One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is in good form, Gypsy. I like its
presentation--the color scheme, the beautiful image,
and your meaningful words for such a short poem.
I like the way you used the words water rings. They
surround the band and carry it outward for eternity.
I am wondering if your title Broken Promises and then
Broken Vows should be the same--one or the other.
Best wishes, Jan
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Your contest entry is in good form, Gypsy. I like its
presentation--the color scheme, the beautiful image,
and your meaningful words for such a short poem.
I like the way you used the words water rings. They
surround the band and carry it outward for eternity.
I am wondering if your title Broken Promises and then
Broken Vows should be the same--one or the other.
Best wishes, Jan
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Hello, Jan, the monostich rules state the title is an important part of the poem. It should provide more understanding.
Thank you very much for the excellent review and feedback.
Gypsy
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I understand the rules and did read your notes. What I was wondering is your have tow different titles. Should they be the same?
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Oh... I missed that, thank you very much. ♡
Comment from jessizero
I like that a ring is supposed to signify eternity, then causes ripple into eternity when the ring is thrown into the water. Very clever of you. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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I like that a ring is supposed to signify eternity, then causes ripple into eternity when the ring is thrown into the water. Very clever of you. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Hello, jessi,
Thank you very much for the excellent review and feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
Of course the ring is the sign of the eternal, no beginning and no end, but if that's violated what then? There ceases to be a meaning fo a covenant, "Till death us do part" that means there's no value in words. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Of course the ring is the sign of the eternal, no beginning and no end, but if that's violated what then? There ceases to be a meaning fo a covenant, "Till death us do part" that means there's no value in words. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Hello, Roy,
Thank you very much for the excellent review and feedback.
Gypsy
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My pleasure