The Return
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Comment from Shirley McLain
What excitement you have created. I want to know much more so I will keep reading. You did a great job and I saw no errors. Your characters are realistic as well as the dialogue. Great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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What excitement you have created. I want to know much more so I will keep reading. You did a great job and I saw no errors. Your characters are realistic as well as the dialogue. Great job. Shirley
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Shirley, for coming and reading my post. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. I do hope you do stay and read more. Sending you a warm hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from blondie560
Oh Sandra I think this is going to be a great story. I'm not usually a ghost story reader, but this doesn't sound scary like she'll be killed.
I'm curious what 15 tog means. Is it the weight of the duvet? I found one little error : the price if the house, I think is should read of the house. I probably shouldn't even point it out because I'm notorious for the same error a lot. I'm constantly editing my writing for that. My other common error is typing of when it should be off! Lol Have a delightful week! Hugs to you:) Sally
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Oh Sandra I think this is going to be a great story. I'm not usually a ghost story reader, but this doesn't sound scary like she'll be killed.
I'm curious what 15 tog means. Is it the weight of the duvet? I found one little error : the price if the house, I think is should read of the house. I probably shouldn't even point it out because I'm notorious for the same error a lot. I'm constantly editing my writing for that. My other common error is typing of when it should be off! Lol Have a delightful week! Hugs to you:) Sally
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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I think you will like the story more once you know what is going to happen. Thank you so much, my wonderful friend, for this lovely review and for the golden star. I've edited it so many times, and I'm sure there will be more. Thank you for telling me about the spelling mistake, I went straight in and corrected it!! Never NOT point out those errors, I'm just so pleased you did tell me. Thanks again, my friend. Love and hugs. Sandra xxxx
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
This is an excellent read! I felt it had me asking all the right questions such as how is "he" and who was "Meg". Your creative writing style made me want to read more and hear the whole story. I am also looking forward to hearing more about Bessie and finding out who she is. I applaud this work and look forward to reading more!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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This is an excellent read! I felt it had me asking all the right questions such as how is "he" and who was "Meg". Your creative writing style made me want to read more and hear the whole story. I am also looking forward to hearing more about Bessie and finding out who she is. I applaud this work and look forward to reading more!
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Hi, Ethan, and welcome to Fanstory. I'm sure you'll love it here. We're quite a nice family of writers.
Thank you so much for reading chapter two of my new novel, I really appreciate it and your kind review. I'm looking forward to reading your work. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Sanku
It was as if Margot was led by some unseen power to buy the house .May in her previous birth she would have belonged there. Very interesting and very well written...
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It was as if Margot was led by some unseen power to buy the house .May in her previous birth she would have belonged there. Very interesting and very well written...
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Ah, you might have something there, but then again.... Lol. Thank you so much, Sanku, for another lovely review. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Cindy Warren
I don't think he's wrong. She must have been Meg at one time. Will she start remembering? But since he is a ghost and he wants her with him, perhaps she should be concerned.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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I don't think he's wrong. She must have been Meg at one time. Will she start remembering? But since he is a ghost and he wants her with him, perhaps she should be concerned.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Maybe! Lol. I think you'll enjoy what is going to happen soon. Thank you so much, Cindy, for this lovely review. I'm so pleased you are enjoying it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra x
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, is this a mystery or a fantasy book? I think I read your prologue but must have missed the first chapter. I went back to read it. I must say Meg is a very brave woman to make so many changes at once and be attracted to and not terrified of a ghost!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Oh, is this a mystery or a fantasy book? I think I read your prologue but must have missed the first chapter. I went back to read it. I must say Meg is a very brave woman to make so many changes at once and be attracted to and not terrified of a ghost!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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I'm not sure what to put this under, it's both but also a romance, and more. I'll start asking you all later in the book what you think it should go under. You will shortly see why Margot isn't scared of living there. :)) Thank you so much for reading them both, Helen, now the story will really get started! Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
What a wonderful continuation chapter, Sandra. I can actually see Margot relaxing in the tub with her candles around her. This was indeed a fast track for the sale of her condo, the buying of the house and a car. She felt she needed to invest in the home and discover the secrets. She did not feel she was 'Meg' and her ghostly lover gain control. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Hugs, smiles and blessings.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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What a wonderful continuation chapter, Sandra. I can actually see Margot relaxing in the tub with her candles around her. This was indeed a fast track for the sale of her condo, the buying of the house and a car. She felt she needed to invest in the home and discover the secrets. She did not feel she was 'Meg' and her ghostly lover gain control. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Hugs, smiles and blessings.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Alie, for another lovely review. I had a friend who needed to move fast and it was all done in a week. Money played a big part in that sale. I'm glad you enjoyed this part. The story will now begin! Thanks again, dear friend. Warm hugs Sandra xxx
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You are so very welcome, Sandra. Wow, only a week? Hugs, smiles and blessings.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a huge step Margot took to buy the old house. Now that she has it, the scene has been set for more of your offerings of the story. I believe, Sandra, there's more to the Bessie than readers realize. The twinkling of her eyes leads me to think she is somehow magical. Kevin, on the other hand seems to be someone who I would describe as mean. It will be interesting to find out in future chapters.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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What a huge step Margot took to buy the old house. Now that she has it, the scene has been set for more of your offerings of the story. I believe, Sandra, there's more to the Bessie than readers realize. The twinkling of her eyes leads me to think she is somehow magical. Kevin, on the other hand seems to be someone who I would describe as mean. It will be interesting to find out in future chapters.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Now Margot is in the house, where she truly belonged, the story can now really begin. You've picked up on some of my clues. Now to see which were right!! Thank you so much, Jan, I love your review. Warm hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, we have a mystery on our hands a handsome ghostly guy, who feels so real and made her buy the house. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Wow, we have a mystery on our hands a handsome ghostly guy, who feels so real and made her buy the house. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Iza! I'm delighted you are enjoying the story. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is good fantasy of the romantic kind. Not that it will necessarily stay romantic if possession takes over. Margot is a well-defined character and is easy to like. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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This is good fantasy of the romantic kind. Not that it will necessarily stay romantic if possession takes over. Margot is a well-defined character and is easy to like. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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It will be a romance story with a difference, Carol. I'm so pleased you are enjoying it, and even more so that you like Margot. Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend. I really appreciated reading it. Warm hugs, Sandra xx