Morning on the Lake
Summer has its own aroma.21 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
C2,
I like the metaphor of being drunk on nature instead of booze. The sights, sounds and smells of nature can efffect you like this.
Good use of line breaks.
Keep writing, good luck in the contest and stay healthy.
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reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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C2,
I like the metaphor of being drunk on nature instead of booze. The sights, sounds and smells of nature can efffect you like this.
Good use of line breaks.
Keep writing, good luck in the contest and stay healthy.
dp
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you!
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No problem, C2
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Comment from karenina
I ran to check if there was a syllable requirement and there is: 2-2-5-7-5.
Clearly you hit the mark with this poem. More than that, your choice of words builds a tone, a mood, and a sense of almost Zen-like peace. I saw what you saw, I smelled what you smelled, I felt the heady thrill of communing with nature. Nice entry into this contest! I hope you do well!
Karenina
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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I ran to check if there was a syllable requirement and there is: 2-2-5-7-5.
Clearly you hit the mark with this poem. More than that, your choice of words builds a tone, a mood, and a sense of almost Zen-like peace. I saw what you saw, I smelled what you smelled, I felt the heady thrill of communing with nature. Nice entry into this contest! I hope you do well!
Karenina
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you!
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Welcome!
Comment from juliaSjames
Excellent write. I've never experienced the scent of oakmoss, but that doesn't matter. . I can recall the overpowering aroma of summer scents. The poem also conveys the heat and humidity of summer in your well chosen words.
I particularly like
"warm air on water" for the combination of alliteration and sensory appeal.
Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Excellent write. I've never experienced the scent of oakmoss, but that doesn't matter. . I can recall the overpowering aroma of summer scents. The poem also conveys the heat and humidity of summer in your well chosen words.
I particularly like
"warm air on water" for the combination of alliteration and sensory appeal.
Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from JoannaN
What I like about your poem is that you managed to find so much art in such a little, simple scene. Poetry is the art of searching inspiration everywhere.
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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What I like about your poem is that you managed to find so much art in such a little, simple scene. Poetry is the art of searching inspiration everywhere.
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Susan Newell
C2,
There is no feeling like that of awaking to an early morn on the lake, with the overnight fog just beginning to burn off. It seems to charge all the senses and create a feeling that all is right with the world. Very acute observation put into poetry.
Sue
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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C2,
There is no feeling like that of awaking to an early morn on the lake, with the overnight fog just beginning to burn off. It seems to charge all the senses and create a feeling that all is right with the world. Very acute observation put into poetry.
Sue
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thanks Susan!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Marienkiefer
A very nice poem, with movement, scents and sensations of Nature.
Celebrating nature it's wonders and beauty, connections to the land and the environment...Stories that emerge from irreplaceable moments. Reminding us of some of the ideas that surface in the book by RW Kimmerer.
Re-story-ation, and stories that come from the land.- Braiding Sweetgrass, by Robin Wall Kimmerer
Lovely poem celebrating nature.
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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A very nice poem, with movement, scents and sensations of Nature.
Celebrating nature it's wonders and beauty, connections to the land and the environment...Stories that emerge from irreplaceable moments. Reminding us of some of the ideas that surface in the book by RW Kimmerer.
Re-story-ation, and stories that come from the land.- Braiding Sweetgrass, by Robin Wall Kimmerer
Lovely poem celebrating nature.
Comment Written 10-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you. Have never read RWK but will have to get a copy of Braiding Sweetgrass.
Comment from leather
This little piece really addresses the senses -- I felt like I could touch the warmth of the air and smell the moss. Wonderful 5 line poem. I wish you the best with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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This little piece really addresses the senses -- I felt like I could touch the warmth of the air and smell the moss. Wonderful 5 line poem. I wish you the best with the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thanks for thegenerous review. I?m glad you enjoyed reading it. The pic was from the deck of my lakehouse in East Texas.
Comment from BeckyMann
Absolutely, you can for sure say this about all is the four seasons. They have certain smells that start in childhood and stick with us. It's amazing really. Good luck with everything.
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Absolutely, you can for sure say this about all is the four seasons. They have certain smells that start in childhood and stick with us. It's amazing really. Good luck with everything.
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thanks Becky!
Comment from Erika Seshadri
You do a great job with these short little pieces. It's not easy to convey so much with just a few words. Good luck in the contest. This should do well.
Take care,
Erika
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reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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You do a great job with these short little pieces. It's not easy to convey so much with just a few words. Good luck in the contest. This should do well.
Take care,
Erika
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Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from R56Ma3
I love the descriptive imagery in this moving and relaxing piece. Makes me think of a vacation. I enjoyed reading this and I thank you for sharing. R56ma3:Susan C.
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reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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I love the descriptive imagery in this moving and relaxing piece. Makes me think of a vacation. I enjoyed reading this and I thank you for sharing. R56ma3:Susan C.
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Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Thank you.
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You're welcome
