A Cure for Cancer
Stage Four30 total reviews
Comment from Terry Broxson
Paul, this is really good deserving of a six, but I am out of them already. You did a nice job with the title tying the story together. And very good imagery on the way down. Great work. Terry.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Paul, this is really good deserving of a six, but I am out of them already. You did a nice job with the title tying the story together. And very good imagery on the way down. Great work. Terry.
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thanks, Terry. I still can't decide if that was the easy way out or the hard way.
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That is a good question.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
OMG! Now that is a flash fiction story with a stunning ending! Going by your title, I'm guessing he had cancer and was in the final stages. One jump and he was cured! Wow. Well done, Paul, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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OMG! Now that is a flash fiction story with a stunning ending! Going by your title, I'm guessing he had cancer and was in the final stages. One jump and he was cured! Wow. Well done, Paul, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thanks, Sandra. It took me a while to come up with that cure.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Wow! This is crazy creative, beginning with the title. You told just enough that the reader can surmise what took place prior to the scene opening. "The panoramic view is marvelous - worthy of a poem,"...stunning. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Wow! This is crazy creative, beginning with the title. You told just enough that the reader can surmise what took place prior to the scene opening. "The panoramic view is marvelous - worthy of a poem,"...stunning. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thanks, LJ. Cancer is all around us. Maybe someday there will be a cure that is better than the one I described.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Certainly a cure for cancer! I am not sure how I feel about the subject. But what I do know is that the writing is sharp, thought-provoking, and excellent.
Best wishes
Mary
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Certainly a cure for cancer! I am not sure how I feel about the subject. But what I do know is that the writing is sharp, thought-provoking, and excellent.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thanks, Mary. The subject is a tough one. I'm sure that everyone has been touched by it in one way or another.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I actually laughed out loud. Does that mean I have a sick sense of humor?
Very well done. Can you imagine the pandemonium in the plane?
Great work, deserving of the stars.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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I actually laughed out loud. Does that mean I have a sick sense of humor?
Very well done. Can you imagine the pandemonium in the plane?
Great work, deserving of the stars.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 19-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thanks, Wayne. Let's say that you have a "different" sense of humor.
Comment from LisaMay
One in a lifetime for sure - first and last. Yeah, why not go out with a bang at over a hundred miles an hour - leave a deep impression. It's a shame we didn't get to read your poetic thoughts. Splat!
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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One in a lifetime for sure - first and last. Yeah, why not go out with a bang at over a hundred miles an hour - leave a deep impression. It's a shame we didn't get to read your poetic thoughts. Splat!
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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That's a great review, LisaMay. The poetic thoughts would probably have had to been a Haiku or some other really short form.
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... or maybe one of FS incredibly short contest prompts, such as a poem in 6 words.
Comment from Spitfire
On careful reading I see that the narrator didn't bother with any equipment. Hence 'the cure for cancer' is quick death. A true writer with his observations and wish for a pen and paper.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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On careful reading I see that the narrator didn't bother with any equipment. Hence 'the cure for cancer' is quick death. A true writer with his observations and wish for a pen and paper.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thanks, Spitfire. Hope you are coming along okay.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this story very much. The length mirrors
the quick pace of free falling. I also find it interesting
that you left it open-ended. Leaving the conclusion up
to the reader is genius.
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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I enjoyed this story very much. The length mirrors
the quick pace of free falling. I also find it interesting
that you left it open-ended. Leaving the conclusion up
to the reader is genius.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 19-May-2022
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Thanks, K.L. You always leave it up to the reader when you don't know what to say.
Comment from mermaids
Your vivid use of words makes the reader feels like she is sky diving. I like how you mention the view is worthy of a poem, a line that shows how beautiful the view is.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Your vivid use of words makes the reader feels like she is sky diving. I like how you mention the view is worthy of a poem, a line that shows how beautiful the view is.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thanks, Elaine. Sky diving is not for me.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have always thought sky diving would be fun, but I'm a huge chicken. Now for cancer. I am a stage four survivor. It doesn't have to be a death sentence. Thank you for sharing this post with us.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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I have always thought sky diving would be fun, but I'm a huge chicken. Now for cancer. I am a stage four survivor. It doesn't have to be a death sentence. Thank you for sharing this post with us.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thanks, Barb. Congratulations on your fight with cancer. My wife is having that battle now.
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Sending prayers. It's scary.