The Inn at Blackpool
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Fathers Four"These are free-verse poems.
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Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written free verse poem it has a great flow and rhyme scheme. I like the repeated line Light the fires dear Cindy we'll be coming home to you. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a beautifully written free verse poem it has a great flow and rhyme scheme. I like the repeated line Light the fires dear Cindy we'll be coming home to you. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thanks so very much...I wrote this as a sort of sing song drinking tune...never sure of the exact rules...but lots of fun.....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell
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Your welcome. Ok yes I can see that now it?s an awesome song. 🙂
Comment from Anne Johnston
Well chosen words to tell this sad story. Good news that some men were going home after the battle, but sad that one did not make it. Great rhyming and an easy poem to read.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Well chosen words to tell this sad story. Good news that some men were going home after the battle, but sad that one did not make it. Great rhyming and an easy poem to read.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thanks so very much......Good luck to you and yours....Stu Harrell
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You are very welcome
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
So many lives lost in so many battles for lands which ultimately each man must leave behind -when will we ever learn?
Your poem is melodious and tells a haunting story of one episode in a world of seemingly endless wars. I love how 'dear Cindy' is not going to be left wanting.
(Enniskillen also known as Inniskilling Fusiliers)
At the time of the Waterloo battles Ireland was considered part of England's territory. Only later was the Irish Free State or Eire formed. Ultimately, six counties still remain part of the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland. Oddly enough Enniskillen is in the north so part of the UK.
Warmly,
Juliette
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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So many lives lost in so many battles for lands which ultimately each man must leave behind -when will we ever learn?
Your poem is melodious and tells a haunting story of one episode in a world of seemingly endless wars. I love how 'dear Cindy' is not going to be left wanting.
(Enniskillen also known as Inniskilling Fusiliers)
At the time of the Waterloo battles Ireland was considered part of England's territory. Only later was the Irish Free State or Eire formed. Ultimately, six counties still remain part of the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland. Oddly enough Enniskillen is in the north so part of the UK.
Warmly,
Juliette
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thanks so very much for your kind thoughts....as a tiny footnote...several of us gathered after the Vietnam War and pledged to live as those who were killed might have lived..not to be grumpy forever bitter veterans.... I was a foot soldier and in late Nov 1969...we lost one of our pilots...a truly laughing Cavalier from the Bronx......years later....as an old widower...I danced the Blackpool ballroom.....I was an average dancer, with a great partner, in the Pro-Am tournament days before the real pros.....I had trained for that as a tribute to that pilot and so many others....plus, for all of the girls in my life(from grumpy aunts to the girls of Bangkok) who tolerated my preposterous thundering on the great sweep of things. May God bless them and bless you as well......Thanks again....Stu Harrell
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is a good one, Stu. Kind of a ballad feel to it. There's a lot of rhyme in there for free verse, which is fine by me. If you keep the rhyme and touch up the meter a bit, you will have a top notch poem.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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This is a good one, Stu. Kind of a ballad feel to it. There's a lot of rhyme in there for free verse, which is fine by me. If you keep the rhyme and touch up the meter a bit, you will have a top notch poem.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Dear Sir....Thanks so much...you are right... this has a little of a drinking song texture....so it may be off base for a free verse format..not sure I always get it HAHA....Thanks again and Godspeed to you and yours....Stu Harrell
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely story in this poem, and so lyrical too. I can imagine Cindy's delight at having so many fathers love her child to honour their fallen comrade, is wonderful. Although this might be a fiction story, it is based on fact. Well done, a lovely poem to read. :)) Sandra
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What a lovely story in this poem, and so lyrical too. I can imagine Cindy's delight at having so many fathers love her child to honour their fallen comrade, is wonderful. Although this might be a fiction story, it is based on fact. Well done, a lovely poem to read. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much....you are right....I just made this up...probably drank too much Kipling HAHA....Godspeed to you and yours....Stu Harrell
Comment from karenina
Love this! It may well be the wee bit of Irish in me...but truly my eyes were brimming! Here's to the breadth of the Irish heart-- and the babes who never got to know their dads!
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Love this! It may well be the wee bit of Irish in me...but truly my eyes were brimming! Here's to the breadth of the Irish heart-- and the babes who never got to know their dads!
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much....I raised quite a few glasses for St. Paddy's Day....so here it is!....Best Wishes to you and yours...Stu Harrell
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I has me a Guinness or three myself!
Comment from Jane Jane King
This is a very sweet and loving tribute to a very special person from some very special and loyal friends. The warmth and charm and and sincerity of this poem is beguiling. I felt as though I knew these people personally...and liked all of them very much. Wonderful writing!
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This is a very sweet and loving tribute to a very special person from some very special and loyal friends. The warmth and charm and and sincerity of this poem is beguiling. I felt as though I knew these people personally...and liked all of them very much. Wonderful writing!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thanks so very much....these are fun to glue together ..with the help of a keyboard!....a sort of singsong tone....Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell
Comment from nomi338
What a sweet and thrilling tribute to a bunch of fighting men with hearts of solid gold. I am sure that the family of the fallen warrior will be grateful until their dying day, of the way their loved one was honored by men who fought right by his side, and who were just as hurt and upset by the fact that he died.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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What a sweet and thrilling tribute to a bunch of fighting men with hearts of solid gold. I am sure that the family of the fallen warrior will be grateful until their dying day, of the way their loved one was honored by men who fought right by his side, and who were just as hurt and upset by the fact that he died.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much...we lost friends in Vietnam and have tried to keep in touch with their families through these many years....Godspeed to you and yours......Stu Harrell
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed this a lot with its ballad-like flow, and I also enjoyed the repeating refrain. I am not sure if it qualifies as Free Verse, as it seems too ordered and has too much rhyme, but it is an excellent and well written poem.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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I enjoyed this a lot with its ballad-like flow, and I also enjoyed the repeating refrain. I am not sure if it qualifies as Free Verse, as it seems too ordered and has too much rhyme, but it is an excellent and well written poem.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much...you are right...this may fall short for the free verse rules....not sure I completely get it....but these little sing song formats are fun to put together.....Godspeed to you and yours....Stu Harrell
Comment from jessizero
This is a good piece of free verse. You did a great job with the prompt. I like the repetition. Thank you so much for sharing this here. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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This is a good piece of free verse. You did a great job with the prompt. I like the repetition. Thank you so much for sharing this here. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much...you are right ...this was written to be bouncy and repetitive...a sort of drinking ballad....Godspeed to you and yours....Stu Harrell