The Return
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Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, quite an exotic story with colorful images of "human nature" adventure. This is a little bit out of my league. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and postings.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Wow, quite an exotic story with colorful images of "human nature" adventure. This is a little bit out of my league. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and postings.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Lol, yes this prologue was a bit out of my league, too, Iza. It was necessary for the plot, you will understand as the story unfolds and Margot learns what is happening to her. It's definately not going to be one of those types of stories where sex is on every page, far from it!! Thank you, my friend, for reading this prologue. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Debra White
Hi Sandra,
Some mild sexual content?! More like sizzling.... I'm all flushed after reading your descriptive prologue! Needless to say, I'm looking forward to getting stuck in to your book :) you hooked me!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Hi Sandra,
Some mild sexual content?! More like sizzling.... I'm all flushed after reading your descriptive prologue! Needless to say, I'm looking forward to getting stuck in to your book :) you hooked me!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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LOL! Okay, just a little bit more than mild!! Lol. Thank you so much, Debra, for coming along and reading my prologue. If I've captured your attention enough to make you follow the story, then that's great!! Thanks, my friend. Chapter one is live now. Warm hugs, my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from robyn corum
Sandra,
I missed this somehow, but when I saw the first chapter I knew I had to backtrack to find where you started things. Wow. I was not expecting that from you! This promises to be interesting. ha
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Sandra,
I missed this somehow, but when I saw the first chapter I knew I had to backtrack to find where you started things. Wow. I was not expecting that from you! This promises to be interesting. ha
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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LOL, I was so worried about posting it, but I've had nothing but great reviews. It's not going to be a book of sex!! There is a real story behind this and you'll soon find out what it is. Thanks for reading my prologue, my friend. Love and hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from tfawcus
That was quite some dream! Or was it a nightmare, perhaps? Time will tell.
Certainly an explosive start to your new novel. You have handled the eroticism with consummate skill.
Just one small thing... I think you need a lower case 'S' here:
Instead--She wanted to scream
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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That was quite some dream! Or was it a nightmare, perhaps? Time will tell.
Certainly an explosive start to your new novel. You have handled the eroticism with consummate skill.
Just one small thing... I think you need a lower case 'S' here:
Instead--She wanted to scream
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Was it a dream? Was it a nightmare? hmm. Wait and see. Lol, it's nice to know I have everyone wondering what's going on. I'll post chapter one today, then I'll be posting every Sunday, giving me time to build up the pumps. Thanks so much for giving my prologue a six, and for the really nice review. You have no idea how worried I was posting this. Happy New Year, Tony. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
Ps, thanks for pointing out the 's'. xx
Comment from BethShelby
What an interesting and erotic beginning. I so glad you are about to write and new story and it is off to a fantastic start. I sincerely hope I have a six left for you.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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What an interesting and erotic beginning. I so glad you are about to write and new story and it is off to a fantastic start. I sincerely hope I have a six left for you.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Beth, for the lovely sixth star! I'm so pleased you liked it and will be reading on. This is quite different to my other novels. Chapter one will be posted today. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Michele Harber
Wow! I think I may need a cold shower myself. Your descriptions are very explicit, but in the manner of a true and desired sexual encounter, not something negative and done by force. Your character has quite the accurate imagination for a virgin!
I'm looking forward to reading your first chapter, and finding out who this spectral male figure is and where this all needs.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Wow! I think I may need a cold shower myself. Your descriptions are very explicit, but in the manner of a true and desired sexual encounter, not something negative and done by force. Your character has quite the accurate imagination for a virgin!
I'm looking forward to reading your first chapter, and finding out who this spectral male figure is and where this all needs.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Lol, thank you, Michele, for this fabulous review. I'm glad you want to read on. Yes, she's a virgin, but she's not a virgin. (yes, you read that sentence right!) Chapter one will be posted today. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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OK, unless her name is Mary, I'm now thoroughly confused. I haven't had the chance to read the chapter yet, but it's definitely on my list for tonight or tomorrow.
