Home Alone
Not wanting to leave a home where memories abound.17 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the House Poem writing prompt contest.
Your story is very sad and I can relate. It's hard to live alone sometimes. Have you thought about buying a tiny home? They need less upkeep and are very cozy. I watch a lot of YouTube videos about it. But if you can't sell your home that may be hard.
Nice flash fiction in its entirety, though brief, compelling in structure and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Excellent entry for the House Poem writing prompt contest.
Your story is very sad and I can relate. It's hard to live alone sometimes. Have you thought about buying a tiny home? They need less upkeep and are very cozy. I watch a lot of YouTube videos about it. But if you can't sell your home that may be hard.
Nice flash fiction in its entirety, though brief, compelling in structure and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Gypsy. At some point, I sure I'll have to downsize. I'm just not ready.
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Of course. I know you will. I'm sorry for your loss
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
What a lovely and loving lilting poem. Sadness permeates yet is softened by the sensitivity of the author. And the rhyme is controlled and not pushy. Good work!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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What a lovely and loving lilting poem. Sadness permeates yet is softened by the sensitivity of the author. And the rhyme is controlled and not pushy. Good work!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Thank you Richard, I really appreciate the review and comments.
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is so beautiful and sad at the same time. I wish you nothing but the best in your dealings and hope love springs eternal for you once again. Best wishes with the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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This is so beautiful and sad at the same time. I wish you nothing but the best in your dealings and hope love springs eternal for you once again. Best wishes with the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Thank you, John. I really appreciate the review, comments and good wishes. I really not sad. I just like being where I am. Everyone tells me I should move into something smaller.
Comment from juliaSjames
Hello Mystery Author
I enjoyed reading because you described your home both literally and through the eyes of love.
Excellent end rhyme and meter enhance the presentation.
Best of luck in the prompt.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Hello Mystery Author
I enjoyed reading because you described your home both literally and through the eyes of love.
Excellent end rhyme and meter enhance the presentation.
Best of luck in the prompt.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Julia. I so glad you enjoyed my poem. I really appreciate your comments.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
I wouldn't worry too much - if you have any children at all, they keep coming back or sending children. Those rooms won't stay empty all the time. *smile*
This was a really sweet and poignant poem about a serious issue a lot of people face.
The only thing I would check on is that the rules clearly state there is to be no picture. I went and checked several of the other entries, and sure enough, they have left off any images. It IS confusing because the contest creator added an image to the contest instructions. Just a thought. Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Dear Mystery Writer,
I wouldn't worry too much - if you have any children at all, they keep coming back or sending children. Those rooms won't stay empty all the time. *smile*
This was a really sweet and poignant poem about a serious issue a lot of people face.
The only thing I would check on is that the rules clearly state there is to be no picture. I went and checked several of the other entries, and sure enough, they have left off any images. It IS confusing because the contest creator added an image to the contest instructions. Just a thought. Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I assumed the reason they asked you not put a picture was because they were providing one. I did as they asked and didn't put one.
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I figured that. hahaha You may have to go in and manually remove the one that's there. It's definitely confusing.
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FanStory recommends there always be a picture with a post, so if the discard it for that, so be it. LOL
Comment from Thatguypk
This is so beautiful and heartfelt that I hope it wins the contest. It makes the point that a home is not just bricks and mortar. It is the memories of life there that give a home its heart. Something to cherish. So well expressed.
PK
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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This is so beautiful and heartfelt that I hope it wins the contest. It makes the point that a home is not just bricks and mortar. It is the memories of life there that give a home its heart. Something to cherish. So well expressed.
PK
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for a great review. I'm glad you liked my poem.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Unnamed Poet, a happy Thursday to you. I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed your House poem writing prompt entry. Your rhymes were good as well as the flow and your words painted a good picture. good job and good luck!
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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Hello Unnamed Poet, a happy Thursday to you. I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed your House poem writing prompt entry. Your rhymes were good as well as the flow and your words painted a good picture. good job and good luck!
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm glad you liked my poem. I hope you're having a happy Thursday too.
