The Return
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Comment from dmt1967
Margot made her decision (and went across) and climbed into bed. (walked across the hallway,)
His feathery kisses continued on her neck (when her head tipped back as he lowered her onto the pillow again.) (as he lowered her onto the pillow. Her head tipped back.) In my opinion, this, or something like this, sounds better. More dramatic.
Another great chapter and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Margot made her decision (and went across) and climbed into bed. (walked across the hallway,)
His feathery kisses continued on her neck (when her head tipped back as he lowered her onto the pillow again.) (as he lowered her onto the pillow. Her head tipped back.) In my opinion, this, or something like this, sounds better. More dramatic.
Another great chapter and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thank you for reading this chapter, and for those suggestions, Jackie, I'll sort them out. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying the story. Warm hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! I wonder if you needed a warning for this post. Lol. Poor Margot - how will she recover after that experience?
I liked the details about the complicated dress they used to wear. I kept wondering about if she needed to go - what kind of set up they had - a chamber pot in the corner?
Hooray for Bessie in finding that document. I guess they will be able to bring Lord Brandon to justice soon.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Oh my! I wonder if you needed a warning for this post. Lol. Poor Margot - how will she recover after that experience?
I liked the details about the complicated dress they used to wear. I kept wondering about if she needed to go - what kind of set up they had - a chamber pot in the corner?
Hooray for Bessie in finding that document. I guess they will be able to bring Lord Brandon to justice soon.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much for reading this chapter, Helen. There is a warning on it, in fact I had two to start with but Lancelott said I only needed one. I took my own warning off but the site warning is still there. I had to let people know before they read it, I was nervous enough posting it!! It's been okay though, so far no complaints!!! LOL. I am not really into scenes like that, but it had to happen.
I should have put something about the commode, which is what they had behind a screen. I had it in my Time Travel Trilogy, but forgot to add it to this story. I'll go back and put it in a previous chapter and add bits in the following ones. Thanks for the nudge on that. Thanks again, my friend, for the lovely review. Warm hugs, Sandra xxxx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, no I didn't see any errors sweet girl...I think Miles was in complete control...couldn't have preformed any better...if I had preformed it myself...it's times like this...a one night stand comes in real handy...
but now Margot can't desert the ship...or it would mean
leaving Meg's body...and she would have to live a life of...
cold showers and tears...
but I'm glad Bessie is sure Lord Brandon had no idea the document still existed...but what exactly is going to happen soon???...I can understand why your mind was a little distracted...I was starting to slide off the couch...but that's sigh of a greatttt writer...holding the attention of your readers...
well let's see how you and your muse get Margot out of there...
this is one of your top two best of the best chapters...if not #1 my amazing friend...had my attention...really very well written...soooooo much love on the way...Linda xxoo ð???ð?¥µð???ð???ð??¹
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Hi Sandra, no I didn't see any errors sweet girl...I think Miles was in complete control...couldn't have preformed any better...if I had preformed it myself...it's times like this...a one night stand comes in real handy...
but now Margot can't desert the ship...or it would mean
leaving Meg's body...and she would have to live a life of...
cold showers and tears...
but I'm glad Bessie is sure Lord Brandon had no idea the document still existed...but what exactly is going to happen soon???...I can understand why your mind was a little distracted...I was starting to slide off the couch...but that's sigh of a greatttt writer...holding the attention of your readers...
well let's see how you and your muse get Margot out of there...
this is one of your top two best of the best chapters...if not #1 my amazing friend...had my attention...really very well written...soooooo much love on the way...Linda xxoo ð???ð?¥µð???ð???ð??¹
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thank you dear Linda, for another of your fun, amazing reviews. I love them. I'm afraid it does look like cold showers and tears is going to be something Margot will have to put up with until.... Oh, my memory is getting terrible!! Lol. Thank you wonderful you, I'm so pleased you enjoyed this chapter, it was damned hard to write!!! Millions on hugs and a mountain of love, my dear friend! :)) Sandra xxxxxx
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I think you need to see a doctor about
selective memory problem you are having...
and take your muse with you...
and hard to write...who are you kidding...
all that wisdom....experience...hmmmmm...
your alwayssssss so welcome my so amazing friend...trillions of hugs right back at ya...and a endless amount of love...smiling big...Linda xxoo
Comment from Cindy Warren
How is Margot ever going to leave Miles and go back to her own time? Now that she knows what she's been missing, she's not going to want to give it up. Margot and Meg might be the same person in a way, but they live in two different times. I can't wait to see how you plan to sort this out.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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How is Margot ever going to leave Miles and go back to her own time? Now that she knows what she's been missing, she's not going to want to give it up. Margot and Meg might be the same person in a way, but they live in two different times. I can't wait to see how you plan to sort this out.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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It's going to be a tough one, but it has to happen. :(
I think you'll like the last chapter. It's not coming yet awhile, there is still a lot to sort out. Thank you so much, Cindy. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my story. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Wish fulfillment in reality is not so easily convenient, here in this chapter Margot gets; here everything is normal; her office is revelation; but happening in reality is somewhat different to happen; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Wish fulfillment in reality is not so easily convenient, here in this chapter Margot gets; here everything is normal; her office is revelation; but happening in reality is somewhat different to happen; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, ALCREATOR LITT DEAR, for another of your great reviews. I really appreciate them. I hope you continue to follow and enjoy my story. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with all aspect of this chapter, Sandra.
