The Return
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Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
Excellent push and pull between Miles and Margot. It seems Miles is slowly forgetting his actions in the future, as it self corrects.
No new information, just conformation that Miles father and Richard are likely to be involved.
'It would've been so different if'n I'd been here when all this happened, but I's were sent to help out elsewhere.'
That's a revealing line. Almost like The Powers That Be are involved, sending Bessie to "fix" the past (to impact the future) :)
Perhaps Miles and Meg were more successful than Miles realizes.
You've kept the reader guessing. Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Hello Sandra,
Excellent push and pull between Miles and Margot. It seems Miles is slowly forgetting his actions in the future, as it self corrects.
No new information, just conformation that Miles father and Richard are likely to be involved.
'It would've been so different if'n I'd been here when all this happened, but I's were sent to help out elsewhere.'
That's a revealing line. Almost like The Powers That Be are involved, sending Bessie to "fix" the past (to impact the future) :)
Perhaps Miles and Meg were more successful than Miles realizes.
You've kept the reader guessing. Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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There's got to be those Powers That Be sorting things out for us, lol. I'm sure Bessie and Mildred swap stories, too.
Thank you so much, Robert, for this really lovely review, and that fabulous golden star. I'm glad I'm still keeping your interest in the story. Thank you, my dear friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
He seems a little too easily distracted by Margot. But he seems head over heels when he is with Meg. Still, he is giving her a horse, and isn't that the reason for her death? Looking forward to reading more of Margot's. adventures.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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He seems a little too easily distracted by Margot. But he seems head over heels when he is with Meg. Still, he is giving her a horse, and isn't that the reason for her death? Looking forward to reading more of Margot's. adventures.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Carol, for another lovely review. Yes, it was how she was killed, but Miles will have that wiped from his memory while Margot and Bessie get to the truth. I'm so pleased you are enjoying my story. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from estory
In this chapter we see Margot at once attracted to Miles but also holding back, as if something about him doesn't seem quite right. The physical attraction is there but she also doesn't like the idea of being Meg. She wants to hold on to herself. There's a couple of redundances in the dialogue I think, You can tighten it up a bit with a good edit. estory
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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In this chapter we see Margot at once attracted to Miles but also holding back, as if something about him doesn't seem quite right. The physical attraction is there but she also doesn't like the idea of being Meg. She wants to hold on to herself. There's a couple of redundances in the dialogue I think, You can tighten it up a bit with a good edit. estory
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank you, estory, for another lovely review. Yes, I will be checking it all out in the final edit and I expect to lose a fair bit. I'm glad you are still enjoying the story, thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another great chapter, Sandra. You've done a good job portraying the emotions and sparks between Margot and Miles an left us wondering if somehow they will become the couple from the past. Good hook for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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This is another great chapter, Sandra. You've done a good job portraying the emotions and sparks between Margot and Miles an left us wondering if somehow they will become the couple from the past. Good hook for the next chapter.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank you, July, for this lovely review, I'm delighted you are still enjoying the story!
And Happy Birthday, my friend!! Love and hugs, Sandra xxxx
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You?re welcome, Sandra, and thanks for the birthday wishes. Hugs
Comment from alexisleech
Another great chapter, Sandra. You managed to manoeuvre around the confusion created by the two different time lines with believable dexterity. It must be confusing for Margo having the hots for a ghost, especially when her alter ego is still alive -I can't wait to see what you're going to do next!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Another great chapter, Sandra. You managed to manoeuvre around the confusion created by the two different time lines with believable dexterity. It must be confusing for Margo having the hots for a ghost, especially when her alter ego is still alive -I can't wait to see what you're going to do next!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank so very much, Alexis, for this lovely review. Yes, poor Margot is going to find it over the next few weeks. I'm sending you an extra special hug for that golden star, my friend!! Love and hugs, :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
Very well written chapter. I appreciated how you expressed the extreme passions and lust that Margot and Miles had been feeling but still kept it classy at this point in time.
My favorite example below:
{Margot wrestled with her bedroom thoughts, despatching(dispatching?) them quickly to the back of her mind.}--gets the point across really well, and keeps tension high without being crass.
