Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Broken Hearted"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from 1Dreamer
I'm new to poetry, and this one seems like you really accomplished quite a feat with the structure required for this. Congratulations on the accomplishment. Pretty powerful in the content as well! Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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I'm new to poetry, and this one seems like you really accomplished quite a feat with the structure required for this. Congratulations on the accomplishment. Pretty powerful in the content as well! Well done.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Welcome and explore and challenge yourself to the many poetic styles and discover your own voice and good luck.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, sad, rhymed well, and are creative.
I liked the artwork chosen it went very well with the author's words. The
poem flows and connects well. I enjoyed reading the definition of
the Terzanelle.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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The author's words are interesting, sad, rhymed well, and are creative.
I liked the artwork chosen it went very well with the author's words. The
poem flows and connects well. I enjoyed reading the definition of
the Terzanelle.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Thanks for the review and comments,
Comment from sue133
I had never heard of a terzanelle. It looks very difficult but you have put your mind to it and succeeded brilliantly. The imagery was great and your whole poem was a pleasure to read. Are you going to enter it for the valentine's contest? You should!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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I had never heard of a terzanelle. It looks very difficult but you have put your mind to it and succeeded brilliantly. The imagery was great and your whole poem was a pleasure to read. Are you going to enter it for the valentine's contest? You should!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Sue Ihad not thought about soing so, but thanks for the validation.
Comment from Sugarray77
What an awesome poetic form you shared with us, Jim. It seems very complicated and I am dying to try my hand at it. Yours is very good and reads well. Great job.
Melissa
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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What an awesome poetic form you shared with us, Jim. It seems very complicated and I am dying to try my hand at it. Yours is very good and reads well. Great job.
Melissa
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thanks very much! Jim?s classes really have paid off!
Comment from Terry Broxson
This seems like a very difficult type of poem to write. It looks to me like you have done that very well. Thank you for the education about this type of poem. The poem has excellent imagery. Good work.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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This seems like a very difficult type of poem to write. It looks to me like you have done that very well. Thank you for the education about this type of poem. The poem has excellent imagery. Good work.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your comments Terry, this is what I love about FS all the wonderful insights and poetic styles.
Comment from royowen
An excellent terzanelle, if one hasn't tackled one of these before, they can be quite consuming, in respect to concentration. They don't happen naturally, they have to be labour intensive, but you've done very well Jim, I can remember when you first started, you're different now, well done, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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An excellent terzanelle, if one hasn't tackled one of these before, they can be quite consuming, in respect to concentration. They don't happen naturally, they have to be labour intensive, but you've done very well Jim, I can remember when you first started, you're different now, well done, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your ind validation.
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Well done
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Jim.
-This isn't an easy form, but you did a good job.
-A good topic, imagery and rhyme,
along with repeating lines.
-You also tell a good story about this jilted lass.
-I like the comparisons you use for 'tears'.
-Wouldn't 'rushing to seashore' be in the quatrain?
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Jim.
-This isn't an easy form, but you did a good job.
-A good topic, imagery and rhyme,
along with repeating lines.
-You also tell a good story about this jilted lass.
-I like the comparisons you use for 'tears'.
-Wouldn't 'rushing to seashore' be in the quatrain?
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Pam, my goodness, yes of course it should, thank you so very much for catching this.
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You are welcome, Jim. I had to study the directions to make sure. Was this from Pantygynt's class. I am going to copy the form and give it a try. I like challenges!
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It was a club challenge a couple of weeks back. Enjoy the process! I look forward to reading yours ...
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Thanks for sharing. I am working on it, and the process is very slow.
Comment from Thatguypk
I have never heard of a Terzanelle before, but congratulations for writing one successfully. It certainly is not one of the simpler styles of rhythm. It kinda suits the rolling tears of heart-break too, so good choice of theme.
PK
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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I have never heard of a Terzanelle before, but congratulations for writing one successfully. It certainly is not one of the simpler styles of rhythm. It kinda suits the rolling tears of heart-break too, so good choice of theme.
PK
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thanks for the comments PK
Comment from Frank Jauregui
An excellent example of a Terzanelle. It flows well and the subject matter intertwines beautifully with this form of writing. I like when the image chosen pairs so well with the poem that the reader is left wondering if the poem came before the image was chosen or if the image inspired the poem?
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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An excellent example of a Terzanelle. It flows well and the subject matter intertwines beautifully with this form of writing. I like when the image chosen pairs so well with the poem that the reader is left wondering if the poem came before the image was chosen or if the image inspired the poem?
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your support of reviewing and commenting. Jim
Comment from nomi338
I am duly impressed by the creative writing style exhibited in your poem, The words however, remind me of a painful incident that occurred in my life some years ago. A young girl, much too young to have been involved with me romantically. She appeared to much older than her actual age, when I began seeing her. Upon learning of her actual age, I attempted to run away, which led to a rather public meltdown that was very embarrassing to say the least.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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I am duly impressed by the creative writing style exhibited in your poem, The words however, remind me of a painful incident that occurred in my life some years ago. A young girl, much too young to have been involved with me romantically. She appeared to much older than her actual age, when I began seeing her. Upon learning of her actual age, I attempted to run away, which led to a rather public meltdown that was very embarrassing to say the least.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Nomi, I also can relate to this scenario, when I was in the military and met a young lady in church -- who also presented herself much older than actuality plus she was an officer's daughter, I ran away quickly leaving a broken heart.
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Much better to break the heart of an underage beauty than to be either forced into an ill advised marriage or face a severe jail sentence for statutory rape conviction.