If Bubbles Could Be Butterflies
Picture This Club26 total reviews
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Yvonne.
I like this poem a lot because of the constant meter and the modified ballad style. I have written song lyrics using the style you used here, and it has always been a favorite of mine. You did it in great style. I am impressed with your reference to the bubbles as, "tiny rainbow orbs." That is an amazing description.
Robert
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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Hi Yvonne.
I like this poem a lot because of the constant meter and the modified ballad style. I have written song lyrics using the style you used here, and it has always been a favorite of mine. You did it in great style. I am impressed with your reference to the bubbles as, "tiny rainbow orbs." That is an amazing description.
Robert
Comment Written 01-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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Thank you for this wonderful review and stars!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Terry Broxson
This poem is an excellent entry for this challenge. I really like the imagery of the butterflies floating up to land upon a star. And then, if by chance they might even land on a fluffy cloud. Excellent work!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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This poem is an excellent entry for this challenge. I really like the imagery of the butterflies floating up to land upon a star. And then, if by chance they might even land on a fluffy cloud. Excellent work!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Sally Law
This is such a beautiful picture prompt and you have risen to the occasion. Bubbles are like sweet fleeting dreams. I still love to play with them. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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This is such a beautiful picture prompt and you have risen to the occasion. Bubbles are like sweet fleeting dreams. I still love to play with them. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 01-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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I do, too. Thanks, Sally.
Comment from T B Botts
What a delightful poem Yvonne! It was fun to read and think about them soaring up into the air, distressing the clouds. This flowed really well and was a joy to read. Thanks so much for sharing.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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What a delightful poem Yvonne! It was fun to read and think about them soaring up into the air, distressing the clouds. This flowed really well and was a joy to read. Thanks so much for sharing.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from R.B.Bunn
This was lovely. It's just so wholesome and cute. Even the rhythm plays to the cutesy vibe of the piece. It really puts me back in that childhood place of innocent imagination.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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This was lovely. It's just so wholesome and cute. Even the rhythm plays to the cutesy vibe of the piece. It really puts me back in that childhood place of innocent imagination.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your club response, Yvonne. I loved reading it. The imagery is fantastic. I could see the bubbles/butterflies on their adventure. Your lines read smoothly with great rhymes. I like the many examples you gave readers about the journey of the bubbles. The line about tickling you was adorable. The personification of the clouds and bubbles made your poem come alive. I like that the bubbles return home if rain begins. This is another of your fun poems that highlights your talent in any genre.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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You did a great job with your club response, Yvonne. I loved reading it. The imagery is fantastic. I could see the bubbles/butterflies on their adventure. Your lines read smoothly with great rhymes. I like the many examples you gave readers about the journey of the bubbles. The line about tickling you was adorable. The personification of the clouds and bubbles made your poem come alive. I like that the bubbles return home if rain begins. This is another of your fun poems that highlights your talent in any genre.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you for a beautiful review, and compliments. I appreciate them very much!
Comment from Sugarray77
What a lovely poem, Yvonne. I thoroughly enjoyed the lilting cadence and the magical theme of butterflies. It all meshed together beautifully. Well done on this fine piece of writing.
Melissa
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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What a lovely poem, Yvonne. I thoroughly enjoyed the lilting cadence and the magical theme of butterflies. It all meshed together beautifully. Well done on this fine piece of writing.
Melissa
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much, Melissa. I'm happy you liked it. It just sort of popped into my head. And we all know what a weird place that is. lol.
Comment from aryr
This was so delightful, damommy. The picture was amazing. Your words showed the extensiveness of their flight- bubbles to butterflies were great. However, once a bubble always a bubble regardless of our dreams. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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This was so delightful, damommy. The picture was amazing. Your words showed the extensiveness of their flight- bubbles to butterflies were great. However, once a bubble always a bubble regardless of our dreams. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you. I was just saying this just sort of popped into my head. And we all know what a weird place that is. lol.
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You are most welcome, Yvonne. Mmm not a weird place at all.
Comment from lyenochka
This is just so delightful! You captured the joy of children imagining the life of these "tiny, rainbow orbs" so well. And you add some science too about the humidity driving them back home!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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This is just so delightful! You captured the joy of children imagining the life of these "tiny, rainbow orbs" so well. And you add some science too about the humidity driving them back home!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you. It just sort of popped into my head. And we all know what a weird place that is. lol.
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Loved it, Yvonne! Love your creative mind! 💞
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a really skillfully- written, delightful poem, a vividly descriptive blend of whimsy and something deeper. Stanza 3 conveys an appealing message about setbacks (the rain and coming back home) but taking them in stride.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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This is a really skillfully- written, delightful poem, a vividly descriptive blend of whimsy and something deeper. Stanza 3 conveys an appealing message about setbacks (the rain and coming back home) but taking them in stride.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you for such a great review!
