A Tangled Web
A contest entry18 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
--An awesome entry for the Use These Words writing prompt contest. I read other entries and yours is the best. It's very interesting. I never thought about why spiders don't stick to their web.
--It flows well with beautifully descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.
Well done! I wish you the best.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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--An awesome entry for the Use These Words writing prompt contest. I read other entries and yours is the best. It's very interesting. I never thought about why spiders don't stick to their web.
--It flows well with beautifully descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.
Well done! I wish you the best.
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thanks for the encouraging review!
Apparently not everyone felt as strongly as you did. It?s not faring well in the contest voting so far. But..those too I have learned are a numbers game!
Comment from Beri Bee
As a matter of fact, I have wondered! Thank you for turning it into a lovely poem! My favorite stanza is the one that runs from "errant moth" to "fish cleaning sink." You've got me assessing all the webs around my place now, wondering who has the best spot. Location and traffic! Thanks!
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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As a matter of fact, I have wondered! Thank you for turning it into a lovely poem! My favorite stanza is the one that runs from "errant moth" to "fish cleaning sink." You've got me assessing all the webs around my place now, wondering who has the best spot. Location and traffic! Thanks!
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you for taking time to read it!
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My pleasure!
Comment from royowen
I can remember Robert Bruce who had just had a severe loss in a battle with his British tormentors, e watched a spider, try, try again to build a cobweb, and had the revelation to keep frying, he did and won. Beautifully written my friend, great post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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I can remember Robert Bruce who had just had a severe loss in a battle with his British tormentors, e watched a spider, try, try again to build a cobweb, and had the revelation to keep frying, he did and won. Beautifully written my friend, great post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thanks Roy
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Most welcome
Comment from LisaMay
I appreciate your curiosity which led to creating this informative poem. Nature is marvellous. The contests required words are tucked in seamlessly and we learn a lot about the skill of spider-web construction. Skill in itself does not guarantee reward (as the results of this contest may show, haha). As you conclude, it's a numbers game.
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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I appreciate your curiosity which led to creating this informative poem. Nature is marvellous. The contests required words are tucked in seamlessly and we learn a lot about the skill of spider-web construction. Skill in itself does not guarantee reward (as the results of this contest may show, haha). As you conclude, it's a numbers game.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thanks?.I hope hope these contests are about skill and not who has the most fans or friends on FanStory. The latter would be a shame.
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I do think in some instances it is the latter. Any voting system is open to favouratism.
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How utterly sad for a community of writers to put favoritism above skill. How does one get better or worse avoid unearned confidence? I guess I?m too naive.
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I am often amazed at how 5-and even 6-star ratings are so often awarded to mediocre writing on this site. You and I seem to misguidedly think this is a writers' site, not a mental wellbeing and popularity site.
Comment from emmaysavage
I still think this poem reads more like an essay than poetry. I found myself reading an essay. I probable would have rated it higher as nonfiction prose.
I very much like your last like but I think it would work better as a first line. Your descriptive words are very apt. I'd like to see a full blown essay on this
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reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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I still think this poem reads more like an essay than poetry. I found myself reading an essay. I probable would have rated it higher as nonfiction prose.
I very much like your last like but I think it would work better as a first line. Your descriptive words are very apt. I'd like to see a full blown essay on this
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Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Wow?never received such a low review without specific feedback about what?s wrong with the piece. In fact, I?ve never received a 4-star or lower review. Specific feedback or a re-read appreciated.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, thank you for sharing this wonderful tip:"in essence, once the manufacture
of her wiry entanglement's complete,
a policy of minimal body contact employed,
she simply moves to the non-stick center
and waits' I always wonder but I never dig past that:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Wow, thank you for sharing this wonderful tip:"in essence, once the manufacture
of her wiry entanglement's complete,
a policy of minimal body contact employed,
she simply moves to the non-stick center
and waits' I always wonder but I never dig past that:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from jessizero
You provided information and entertainment in a story/poem using the required vocabulary. Great job! I never knew that about the dry silk, either. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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You provided information and entertainment in a story/poem using the required vocabulary. Great job! I never knew that about the dry silk, either. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting poem. I like poems that impart information. The poem flows well. It stays on point. The images are clear.
You need to review before posting. This site tends to put in extraneous characters.
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reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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An interesting poem. I like poems that impart information. The poem flows well. It stays on point. The images are clear.
You need to review before posting. This site tends to put in extraneous characters.
As in:
or maybe it won't�¢?"
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Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Yep?it?s when I use a dash and cut and paste from Notes. Fixed now. Thanks!
