A Padlocked Heart
A unifying force arrives. (550 words)21 total reviews
Comment from Debra White
Aw, LisaMay :)
This little story is so heartwarming. I really enjoyed the read.
There's so much love between the family members, but grief is preventing them from uniting. Animals definitely have a way of bringing people together - what's not to love?! I reckon that 'stray' cat wasn't really, and Katy's mum knew that pet power would save the day!
Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes as always Debra
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Aw, LisaMay :)
This little story is so heartwarming. I really enjoyed the read.
There's so much love between the family members, but grief is preventing them from uniting. Animals definitely have a way of bringing people together - what's not to love?! I reckon that 'stray' cat wasn't really, and Katy's mum knew that pet power would save the day!
Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes as always Debra
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
Comment from lyenochka
Aww! That's so sweet! I like that you created a family problem that needed to be worked out. And naturally any teen, boy or girl, wouldn't want to be bothered by a little one. But a little kitten brought them together. Best wishes in the contest!
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Aww! That's so sweet! I like that you created a family problem that needed to be worked out. And naturally any teen, boy or girl, wouldn't want to be bothered by a little one. But a little kitten brought them together. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
Comment from poetwatch
You broke the sadness with this one, Jenny. This is family. Everyone exhibits emotions to loss in different ways. Katy by seeking her hero to be comforted and Jeremy by hiding in his room. I know about the hiding. It doesn't work. Yet, you brought a savior with that kitten and a smile to my face. This is a good offering for the -Family- Fiction story contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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You broke the sadness with this one, Jenny. This is family. Everyone exhibits emotions to loss in different ways. Katy by seeking her hero to be comforted and Jeremy by hiding in his room. I know about the hiding. It doesn't work. Yet, you brought a savior with that kitten and a smile to my face. This is a good offering for the -Family- Fiction story contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Hi Jose - thanks for the great review. I guess we all hide in our own ways from time to time. Having an animal to love always helps.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
You truly captured how a boy would feel overwhelmed and invaded when his home life is disrupted and he wants to keep the world by locking himself away from the house and the world.
With the kitten in tow, Katy was able to bring Jeremy out by suggesting the kitten play in his room.
Well done and an enjoyable story.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
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You truly captured how a boy would feel overwhelmed and invaded when his home life is disrupted and he wants to keep the world by locking himself away from the house and the world.
With the kitten in tow, Katy was able to bring Jeremy out by suggesting the kitten play in his room.
Well done and an enjoyable story.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from juliaSjames
LisaMay I enjoyed your story. I did get a little confused about who was sadder, Katy the daughter or Jeremy the nephew. And about why the bereft family had moved in lock stock and barrel. But the message of the write came through loud and clear.
I think you followed the rules, cleverly leapfrogging over little time to live by opting for the death of a beloved family member.. The writer of the rules left a loophole there!
Cats are wonderful but kittens are the best at bringing joy with their cute appearance and endless antics. The picture reminds me of one of my beloved cats Chewbacca..
Best of luck in the contest. Moky is rooting for you.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
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LisaMay I enjoyed your story. I did get a little confused about who was sadder, Katy the daughter or Jeremy the nephew. And about why the bereft family had moved in lock stock and barrel. But the message of the write came through loud and clear.
I think you followed the rules, cleverly leapfrogging over little time to live by opting for the death of a beloved family member.. The writer of the rules left a loophole there!
Cats are wonderful but kittens are the best at bringing joy with their cute appearance and endless antics. The picture reminds me of one of my beloved cats Chewbacca..
Best of luck in the contest. Moky is rooting for you.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Animals have a way of bringing love and happiness to us any time we are in a disparaging atmosphere. Well done Lisa. Love the picture. Kittens are so adorable. LOL Nancy:)
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Animals have a way of bringing love and happiness to us any time we are in a disparaging atmosphere. Well done Lisa. Love the picture. Kittens are so adorable. LOL Nancy:)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from Pantygynt
I tried putting a collar on a cat. No, that is not strictly true. I have attempted on many occasions to put collars on cats, with the same depressing result. The cat comes home but the collar does not.
Cat collars generally have a pull to release safety feature designed to prevent the collar from strangling the cat should it get caught in undergrowth or whatever.
I have given up the practice collaring my cats as it was on the way to bankrupting me.
But this is a lovely story of how pets can heal sorrow, collared or not.
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I tried putting a collar on a cat. No, that is not strictly true. I have attempted on many occasions to put collars on cats, with the same depressing result. The cat comes home but the collar does not.
Cat collars generally have a pull to release safety feature designed to prevent the collar from strangling the cat should it get caught in undergrowth or whatever.
I have given up the practice collaring my cats as it was on the way to bankrupting me.
But this is a lovely story of how pets can heal sorrow, collared or not.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from royowen
Isn't that so nice, the kitten was the CATilyst that drew the two young cousins together, which is always something that appeals to the reader, and certainly gratifies my heart, well done Jenny, blessings Roy
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Isn't that so nice, the kitten was the CATilyst that drew the two young cousins together, which is always something that appeals to the reader, and certainly gratifies my heart, well done Jenny, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Congratulations, you have covered all bases, and avoided breaking any rules. It's a wonderful story about a real family, all humans, and your writing is excellent. Hoping you will do very well in the contest, best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Congratulations, you have covered all bases, and avoided breaking any rules. It's a wonderful story about a real family, all humans, and your writing is excellent. Hoping you will do very well in the contest, best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2022
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Thanks Wendy. It takes more time to read all the rules than to write the story!
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Yes, I agree! Lol.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This story shows a good transition from sadness to fun within a bereaved family. It clearly demonstrates how resilient children can be.
Good luck in the contest.
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This story shows a good transition from sadness to fun within a bereaved family. It clearly demonstrates how resilient children can be.
Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022