One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Beri Bee
You've drawn our eyes to what must be seen... the juxtapositions that should never be. I very much appreciate your selection of adjectives to make this so clear and pointed. Thank you!
(6 from the heart)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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You've drawn our eyes to what must be seen... the juxtapositions that should never be. I very much appreciate your selection of adjectives to make this so clear and pointed. Thank you!
(6 from the heart)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much for reviewing it and for the kind words.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis
Comment from C2
An aptly worded poem for a terrible tragedy. The institutions our tax dollars fund have failed citizens who care about their families, their neighbors and their communities. It's like we're feverting back to the wild west or something.
BTW....love the Six Feet Under idea. Very clever. Will have to give one a try!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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An aptly worded poem for a terrible tragedy. The institutions our tax dollars fund have failed citizens who care about their families, their neighbors and their communities. It's like we're feverting back to the wild west or something.
BTW....love the Six Feet Under idea. Very clever. Will have to give one a try!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much for reviewing it and for the kind words. I hope you try it :)
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis
Comment from JoannaN
Your poem has a very good quality. You write about a tragedy, but you do it tactfully, in a non-generic way. You allow your reader to imagine the scene in his/her head. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Your poem has a very good quality. You write about a tragedy, but you do it tactfully, in a non-generic way. You allow your reader to imagine the scene in his/her head. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much for reviewing it and for the kind words.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason." - Novalis
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Thank you for sharing this heart-wrenching story. This is so sad. It is a crying shame. And I do not understand why guns would be made that can shot one-hundred bullets. It does not make any sense. Something has to be done about selling guns.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you for sharing this heart-wrenching story. This is so sad. It is a crying shame. And I do not understand why guns would be made that can shot one-hundred bullets. It does not make any sense. Something has to be done about selling guns.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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You are right, Carolyn..it's shameful. My son was at school when a racist sociopath killed 5 Vietnamese children.
Thank you very much for your exceptional review and kind words.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Oh my, I hate to hear this.
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another excellent and powerful poem, Gypsy, this whole thing is tragic and unacceptable, yet just yesterday there was another mass shooting--America's gone crazy
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Another excellent and powerful poem, Gypsy, this whole thing is tragic and unacceptable, yet just yesterday there was another mass shooting--America's gone crazy
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much for your exceptional review and six stars.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A very moving poem to the victims of Uvalde, Texas and a rebuke to those who failed them.
Very appropriate name for the theme of your poem.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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A very moving poem to the victims of Uvalde, Texas and a rebuke to those who failed them.
Very appropriate name for the theme of your poem.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much for your time and kind review.
Gypsy
"I would watch you until the end of the world just to watch the sunset in your eyes."-- k azizian
Comment from karenina
Perfect form for any theme...of course so fitting for this! 21 souls stolen in Uvalde..and now another "active shooter" in Oklahoma today... It's unfathomable...
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Perfect form for any theme...of course so fitting for this! 21 souls stolen in Uvalde..and now another "active shooter" in Oklahoma today... It's unfathomable...
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much karenina... it's very sad and must be stopped.
Gypsy
"I would watch you until the end of the world just to watch the sunset in your eyes."-- k azizian
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Agreed. So very with you on that!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Gypsy,
I wish I had a six to give you
I read your new format SIX FEET UNDER
I liked it and found your writing written with excellent Detail
You keep posting your writings, I like them
Gert
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Gypsy,
I wish I had a six to give you
I read your new format SIX FEET UNDER
I liked it and found your writing written with excellent Detail
You keep posting your writings, I like them
Gert
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much, Gert.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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You are most Welcome Gypsy Blue
Gert
Comment from lyenochka
There's a lot of mourning imagery in your Six Feet Under poem. It makes me think of the recent burials of the children massacred in Uvalde. The little boy is distracted, looking for worms under stones. And that's another reminder of the decaying process. Sad poem and good contrast between the living and the dead.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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There's a lot of mourning imagery in your Six Feet Under poem. It makes me think of the recent burials of the children massacred in Uvalde. The little boy is distracted, looking for worms under stones. And that's another reminder of the decaying process. Sad poem and good contrast between the living and the dead.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much, Helen. Yes I was trying to convey the sadness and pain of the funeral of a child. Is especially sad when it's the untimely death of a kid.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment from aryr
This was a delightful SIX FEET UNDER, Gypsy. The words definitely showed that life does and goes on regardless of what prevales. Blessed be n hugs. Thank you so much for creating this SIX FEET UNDER.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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This was a delightful SIX FEET UNDER, Gypsy. The words definitely showed that life does and goes on regardless of what prevales. Blessed be n hugs. Thank you so much for creating this SIX FEET UNDER.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much, Aryr. I appreciate your lovely review. Blessed be. Hugs♡
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Most welcome, Gypsy. Blessed be n hugs!