The Return
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Comment from alexisleech
I loved your last paragraph - Why have I got this strange feeling that Meg's story has something to do with me? Eh, yes, I think it has! Another wonderful chapter that had my eyes riveted to the screen from start to finish. As always, you took me to the room and made me feel like a real eavesdropper during Bessie's revelations regarding Meg's unfortunate demise. Is she really a ghost? I can't wait to find out...
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I loved your last paragraph - Why have I got this strange feeling that Meg's story has something to do with me? Eh, yes, I think it has! Another wonderful chapter that had my eyes riveted to the screen from start to finish. As always, you took me to the room and made me feel like a real eavesdropper during Bessie's revelations regarding Meg's unfortunate demise. Is she really a ghost? I can't wait to find out...
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Is she? Hmm. Bessie hasn't told us yet. Lol. Thank you so much, Alexis, for this really lovely review and for that golden star! You're a wonderful friend. Love and hugs. Sandra xxxxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your chapter reads well, Sandra. I enjoyed reading it. There are many great details in the continuation of your well thought out story. I like the list of characters at the end. I believe, and have all along, that Bessie is a key figure in the whole story. Up until now, she has been rather quiet. Now, though, what she has shared is pertinent to the solution Margot is looking for. The scene with the accident, murder, gambling debts, and family members (brother et al) gave new info into the story. I believe Bessie is a spirit who cannot rest until the truth comes out about everything that happened before the wedding that was nearing. Margot could be a descendant of Miles(m from the ongoing relationship they had many time removed).
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Your chapter reads well, Sandra. I enjoyed reading it. There are many great details in the continuation of your well thought out story. I like the list of characters at the end. I believe, and have all along, that Bessie is a key figure in the whole story. Up until now, she has been rather quiet. Now, though, what she has shared is pertinent to the solution Margot is looking for. The scene with the accident, murder, gambling debts, and family members (brother et al) gave new info into the story. I believe Bessie is a spirit who cannot rest until the truth comes out about everything that happened before the wedding that was nearing. Margot could be a descendant of Miles(m from the ongoing relationship they had many time removed).
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I love how you work through my chapters and work things out, Jan. You're right about Bessie, she is a key player in this story. That's all I'll admit to, or deny. :)) Your review is simply amazing, my friend, I always enjoy reading them. Thank you so very much. I'll have to wait until tomorrow to give you the thumbs up, but I will give it to you. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment from Ric Myworld
You've for sure sold the fact that the 42 days and Meg has something to do with Margot and what is about to happen. Now, I've become a jittering kid so anxious to learn the news. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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You've for sure sold the fact that the 42 days and Meg has something to do with Margot and what is about to happen. Now, I've become a jittering kid so anxious to learn the news. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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You, a jittering kid? LOL. Thanks so much, Ric, I love your review. I'm glad you enjoyed this part. Have a wonderful week, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from dmt1967
I liked the end hook as it made me excited about what to expect next. There were places that told more than showed but overall this is a very good chapter. Thank you for sharing and take care.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I liked the end hook as it made me excited about what to expect next. There were places that told more than showed but overall this is a very good chapter. Thank you for sharing and take care.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for another lovely review, my friend, and that golden star! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Have a lovely week! :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
A block-buster! Spooky--so much to take in--you capture her sense of foreboding and of being overwhelmed--glad you set to allow reviews by non-members! Most don't. Gripping chapter!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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A block-buster! Spooky--so much to take in--you capture her sense of foreboding and of being overwhelmed--glad you set to allow reviews by non-members! Most don't. Gripping chapter!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I went straight over after last week when you pm'd me about that chapter, I'd forgotten to do it. I'm just pleased you wanted to continue reading my story. Thanks so much, Liz. I've always enjoyed your reviews. Keep safe and in touch! Love and hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from Jay Squires
A lot of juicy back-story in this chapter, Sandra. You left me very little (actually nothing) to edit. I only had one question, below:
Margot shook her head, then nodded. 'Yes, please do.' [Is this to indicate her indecision? Shaking the head is a negative signal, a nod positive.]
I've always had a hankering for your supernatural stories, with the hint of a mystery that needs solving, and perhaps entering into the past.
Good job!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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A lot of juicy back-story in this chapter, Sandra. You left me very little (actually nothing) to edit. I only had one question, below:
Margot shook her head, then nodded. 'Yes, please do.' [Is this to indicate her indecision? Shaking the head is a negative signal, a nod positive.]
I've always had a hankering for your supernatural stories, with the hint of a mystery that needs solving, and perhaps entering into the past.
Good job!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Hi Jay, yes you got it spot on, that was intended to show her confussion and indecision. It must have worked! lol. It's something I do when I'm not sure but still thinking about whether to give in to my wickedly lovely grandchildren!
Thank you so much for this lovely review. That YOU couldn't find any mistakes has set me up with the biggest smile for the day!! Thanks also for that golden star, my friend. I loved both! Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from blondie560
Great chapter Sandra! I'm thinking that the ghost isn't Miles. I have a couple ideas, but I'll wait to see how it plays out. It's very intriguing and Bessie is still a question and quite the character. I like how much she loves her coffee now!
Have a good week! Hugs! Sally
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Great chapter Sandra! I'm thinking that the ghost isn't Miles. I have a couple ideas, but I'll wait to see how it plays out. It's very intriguing and Bessie is still a question and quite the character. I like how much she loves her coffee now!
Have a good week! Hugs! Sally
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I'm not saying a thing, Sally!! Lol. Thank you so much, my wonderful friend, for another fabulous review and all those stars. The coffee has become quite a thing with Bessie! I'm glad you liked that bit. You have a wonderful week, too!! Love and hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
Really enjoyable chapter! I'm looking forward to someday sitting in front of the fireplace with a printed version of this book! The history and detail being revealed about the characters is flowing at a very good rate and readers should be fully engaged in the read!
My favorite line:
{'For heaven's sake, Bessie! You don't mess about with gentle lead ups when you tell a story, do you?}--I love how blunt Bessie is and Margot's reactions feel believable and relatable! .
Thank you for sharing! I hope you are enjoying writing as much as I am enjoying reading!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Really enjoyable chapter! I'm looking forward to someday sitting in front of the fireplace with a printed version of this book! The history and detail being revealed about the characters is flowing at a very good rate and readers should be fully engaged in the read!
My favorite line:
{'For heaven's sake, Bessie! You don't mess about with gentle lead ups when you tell a story, do you?}--I love how blunt Bessie is and Margot's reactions feel believable and relatable! .
Thank you for sharing! I hope you are enjoying writing as much as I am enjoying reading!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Ethan, for another fabulous review. I'm glad you liked that line. Bessie is rather blunt, isn't she!! Lol. And, bless your heart for another of your precious six stars! That's amazing of you, and you've really given me the biggest smile. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from judiverse
This is quite a story you have going. I was intrigued with poor Meg and the reason she didn't marry because her father committed suicide. He couldn't fact the fact that he had lost everything by gambling and had nothing to leave his family. Because of pressure from his father couldn't marry Meg. Meg's brother sounds suspicious. He blames his mother for his father's death. I'm wondering if Meg's brother had something to do with her death. I have a feeling Margo will somehow turn out to be a descendant. I love the way this is going. judi
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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This is quite a story you have going. I was intrigued with poor Meg and the reason she didn't marry because her father committed suicide. He couldn't fact the fact that he had lost everything by gambling and had nothing to leave his family. Because of pressure from his father couldn't marry Meg. Meg's brother sounds suspicious. He blames his mother for his father's death. I'm wondering if Meg's brother had something to do with her death. I have a feeling Margo will somehow turn out to be a descendant. I love the way this is going. judi
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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You have picked out a few excellent thoughts on what's going on. Of course, I'm not going to tell you if you have any of them right!! Lol
Thank you so much for this really fabulous review, Judi, and for that golden sixth star. I really appreciated both. I'm just so pleased you are enjoying it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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You're very welcome. I'm finding the story really intriguing. It's been fun speculating on what Meg's story is. judi
Comment from JudyE
I read it twice and couldn't find any spags or any improvements to make. I'd be a bit worried too if I were Margot. Looking forward to reading more.
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I read it twice and couldn't find any spags or any improvements to make. I'd be a bit worried too if I were Margot. Looking forward to reading more.
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Judy, that's the best review ever!! Have a wonderful day, my friend. :)) Sandra xx