Infinitesimalisation
We are but motes, yearning for purpose37 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I just love that title! And you made it up. Perhaps you should send it up to Colins Dictionary, with your meaning attached. And I love the poem. It sums up everything you are, and most poets. When all is said and done... like saying that, once we have stripped everything away from our body and rid ourself of all worldly goods there is not a lot of difference in any of us, we are all less than a grain of sand. Well done, the rhyme scheme was perfect. :)) Sandra x
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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I just love that title! And you made it up. Perhaps you should send it up to Colins Dictionary, with your meaning attached. And I love the poem. It sums up everything you are, and most poets. When all is said and done... like saying that, once we have stripped everything away from our body and rid ourself of all worldly goods there is not a lot of difference in any of us, we are all less than a grain of sand. Well done, the rhyme scheme was perfect. :)) Sandra x
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Sandra :-). I know it's contrary to a lot of artists, but I'm not really interested in the meaning of life. I don't think there is one, and I'm fine with that, just as being insignificant is actually freeing.
Mike
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Wow! I wish I had a sixth star.
This was great. Not just the way you arranged words poetically, but the message. Would that America's politicians would eat its truth.
Greta work. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Wow! I wish I had a sixth star.
This was great. Not just the way you arranged words poetically, but the message. Would that America's politicians would eat its truth.
Greta work. Best wishes.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, mate :-). This is my favourite kind of poetry to write. As you probably noticed, I've been in a philosophical frame of mind these last couple of days!
Mike
Comment from John Ciarmello
I'm not going to touch the title with a ten-foot pole! LOL. I thought this sensational as always, a true favorite, Mike.
A stripping of the soul; emptied of words, of worth; merely remembered, but never recovered, tangible, but untouchable.
"And here I am, when all is done;
A pointless spark fed by the sun,
a poet in the universe
it's both a blessing and a curse. A poignant stanza!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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I'm not going to touch the title with a ten-foot pole! LOL. I thought this sensational as always, a true favorite, Mike.
A stripping of the soul; emptied of words, of worth; merely remembered, but never recovered, tangible, but untouchable.
"And here I am, when all is done;
A pointless spark fed by the sun,
a poet in the universe
it's both a blessing and a curse. A poignant stanza!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thank you, John :-). I love writing the really philosophical poetry - although it can get a bit over the top, but this one felt about right.
Mike
Comment from Boogienights
A captivating poem that makes you stop and think. We are all really just tiny specks in the universe, but being poets let's us express ideas that make a difference. I loved this, thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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A captivating poem that makes you stop and think. We are all really just tiny specks in the universe, but being poets let's us express ideas that make a difference. I loved this, thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thank you :-). I love writing this sort of poetry, as long as I manage not to be too pretentious, lol
Mike
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, meaningful, descriptive, and creative. I agree with the author - I still yearn for purpose. Thank you for the author's notes - I could not decide on the meaning! I pondered on the last line - I thought about what poetry brings to me. The artwork is awesome!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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The author's words are interesting, meaningful, descriptive, and creative. I agree with the author - I still yearn for purpose. Thank you for the author's notes - I could not decide on the meaning! I pondered on the last line - I thought about what poetry brings to me. The artwork is awesome!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much :-). Sometimes, the meaning is changeable, and sometimes it's less important than the experience and the feelings. Sorry, that sounded so pretentious, lol :-). I'm really happy you shared your response with me.
Mike
Comment from Raul1
I like how you structured this poem. I can understand what your telling me is a blessing and a curse. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like your poem. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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I like how you structured this poem. I can understand what your telling me is a blessing and a curse. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like your poem. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Raul! I'm really glad you liked it :-)
Mike
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You're welcome!
Comment from dragonpoet
Mike,
This is a well rhymed and metered poem. I like the format of interchanging octets and quatrains. It reminds us that we are all just a small part of the world or people in general and poets in particular. We all have our worth that each of us needs to find for ourselves.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Mike,
This is a well rhymed and metered poem. I like the format of interchanging octets and quatrains. It reminds us that we are all just a small part of the world or people in general and poets in particular. We all have our worth that each of us needs to find for ourselves.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Joan - I'm really glad you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike
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You're very welcome, Mike.
Joan
Comment from Ulla
Hi Mike, I understand the title was a made up word describing something with no end. To me it's the concept of infinity. And I think you clarified that very well in your poem. I liked it. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Hi Mike, I understand the title was a made up word describing something with no end. To me it's the concept of infinity. And I think you clarified that very well in your poem. I liked it. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the lovely response, Ulla :-). I'm really happy you liked it!
Mike
Comment from dmt1967
This poem, to me, means the struggle of life is like a poem. It is hard to get started but, once you do, you cannot stop. Thank you for sharing and have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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This poem, to me, means the struggle of life is like a poem. It is hard to get started but, once you do, you cannot stop. Thank you for sharing and have a great weekend.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thank you - I really like your interpretation :-)
Mike
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Mike, this is an awesome poem. I think my favorite part is the only two lines that do not rhyme: "so earnest, yet without a word / To show the world I have some worth". One of the themes of this work is something that I think of doing often. Erase it all and start again. Also, the idea that we are as a grain of sand in the universe, making our lives at the same time more and less important than we think it is. Bravo! I could read this poem many times and keep getting more and more meaning from it. Thanks for posting it!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Mike, this is an awesome poem. I think my favorite part is the only two lines that do not rhyme: "so earnest, yet without a word / To show the world I have some worth". One of the themes of this work is something that I think of doing often. Erase it all and start again. Also, the idea that we are as a grain of sand in the universe, making our lives at the same time more and less important than we think it is. Bravo! I could read this poem many times and keep getting more and more meaning from it. Thanks for posting it!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much, Sam :-). It's been interesting to see the responses to this - some have not connected to it and been polite, and a few have really felt what I was going for. It seems you're in the latter camp, so welcome!
Mike
