The Return
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Comment from estory
I think you did a great job of building the suspense in this chapter, and you left off at that electric moment when she touches the grave. We have to wait and see how this connection to Meg and Miles will come about and where it will take her. You laid out this premise of reincarnation somehow through the chapter to make it plausible. And you had that moment when Margo prays in the church and that seems to make us believe this will be a happy ending kind of story. But you can't be sure...estory
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I think you did a great job of building the suspense in this chapter, and you left off at that electric moment when she touches the grave. We have to wait and see how this connection to Meg and Miles will come about and where it will take her. You laid out this premise of reincarnation somehow through the chapter to make it plausible. And you had that moment when Margo prays in the church and that seems to make us believe this will be a happy ending kind of story. But you can't be sure...estory
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I like happy endings, estory, but for whom? Margot of Meg? We'll see later, I hope!! Lol. Thank you so much for the lovely review, my friend. Warm hugs. :) Sandra xx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can't wait for the next post. You have left an incredible hook. What will happen to Margot? Will she be with Miles? I can't wait to find out. I enjoyed reading and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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I can't wait for the next post. You have left an incredible hook. What will happen to Margot? Will she be with Miles? I can't wait to find out. I enjoyed reading and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Barbara! I'm glad you like my hook, Lol. Thank you so much for the great comments and for the lovely sixth star, my friend. Warm hugs, :)) Sandra xx
Comment from dmt1967
This is another good chapter. Just one thing, I couldn't feel any emotion. I mean, if that was me lol, I would be a little scared and maybe a tad excited as well. Maybe something like, 'Her heart raced as she pushed the doors of the church open...' or 'Her hands shook at the thought of what lay ahead and some of the hot liquid sloshed onto her lap...'
Thank you for sharing and have a great day.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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This is another good chapter. Just one thing, I couldn't feel any emotion. I mean, if that was me lol, I would be a little scared and maybe a tad excited as well. Maybe something like, 'Her heart raced as she pushed the doors of the church open...' or 'Her hands shook at the thought of what lay ahead and some of the hot liquid sloshed onto her lap...'
Thank you for sharing and have a great day.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you for reading this part, my friend. I appreciated your input. You have a wonderful week, too. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from alexisleech
You meanie! How could you finish like that and leave your poor readers on such a cliff edge? Your fabulous story has taken a wonderfully unexpected turn, and I feel a sudden bout of time travelling coming on - a subject you have perfected in the past.
Soooo looking forward to the next chapter!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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You meanie! How could you finish like that and leave your poor readers on such a cliff edge? Your fabulous story has taken a wonderfully unexpected turn, and I feel a sudden bout of time travelling coming on - a subject you have perfected in the past.
Soooo looking forward to the next chapter!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much, Alexis. I'm really pleased you enjoyed this part, it's leading nicely into.... And the wonderful golden star is the cherry on top. Love and hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, I knew it...I knew it...reincarnation...
I think that was one of my guesses...hmmmm...
it will be interesting to see how you bring
Meg back to life...and where Bessie fits in
here...still not sure about her...maybe she's
Meg...and how Margot is going to react to Miles...
I love this story told you...but it goes to fast...
I need more information...
oh my amazing friend...do you sleep at night???...
I picture you waking up Graham....and telling him
about another story you have in mind...or that you
think your from another planet...or dimension...
this story beautiful is one of your best...definitely
holds the readers attention...NEXTTT...very well written...
sending you bunches of love...flying thought the universe...
start to you...Linda xxoo
going to bed...sweet dreams...been working my butt off today...getting ready to go to Florida...my poor car needed
some TLC...xxoo
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Hi Sandra, I knew it...I knew it...reincarnation...
I think that was one of my guesses...hmmmm...
it will be interesting to see how you bring
Meg back to life...and where Bessie fits in
here...still not sure about her...maybe she's
Meg...and how Margot is going to react to Miles...
I love this story told you...but it goes to fast...
I need more information...
oh my amazing friend...do you sleep at night???...
I picture you waking up Graham....and telling him
about another story you have in mind...or that you
think your from another planet...or dimension...
this story beautiful is one of your best...definitely
holds the readers attention...NEXTTT...very well written...
sending you bunches of love...flying thought the universe...
start to you...Linda xxoo
going to bed...sweet dreams...been working my butt off today...getting ready to go to Florida...my poor car needed
some TLC...xxoo
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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LOL!! You are going to be sooooo surprised, I know I was when Margot told me what was going to happen! Lol. What I want to know is, how did you know I was from another planet!!! Who told you?? Lol. Just don't tell anyone else. Lol.
When are you off on your trip? It's been ages since you saw Kristy and the children, and your brother. I bet you're excited. I hope the roads will be good, and you have a nice straight forward run.
Did you get my email thanking you for my valentine card? It was such a nice surprise, even though Graham was jealous!! Lol.
