The Return
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Comment from tfawcus
There are countless ways of saying that someone isn't pretty/gifted/etc., but you have chosen two that are a perfect match for the period feel of your story:
"She's not the prettiest flower in the garden, or the brightest light in the chandelier."
The plot is really beginning to come together in this chapter. Plenty of intrigue hinted at for the chapters soon to come. Can't wait!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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There are countless ways of saying that someone isn't pretty/gifted/etc., but you have chosen two that are a perfect match for the period feel of your story:
"She's not the prettiest flower in the garden, or the brightest light in the chandelier."
The plot is really beginning to come together in this chapter. Plenty of intrigue hinted at for the chapters soon to come. Can't wait!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Thank you for this really lovely review, Tony! I'm so pleased you thought my description of Gwendolyn was perfect. I didn't want to overstate it. And thank you for the golden star, my friend! Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Ricky1024
"The Return Chapter 11'
This was a well written chapter, rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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"The Return Chapter 11'
This was a well written chapter, rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Ricky, I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my story. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I really like the mystery and its plot in this story. What a great book it will be, but it will also keep a person reading it, on their toes. You cannot skip the pages; you have to read every word. Visiting the characters and not being seen is being invisible.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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I really like the mystery and its plot in this story. What a great book it will be, but it will also keep a person reading it, on their toes. You cannot skip the pages; you have to read every word. Visiting the characters and not being seen is being invisible.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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What a fabulous review, Rosemary! Thank you so very much. You really have boosted my ego, lol. It's so encourageing when I read reviews that tell me how much they enjoy the plot. The six star is so nice, too! Thank you, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a well written and thought out chapter, Sandra. You gave readers some great info and led them through the process of how Meg and Bessie are working to solve the murder. Yes, Bessie is a crucial character in the whole scenario. The description of the father's house Richard and his wife inherited was super. His wife is devious, I believe. I also believe she is involved somehow. Maybe she did something to the saddle thinking Richard or his mistress might suffer from it. The part about searching for more info will likely provide some clues. I believe Richard's wife is an alcoholic and would do anything.
Thanks for sharing and I look forward to the next chapter.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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This is a well written and thought out chapter, Sandra. You gave readers some great info and led them through the process of how Meg and Bessie are working to solve the murder. Yes, Bessie is a crucial character in the whole scenario. The description of the father's house Richard and his wife inherited was super. His wife is devious, I believe. I also believe she is involved somehow. Maybe she did something to the saddle thinking Richard or his mistress might suffer from it. The part about searching for more info will likely provide some clues. I believe Richard's wife is an alcoholic and would do anything.
Thanks for sharing and I look forward to the next chapter.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Thank you! Aw, Jan I love reading your reviews, I'm sure I've told you before. They are always so encouraging, and I really do appreciate you. Now there are three people who might want to get rid of Meg. Margot and Bessie have a lot of detecting to do to try and discover who it was. Thank you so much for the sixth star, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Ric Myworld
For the cat to be among the pigeons, I'm guess would mean that feathers are about to fly. Not a saying that I'm used to hearing, but definitely one that gets a point across. LOL. Thanks for sharing another find chapter.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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For the cat to be among the pigeons, I'm guess would mean that feathers are about to fly. Not a saying that I'm used to hearing, but definitely one that gets a point across. LOL. Thanks for sharing another find chapter.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for your continued support dear Ric, and the lovely comments. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying the story. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Sanku
Richard and Gwendolyn look like an interesting couple. It is interesting that the two ladies are invisible and they can watch what happened hundreds of years back...going very well.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Richard and Gwendolyn look like an interesting couple. It is interesting that the two ladies are invisible and they can watch what happened hundreds of years back...going very well.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Sanku, for reading this chapter. I'm glad you think it's going well!! Warm hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from amahra
Though just read a couple of chapters, this still is engaging. Will try to catch up.
"...he was beyond plain, but that everyone, including her father had thought of her that way and hadn't bothered to get to know the woman beneath the looks..."[liked this line]
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Though just read a couple of chapters, this still is engaging. Will try to catch up.
"...he was beyond plain, but that everyone, including her father had thought of her that way and hadn't bothered to get to know the woman beneath the looks..."[liked this line]
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Aw, thank you, Amahra, I'm so pleased you are enjoying my story. And I'm super glad you liked that line! It's true of so many people in real life. So sad. Thanks, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is a well written piece. I assume you are a seasoned writer as your writing flows so naturally. I especially enjoyed the way you wrote the dialogue, an area I need to improve upon. My only note would be to maybe look at breaking up the longer paragraphs.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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This is a well written piece. I assume you are a seasoned writer as your writing flows so naturally. I especially enjoyed the way you wrote the dialogue, an area I need to improve upon. My only note would be to maybe look at breaking up the longer paragraphs.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, and helpful comments. I will take a look at the paragraphs, there are some that I agree with you about! :)) I'm delighted you enjoyed reading this chapter. Have a lovely day. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Jay Squires
Strange the caste system and the hereditary titles passed from Father to son, and how it figures into the plotline of your fine novel. And all the while the ticking clock brings us ever closer to Megan's and Meg's birth (and death) dates. You can certainly string together a fine story, Sandra, and keep the reader on the edge of his/her seat.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Strange the caste system and the hereditary titles passed from Father to son, and how it figures into the plotline of your fine novel. And all the while the ticking clock brings us ever closer to Megan's and Meg's birth (and death) dates. You can certainly string together a fine story, Sandra, and keep the reader on the edge of his/her seat.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Titles have always been passed down except those given to a 'commoner' by the Queen/King for exceptional work, or winning lots of gold medals in the Olympics. Those titles are one off.
Thank you so much for another of your fabulous review, Jay, and the compliment! You say the nicest things. :)) And a big hug, dear friend for the sixth golden star!! Love and hugs, Sandra xxxx
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It doesn't look good for Meg. Gwendolyn seems to be smarter than they had supposed and obviously very angry. Richard seems as bad as they suspected. So, who is going to kill Meg? One spot to change-- . . . top when (he) finds out . . .
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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It doesn't look good for Meg. Gwendolyn seems to be smarter than they had supposed and obviously very angry. Richard seems as bad as they suspected. So, who is going to kill Meg? One spot to change-- . . . top when (he) finds out . . .
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Thank you for picking up that missing (he), Carol, I've added it now! And thanks so much for another lovely review, I'm so pleased you are still enjoying the story. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx