The Waterfall
A Quatern27 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
This is a very beautifully written poem and I can hear the roar of the waterfall myself! It has lovely rhythm and metre and this Quatern format with the repetition seems just right for the constantly flowing water. Well done - it's lovely.
Wendy
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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This is a very beautifully written poem and I can hear the roar of the waterfall myself! It has lovely rhythm and metre and this Quatern format with the repetition seems just right for the constantly flowing water. Well done - it's lovely.
Wendy
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for a lovely review.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello damommt, Yvonne, I wish that I had a Sixer. Your poem reads and flows well in soft, yet vivid imagery. I especially liked:
behind the cascade I once stepped
(Of this I can relate because I, too, have done this "once." I grew up a city girl, so I didn't get to see many waterfalls.)
I love the format of this poem and your repeating line was well chosen. Silky rhyming. Beautiful artwork choice. A pleasure to see. You are very talented. Keep the blue waters flowing. A nice change from the World news. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Hello damommt, Yvonne, I wish that I had a Sixer. Your poem reads and flows well in soft, yet vivid imagery. I especially liked:
behind the cascade I once stepped
(Of this I can relate because I, too, have done this "once." I grew up a city girl, so I didn't get to see many waterfalls.)
I love the format of this poem and your repeating line was well chosen. Silky rhyming. Beautiful artwork choice. A pleasure to see. You are very talented. Keep the blue waters flowing. A nice change from the World news. LateBloomer
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you. I've stepped behind several waterfalls. They seem mystic to me in some way. I'm glad you stepped behind one, too.
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Stepping behind that waterfall is one of my favorite childhood memories. I was at an away camp that was sponsored for poor inner-city children, and I had a magical experience. At the time, I didn't feel poor at all. I never knew that I was poor until I was a grown woman. Although poor, I lived among the Arts. Thanks for the memory. LateBloomer
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It was the same for me. I didn't realize we weren't rich until I was grown.
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I like your positive spint ... we weren't rich vs. we were poor - lol. LB
Comment from judiverse
Your repeating line works beautifully in all the stanzas. You really convey the sense of awe at seeing the waterfalls. The description of it giving the feeling of stepping inside cathedral walls is excellent. There is something sacred about the falls, as the narrator thinks of all the other people who may have heard the roar. It is a magical place. You definitely get that feeling across. judi
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Your repeating line works beautifully in all the stanzas. You really convey the sense of awe at seeing the waterfalls. The description of it giving the feeling of stepping inside cathedral walls is excellent. There is something sacred about the falls, as the narrator thinks of all the other people who may have heard the roar. It is a magical place. You definitely get that feeling across. judi
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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I'm glad. I always get a mystic feeling from waterfalls. Thank you.
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Beautiful poem. You can really get across the feeling you want to create. judi
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Thank you.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Yvonne,
Loved your quatern with an effective repeating line,
"the lovely roar of waterfalls"
I've only been to two in my life. One was when I was married. We spent our honeymoon at SkyLodge in Jackman, Maine. We drove to the Quebec border one day... 12 miles... just so we could say we were there. On the way, we found a small waterfall just off the highway.
When my oldest son was in Grade 8, the class needed one male chaperone for their trip to Quebec City. I volunteered, and enjoyed it immensely. One place we visited was Montmorency Falls. Awesome! And there was that "misty spray that fills the air". And I thought about the Indians who walked there so many years before Columbus...
"I felt the spirits of the past"
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Hi Yvonne,
Loved your quatern with an effective repeating line,
"the lovely roar of waterfalls"
I've only been to two in my life. One was when I was married. We spent our honeymoon at SkyLodge in Jackman, Maine. We drove to the Quebec border one day... 12 miles... just so we could say we were there. On the way, we found a small waterfall just off the highway.
When my oldest son was in Grade 8, the class needed one male chaperone for their trip to Quebec City. I volunteered, and enjoyed it immensely. One place we visited was Montmorency Falls. Awesome! And there was that "misty spray that fills the air". And I thought about the Indians who walked there so many years before Columbus...
"I felt the spirits of the past"
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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We think alike. I'm glad you understand. Thanks for sharing that, and thanks for reviewing.
Comment from robyn corum
Yvonne,
How delightful! Is there anyone on the planet who doesn't love and appreciate waterfalls? The elegance? The beauty? The wonder? If so, I can't imagine it.
Here, right from the moment we open your page, you've set the scene with this HUGE image - where the tiny human is dwarfed by the magnificence of nature. And you can kinda tell he SEES IT! (feels it, too?)
Your words were so appropriate and the lines were smooth and free-flowing. Thanks so much!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Yvonne,
How delightful! Is there anyone on the planet who doesn't love and appreciate waterfalls? The elegance? The beauty? The wonder? If so, I can't imagine it.
Here, right from the moment we open your page, you've set the scene with this HUGE image - where the tiny human is dwarfed by the magnificence of nature. And you can kinda tell he SEES IT! (feels it, too?)
Your words were so appropriate and the lines were smooth and free-flowing. Thanks so much!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I always feel a little mysticism from a waterfall. Must be all those pixies that live nearby. 8-)
Comment from aryr
This was utterly amazing, damommy. I really enjoyed the picture of the majestic waterfalls. Your words of the Quartern were beautiful because they encouraged the beauty of the nature and the minute presence of spirituality. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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This was utterly amazing, damommy. I really enjoyed the picture of the majestic waterfalls. Your words of the Quartern were beautiful because they encouraged the beauty of the nature and the minute presence of spirituality. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you. Sometimes, I feel I write too much about nature, so I really appreciate your comments.
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You are so welcome, Yvonne, I love nature so I am definitely for it.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your club poem is beautiful and well done, Yvonne. The words seem to flow just like the waterfall. Your image choice is perfect. Great job with meter and rhyme though that was optional. Both are an added bonus to the overall enjoyment of your poem. Your words are well thought out and descriptive of this awesome sight. I could feel everything you mentioned and felt like I was there enjoying the waterfall with you. Your repeating line is perfect. It fits in each verse to add to the meaning. What an awesome experience to have been behind the waterfall. I imagine it was breathtaking and filled with great spirituality.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Your club poem is beautiful and well done, Yvonne. The words seem to flow just like the waterfall. Your image choice is perfect. Great job with meter and rhyme though that was optional. Both are an added bonus to the overall enjoyment of your poem. Your words are well thought out and descriptive of this awesome sight. I could feel everything you mentioned and felt like I was there enjoying the waterfall with you. Your repeating line is perfect. It fits in each verse to add to the meaning. What an awesome experience to have been behind the waterfall. I imagine it was breathtaking and filled with great spirituality.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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It was. There's something mystic about waterfalls, I think. Thank you for this awesome review.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne.
Your poem is an excellent example of a quatern. the one thing a quatern is very good at is focusing the mind of the writer and the reader on a theme.
The theme is repeated four times, and therefore, the success of the poem relies on the meter and rhyme. Those you have done well.
Robert
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Hello Yvonne.
Your poem is an excellent example of a quatern. the one thing a quatern is very good at is focusing the mind of the writer and the reader on a theme.
The theme is repeated four times, and therefore, the success of the poem relies on the meter and rhyme. Those you have done well.
Robert
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you. I appreciate that. Love the greeting. lol.
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You?re very welcome.
I used that greeting once before and I went back and changed it. This time, I wanted to see if you're paying attention. You are! Sometimes I just do strange things to amuse myself. Now that you have seen it, I'm going to go change it.
HAHAHAHAHAHA
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No, don't. I think it's a hoot. I'm going to miss you if you leave FS. I'll have no one to banter and tease with.
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Hi YVONNE!!!! HAHAHA
I am on the edge now. I have 6.33 in my funny money account and that is not even enough to get something posted. I will never post anything with less than .50, so I'm outa gas.
I will be in touch.
Robert
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I hope we stay in touch. Good luck in all your endeavors.
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Thank you for your good wishes. I will keep in touch.
Robert
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-You did a good job with the poem and topic.
-Effective imagery, rhyme, and repeating line.
-The poem flowed smoothly, just like the waterfall.
-I like how you incorporate magic and "spirits of the past."
-A very good concluding verse, too.
-I have always enjoyed waterfalls, the most impressive
one being Niagara Falls which we saw a couple of times.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-You did a good job with the poem and topic.
-Effective imagery, rhyme, and repeating line.
-The poem flowed smoothly, just like the waterfall.
-I like how you incorporate magic and "spirits of the past."
-A very good concluding verse, too.
-I have always enjoyed waterfalls, the most impressive
one being Niagara Falls which we saw a couple of times.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Thank you. I've always been fascinated by waterfalls.
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You are welcome. That makes two of us!
Comment from royowen
I haven't seen a quatern for awhile, and this is a classic, it work as well as any I've seen, one almost forgets there's a progression. Because I'm up here staying with my elder daughter's family here, I haven't got my word processor with me, I'm sort of lost without it. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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I haven't seen a quatern for awhile, and this is a classic, it work as well as any I've seen, one almost forgets there's a progression. Because I'm up here staying with my elder daughter's family here, I haven't got my word processor with me, I'm sort of lost without it. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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I know what you mean. We've become addicted to our laptops, etc. Thanks for reviewing.
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Most welcome Yvonne