Thank you, dear friend for another of your lovely reviews, and the beautiful golden star! Love you lots, go careful on your trip and email me when you arrive. Love and hugs, my dear friend. Sandra xxx
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OK...what part will surprise me???...
that your from other planet...or that you talk to Margot...oh I won't tell anyone... your not the only one of my friends who's pilot lights have gone out...and I'm right there with you...
I'll be leaving on the 2nd...next week...
it seems like forever sense saw them...and my brother...going to go to my nieces as well..
we are both having bad moments with my sister and her mothers death...so we call and cry on each others shoulders...helps us both...will be gone until the second of April...
I did get your e-mail but have been staying busy...sooo sorry...I will answer it...
will I have to get back to cleaning...thought I would wake up to a nice warm day...and I woke up to thunder...and tons of rain...
so I pulled the car in the garage...
you and Graham have a lovely day...lots of love to you both...Linda xxoo
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your chapter reads well, Sandra. It's filled with great details and those create great imagery. I could see everything as I read. Margot seems to have had a change in what she believed at first about most everything. She knows the grave sites of Meg and Miles, esp Meg's holds important info to solving this case. The fact she even thinks she may be Meg is interesting. Bessie statement about being directed to the grave is telling--who and what is doing that? The locket with the pictures was probably beautiful, but it's a haunting reminder to Margot of the unknown. Margot's prayer said a lot about her. She will investigate further, but she knows she has God's blessing. The ending was well thought out. I like the idea of her touching the grave after she earlier mentioned about being pulled as she was at it. I believe Margot has esp.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Your chapter reads well, Sandra. It's filled with great details and those create great imagery. I could see everything as I read. Margot seems to have had a change in what she believed at first about most everything. She knows the grave sites of Meg and Miles, esp Meg's holds important info to solving this case. The fact she even thinks she may be Meg is interesting. Bessie statement about being directed to the grave is telling--who and what is doing that? The locket with the pictures was probably beautiful, but it's a haunting reminder to Margot of the unknown. Margot's prayer said a lot about her. She will investigate further, but she knows she has God's blessing. The ending was well thought out. I like the idea of her touching the grave after she earlier mentioned about being pulled as she was at it. I believe Margot has esp.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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That was really interesting, Jan. I always look forward to reading what you gain from my chapters; I like your idea of Margot having esp. Now, I'm really looking forward to your next review!! LOL. Thank you so much, Jan, I just love your input. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Ric Myworld
I guess, none of us know what happenings in the past might still be affecting us in our own lives. Or will, if we let them take a hold on us. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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I guess, none of us know what happenings in the past might still be affecting us in our own lives. Or will, if we let them take a hold on us. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Ric. I do like to go messing around in the past, it's such good fun! Hugs and love, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Sandra, I usually only review poetry, but every once in a while I have to pop in to catch a glimpse of your fine writing. You always thrill me with your writing style which is really so well-crafted. You are an artist, for sure.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Sandra, I usually only review poetry, but every once in a while I have to pop in to catch a glimpse of your fine writing. You always thrill me with your writing style which is really so well-crafted. You are an artist, for sure.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Aw, thank you. What a nice thing to say. I'll be writing more poetry soon. Have a lovely week, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from F. William Lester
Wow! This is so different from Betrayal. Well done. I like the plot and the mystery and although I've missed the previous chapters, I had little trouble grasping much of the plot. The conflict is clear and the mystery enticing. I definitely want to read more. Great work, Sandra. Is the picture above, the actual cover art?
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Wow! This is so different from Betrayal. Well done. I like the plot and the mystery and although I've missed the previous chapters, I had little trouble grasping much of the plot. The conflict is clear and the mystery enticing. I definitely want to read more. Great work, Sandra. Is the picture above, the actual cover art?
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Hi, Frank. Yes, it's a bit different from Betrayal, lol. Thanks so much for this lovely review. I'm not sure yet about the cover, I'm leaning towards it more, I chose it for putting on here. I'll have to ask what the readers think. Do you like it? Thanks again, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
Damn!!! You have the skills, that are off the charts!!! Your ability to draw the reader deep into the depths of...Is it fantasy...or reality? This makes for a great movie. Nevertheless, I definitely enjoyed reading it. And look forward to reading more. Keep Writing. And don't forget to stop by to talk to me. There's always something new on deck. Stay Connected
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Damn!!! You have the skills, that are off the charts!!! Your ability to draw the reader deep into the depths of...Is it fantasy...or reality? This makes for a great movie. Nevertheless, I definitely enjoyed reading it. And look forward to reading more. Keep Writing. And don't forget to stop by to talk to me. There's always something new on deck. Stay Connected
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Thank you, my friend. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. Fantasy, or reality? Hmm, I wonder!! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx