One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This was short and sweet. I really like the picture. You have a story in a few lines. I enjoyed reading your story. Keep on writing. Have a great day, and good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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This was short and sweet. I really like the picture. You have a story in a few lines. I enjoyed reading your story. Keep on writing. Have a great day, and good luck.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, Carolyn :) I appreciate your excellent review and kind words.
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You are welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
That's so sweet! Yes, there is nothing so delightful as a child's cheerfulness and the use of alliteration is great in this 5-7-5. I like the happy use of "rain" as a source of joy and a lullaby.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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That's so sweet! Yes, there is nothing so delightful as a child's cheerfulness and the use of alliteration is great in this 5-7-5. I like the happy use of "rain" as a source of joy and a lullaby.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your help and kind words.
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made effective use of your seventeen syllables in this delightful, descriptive piece. Your use of metaphors and alliteration enhance the lovely topic, a young child in nature.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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You have made effective use of your seventeen syllables in this delightful, descriptive piece. Your use of metaphors and alliteration enhance the lovely topic, a young child in nature.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
Wow your middle line is chock full of alliterations. Good phrasing you penned for your ending line.
Do like your kisses-cheeks connection.
Mark
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Gypsy,
Wow your middle line is chock full of alliterations. Good phrasing you penned for your ending line.
Do like your kisses-cheeks connection.
Mark
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from jessizero
I really admire your poetic ability. You always make the most beautiful scenes with so few syllables. This is another lovely poem you have chosen to share. Good work.
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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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I really admire your poetic ability. You always make the most beautiful scenes with so few syllables. This is another lovely poem you have chosen to share. Good work.
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Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from lancellot
Ah, when it rains, the sound does have the effect of putting people to sleep. (me too). I like the image your words invoke. The rains gain a bit of love and magic by running over the chubby cheeks of cherubs before reaching us below.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Ah, when it rains, the sound does have the effect of putting people to sleep. (me too). I like the image your words invoke. The rains gain a bit of love and magic by running over the chubby cheeks of cherubs before reaching us below.
Well done.
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Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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