Of course, the intimate bedroom scene had to be included.
You handled that with finesse. At one moment, Margot thought
Miles was going back to his time with her. Hmm. That leads
me to think there is more than one person experiencing time
travel/merging--Margot and Miles. Of course, Bessie won't be
telling anything to anyone. Now that scene is past, the search
for more incriminating evidence should continue and it'll slap
Ol' Cranky upside his head. I look forward to finding out what
evidence is found and how it'll impact the story. Also, when
everything all said and done, I wonder how life will be for one, or
all when the time travel ends.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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You did a great job with all aspect of this chapter, Sandra.
Of course, the intimate bedroom scene had to be included.
You handled that with finesse. At one moment, Margot thought
Miles was going back to his time with her. Hmm. That leads
me to think there is more than one person experiencing time
travel/merging--Margot and Miles. Of course, Bessie won't be
telling anything to anyone. Now that scene is past, the search
for more incriminating evidence should continue and it'll slap
Ol' Cranky upside his head. I look forward to finding out what
evidence is found and how it'll impact the story. Also, when
everything all said and done, I wonder how life will be for one, or
all when the time travel ends.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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Thank you so very much, Jan, for such a lovely review. You are sending me off to bed with a smile on my face, I'm so pleased you found the bedroom scene was handled well, that has made my day. I was worried about it. You are one whose words mean so much, and I really appreciated this. Thanks, my friend, and a big hug for the sixth star! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from nomi338
Whew! What a chapter, full of exciting love/sex play. This is certainly a pleasing advancement of the story so far. Meg/Margot is having the time of her life with the man of her dreams. It is one thing to be in love with someone who might or might not return your feelings, but to have them fully returned and physically confirmed is the maximum fulfillment.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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Whew! What a chapter, full of exciting love/sex play. This is certainly a pleasing advancement of the story so far. Meg/Margot is having the time of her life with the man of her dreams. It is one thing to be in love with someone who might or might not return your feelings, but to have them fully returned and physically confirmed is the maximum fulfillment.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Nomi, you are so right. To love and be loved is the best love. I'm so pleased you liked this chapter, it was difficult to write but so far everyone has enjoyed it! Thanks again, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Judy Lawless
You led us quietly into this love scene, thinking it might not be going to happen that night, and then surprised us, Sandra. You took us along for all the excitement of this love-making, without being too graphic, but we felt the eroticism anyway. Very well done!
Now we are wondering what it is Bessie has discovered, and if the marriage will really take place, and will it be Meg or Margot? Can't wait.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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You led us quietly into this love scene, thinking it might not be going to happen that night, and then surprised us, Sandra. You took us along for all the excitement of this love-making, without being too graphic, but we felt the eroticism anyway. Very well done!
Now we are wondering what it is Bessie has discovered, and if the marriage will really take place, and will it be Meg or Margot? Can't wait.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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Thank you so very much, Judy! You have made my day. I was so nervous posting this part, but most have said it was done nicely. Thank you so much for the sixth star, too, I'm just blown away! Thank you, my friend. Bessie has discovered something really interesting! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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You're welcome, Sandra. I know how you felt. I felt the same when I was writing my honeymoon scene too. :)
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They are hard to write, aren't they? xx
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For sure! It's hard to get the right balance, to portray the feelings, yet not offend anyone.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
The file she had found in Mr Cranky's office was a revelation.
(Who's Mr. Cranky?)
I must say you did very well here writing about the love scene between Miles and Meg. (Margot)
It was done with taste. Well done my sweet friend. xxx Nancy:)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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The file she had found in Mr Cranky's office was a revelation.
(Who's Mr. Cranky?)
I must say you did very well here writing about the love scene between Miles and Meg. (Margot)
It was done with taste. Well done my sweet friend. xxx Nancy:)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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Thank you, dear Nancy, for such a lovely review. I can't tell you how much I appreciate what you said about the love scene, thank you, dear friend. Mr Cranky was what the called Mr Crankston-Smythe the solicitor, because he wasn't nice. Lol! Thank you for the lovely sixth star, you are wonderful!! Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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I thought that might be who you meant, but maybe it could be a typo so I mentioned it. LOL You're welcome, Sandra. You are one of my favorite writers. Nancy:)
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Aw, Bless your lovely heart!! I love you, my wonderful friend. xxxx
Comment from Jay Squires
Whoa! Sandra, you pulled out all the stops with this one. You pulled up just short of erotica, but your skid mark outside of it were heady with the smell of burnt rubber. I'm teasing, of course. You wrote the love scene just as it should have been written. I loved it!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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Whoa! Sandra, you pulled out all the stops with this one. You pulled up just short of erotica, but your skid mark outside of it were heady with the smell of burnt rubber. I'm teasing, of course. You wrote the love scene just as it should have been written. I loved it!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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Aw, thank you, Jay! I've been worried about this chapter ever since I posted it, but it had to be written. I'm so happy that you enjoyed it. Thank you, and a big hug for the golden star!! Love and hugs, my friend, :)) Sandra xxx