The only hole I find is the lack of proper explanation of why young Ilena teleports back to Transylvania once a year. Kate xx
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This is an unusual ghost story, but it is certain to appeal to children all the more for that. The only hole I find is the lack of proper explanation of why young Ilena teleports back to Transylvania once a year. Kate xx
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
Comment from Spitfire
This is a clever story. AT one point it made me think of the fairy tale Rumpelsilkskin (not sure of the spelling). Teleporting to Transylvania--this has got to be science fiction. LOL
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This is a clever story. AT one point it made me think of the fairy tale Rumpelsilkskin (not sure of the spelling). Teleporting to Transylvania--this has got to be science fiction. LOL
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your tale reminisces the protagonist's likening his daughter to a yarn.
The work highlights the protagonist's encounter with Ileana, the mother of his daughter and how a yarn they were billed to untie eventually metamorphosed into his daughter.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with magical transformations in fairy tales.
Excellent work. Bravo.
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The objective correlative of your tale reminisces the protagonist's likening his daughter to a yarn.
The work highlights the protagonist's encounter with Ileana, the mother of his daughter and how a yarn they were billed to untie eventually metamorphosed into his daughter.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with magical transformations in fairy tales.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this writing prompt entry. It's a cute and creative story. Please - only one person's dialogue per paragraph. You need to separate your dialogues.
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I enjoyed reading this writing prompt entry. It's a cute and creative story. Please - only one person's dialogue per paragraph. You need to separate your dialogues.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
Comment from BethShelby
This is a fun children's story. This kid's no dummy. He/she already knows
vampires come from Transylvania... And that babies are born in nine months. She much have believed her mom and dad were doing some other than untangling yarn to ask if she/he born nine months later. I'm confused about whether this is a girl or boy because you call him a lad but Ileana sounds like a girl and you say the mom was a beautiful girl just like you. Ghost and yarn children make an interesting fantasy story.
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This is a fun children's story. This kid's no dummy. He/she already knows
vampires come from Transylvania... And that babies are born in nine months. She much have believed her mom and dad were doing some other than untangling yarn to ask if she/he born nine months later. I'm confused about whether this is a girl or boy because you call him a lad but Ileana sounds like a girl and you say the mom was a beautiful girl just like you. Ghost and yarn children make an interesting fantasy story.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022