Meanwhile, I hope you're enjoying the start of a happy and healthy new year.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I'm intrigued by this prologue. You did well in this intimate description of an imaginary lover or not. I like the following sentence:
Appearing and disappearing like a heavy fog in the night
I'm looking forward to reading more.
Exceptionally done.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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I'm intrigued by this prologue. You did well in this intimate description of an imaginary lover or not. I like the following sentence:
Appearing and disappearing like a heavy fog in the night
I'm looking forward to reading more.
Exceptionally done.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Wow, thank you so much, Jasmine, for the sixth star! I never have one left after mid week. Perhaps that will be my new years resolution, keep one until Saturday! I'm really pleased you enjoyed my prologue, I've never written a story like this before, never had any sex in my books, so I thought I go for it this time. You're review is very encouraging, my friend. Thank you! :)) Sandra xxx
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Yes. Please write more and I'm looking forward to reading our next chapter.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, prologue or chapter the writing can't get better than this. The saved six that I've hung onto to reward an especially well written piece is all yours. This takes me far deeper into the mind and a different side of Sandra Mitchell than I've ever been able to venture before. Now, I'm jut wondering if I should hide my eyes or face the other way. LOL. Thanks for sharing. Happy New Year!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Well, prologue or chapter the writing can't get better than this. The saved six that I've hung onto to reward an especially well written piece is all yours. This takes me far deeper into the mind and a different side of Sandra Mitchell than I've ever been able to venture before. Now, I'm jut wondering if I should hide my eyes or face the other way. LOL. Thanks for sharing. Happy New Year!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Lol, I think I've surprised a lot of Fanstorians. I just wanted to see if I could go that extra mile and write something different. This is going to be fun! Thank you so much, Ric, for this fabulous review and the golden sixth star! I'm chuffed to bits you enjoyed my prologue. Happy New Year to you, too, and no, you needed face the other way!! Lol Love and hugs, my friend. Sandra xx
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Sandra,
There is some mild sexual content - Boo! Only Mild! up the game, my dear....
That's a good opening paragraph, drawing the reader in. What I liked most was the choice of descriptors. not a single repetition which seems rare these days.
then wrapped her startling red hair in the towel.- maybe find an alternative for startling here, stunning or striking may work.
Very good opening here. I'll try to keep up this year. lol
All the best
G
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Hi Sandra,
There is some mild sexual content - Boo! Only Mild! up the game, my dear....
That's a good opening paragraph, drawing the reader in. What I liked most was the choice of descriptors. not a single repetition which seems rare these days.
then wrapped her startling red hair in the towel.- maybe find an alternative for startling here, stunning or striking may work.
Very good opening here. I'll try to keep up this year. lol
All the best
G
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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I love 'striking' and have changed it to that one. Thank you so much, Gareth, for that golden star and the lovely review. It was so nice to see your name in my reviews. I hope you will stay around, and write, too. I'm glad you liked the opening, I was a tad nervous about putting it on here, but, what the heck, I'm going for it! Happy New Year, my friend, I hope you have a good one. Warm hugs, Sanda
Comment from Chrissy710
Well written Sandra and surely held ones attention
I will look forward to how this story pans out. Descriptive without being over the top and a tasteful (lol) beginning
Will await Sunday's offering
Cheers Chris
Happy New Year xx
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Well written Sandra and surely held ones attention
I will look forward to how this story pans out. Descriptive without being over the top and a tasteful (lol) beginning
Will await Sunday's offering
Cheers Chris
Happy New Year xx
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for that beautiful sixth star, dear Chris, and the most encouraging review. I was a bit nervous posting it! :)) I hope you will continue to read and, hopefully, enjoy the story, it's so much different to anything else I've written.
Happy New Year, my friend!! Love and hugs, Sandra xx
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you are welcome xx Sandra