Thank you for sharing I'm looking forward to continuing the story!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Very well written chapter. I appreciated how you expressed the extreme passions and lust that Margot and Miles had been feeling but still kept it classy at this point in time.
My favorite example below:
{Margot wrestled with her bedroom thoughts, despatching(dispatching?) them quickly to the back of her mind.}--gets the point across really well, and keeps tension high without being crass.
Thank you for sharing I'm looking forward to continuing the story!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much, Ethan, for this really lovely review. It was so nice of you to comment on that passionate part. And thank you for that lovely golden star, that's so kind of you. :))
I had to Google 'despatch' v 'dispatch' and apparently they are both right, but the UK people use 'despatch' and the US the other one. But, having said that, it also says that our way, 'despatch' is going out of style now due to the fact that most other English speaking countries spell it your way. You didn't expect a lesson when you pointed that out, did you? Lol, and I didn't realise I'd learn something, too! So I will change it. Thank you, my friend, I loved your review. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
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I had not expected a lesson, no lol. I apologize for the correction, have a great day!
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Absolutely NO apology needed! I've now changed my way of spelling it. You have a wonderful day, also! xxx
Comment from royowen
Things are starting to fall into place Sandra, the remarkable thing is that Miles, after being aware that Bessie and Margot are from the future, he will forget everything from that experience in time, but his brother is scurrilously involved, but miles will not Marry someone of his father,'s choosing, well done my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Things are starting to fall into place Sandra, the remarkable thing is that Miles, after being aware that Bessie and Margot are from the future, he will forget everything from that experience in time, but his brother is scurrilously involved, but miles will not Marry someone of his father,'s choosing, well done my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much, Roy, for this lovely review. Yes, things are moving forward and Bessie and Margot have some detecting to do! That will be fun. Warm hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Good job
Comment from Jay Squires
Whoa, this is sooooo good, Sandra. It's no wonder it won Book of the Month. The theme is palpable on so many levels, and your book embraces multiple genres that appeal to a wide array of people. Add to that your impeccable storytelling skills and ... well ... you have a winner here.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Whoa, this is sooooo good, Sandra. It's no wonder it won Book of the Month. The theme is palpable on so many levels, and your book embraces multiple genres that appeal to a wide array of people. Add to that your impeccable storytelling skills and ... well ... you have a winner here.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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That would be nice!! Lol. Thank you so much for those lovely comments, Jay, that was so sweet of you. I've given up thinking my books will be taken on by a publishing company at my age, but it's lovely you think it's good enough. Who knows what will happen? We can live in hopes. Thank you so much for the golden star, dear friend, I really appreciate it. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from lyenochka
That's a most peculiar thing - Mile's memory disappearing as he returns to his time. But on the other hand, he and Margot are so powerfully attracted to each other. So what would happen if Meg is saved and the accident prevented? The timeline would change and maybe there wouldn't be a Margot in the future?
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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That's a most peculiar thing - Mile's memory disappearing as he returns to his time. But on the other hand, he and Margot are so powerfully attracted to each other. So what would happen if Meg is saved and the accident prevented? The timeline would change and maybe there wouldn't be a Margot in the future?
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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More revelations to come, Helen, as the story progresses and then you'll understand how it works. But, until then ...!? Thank you so much for reading and telling me your thoughts, I'm glad you are still with me. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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Love and hugs back!! 💖
Comment from aryr
What a great continuation chapter, Sandra. I thought is was great that Margot, Bessie and Miles were able to see each other but nobody else from the time was able to. Margot and Miles had a little time with each other which was definitely not impressive. I am so glad the ladies are investigating the whole situation. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Blessings, hugs n smiles.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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What a great continuation chapter, Sandra. I thought is was great that Margot, Bessie and Miles were able to see each other but nobody else from the time was able to. Margot and Miles had a little time with each other which was definitely not impressive. I am so glad the ladies are investigating the whole situation. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Blessings, hugs n smiles.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much, Alie, for this lovely review and your wonderful comments. I always appreciate you, my friend. I'm so glad you are enjoying my story!! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
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You are so very welcome, Sandra. Hugs!