LDS Episode 1: Reindeer Revenge
Love, Death + Santa19 total reviews
Comment from RGstar
This is certainly an alternative Christmas poem if ever I have seen one.
The author has created an alternative, for pleasure, not shock horror...just a contrast.
Poetry are all things, and the unexpected is to be understood and commended.
Good luck with this.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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This is certainly an alternative Christmas poem if ever I have seen one.
The author has created an alternative, for pleasure, not shock horror...just a contrast.
Poetry are all things, and the unexpected is to be understood and commended.
Good luck with this.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much RGstar! Yes it was challenging and fun to write.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
I read this with breath held, a soda for my stomach at hand. I have read your work before, but this is sacrilegious and horrible - and absolutely great!! How do you think of such things, dear sir?? Ah well, it is a good loop poem as far as I can see...so best of luck in the contest!!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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I read this with breath held, a soda for my stomach at hand. I have read your work before, but this is sacrilegious and horrible - and absolutely great!! How do you think of such things, dear sir?? Ah well, it is a good loop poem as far as I can see...so best of luck in the contest!!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much. My process is actually pretty simple: I make the medium as strict as possible, and then see what pieces are left at my disposal. In this case, I just went through a list of all homonyms in the English language and made a list of ones that might fit a story about Santa. Once these were arranged in the only order I could find easily decipherable, I had a story. As for sentiment, I had recently finished watching "love death + robots" on Netflix, a wildly creative endeavor magnitudes greater than anything I have done, each done with a different creative team. Hence, the name of this new series, and hopefully I will find the time for more entries in it this year.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your take on a Christmas offering is your right. I like the first picture.
Blitzen and blitzing/ dessert and deserting/ steak and staking are all different words instead of using the same word as the loop rules required. Also, the abcb required rhyme pattern isn't evident. Perhaps you will revise.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Your take on a Christmas offering is your right. I like the first picture.
Blitzen and blitzing/ dessert and deserting/ steak and staking are all different words instead of using the same word as the loop rules required. Also, the abcb required rhyme pattern isn't evident. Perhaps you will revise.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you Jan for your input! I had seen a couple other people doing this just with a full loop without the ABCB format and my effort was well underway by the time I realized the official format, so for this writing piece there isn't really any going back in that sense and this was a bigger challenge for me anyway. I would have to completely start over, and write something rather benign compared to this monstrosity. And yes, in those three instances you mention I have extended the original word, although all the words are changed already in meaning so all I have really changed is the verb conjugation. I think extending it is very much in the spirit of what this is, as the line is already taking and extending pre-existing content, which is sort of a Germanic way to write. The CEC will do what they do, and I am used to having them disqualify my writing, as is their prerogative, but as long as it is not outright banned from the site people will read it anyway, which is good enough for me.
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Interesting approach to dock an ADDITIONAL star from your review just because you disagree with my response above. If you are going to be petty like that, why don't you be honest and give it a one? Keep your stars, oh great one. The lack of hospitality from some of the older members here reminds me of a certain city Jesus refers to!
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, this certainly a loop poem with a difference. Time will show how this goes down with the contest committee.
Your play with words is quite amazing and very well done. A Christmas tale which is really different. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Hi there, this certainly a loop poem with a difference. Time will show how this goes down with the contest committee.
Your play with words is quite amazing and very well done. A Christmas tale which is really different. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much! Homonyms are really fun to work with.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Eating Dasher, what a novel thought. Using different spellings of the same words (that have different connotations), while unique, not sure how that will go over in a loop contest? Be interesting to find out. Santa met his demise, as he should have, at the hands, or more correctly stated, antlers of the other reindeer. Go reindeer!
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Eating Dasher, what a novel thought. Using different spellings of the same words (that have different connotations), while unique, not sure how that will go over in a loop contest? Be interesting to find out. Santa met his demise, as he should have, at the hands, or more correctly stated, antlers of the other reindeer. Go reindeer!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Yeah I don't know if it will pass the contest regulations. I asked about it in the comments well before submitting my entry, but did not get an answer really. Anyway it was fun to write. You will have to wait to find out in the next episode what happens to Santa's legacy . . . Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from royowen
I must say that's very clever, substituting homonyms for the original genuine ones. Loop poems are not generally easy, but you've dispensed with convention in a most skilful and delightful way. Well done, an excellent post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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I must say that's very clever, substituting homonyms for the original genuine ones. Loop poems are not generally easy, but you've dispensed with convention in a most skilful and delightful way. Well done, an excellent post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much Roy for your kind words. I appreciate the complementary review!
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Most welcome
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This General Poetry, Loop Poetry Contest contest entry, speaks about love, reindeer revenge if not destined, Santa Claus's death is evident; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this, keep posting, I, DR, love reviews; ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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This General Poetry, Loop Poetry Contest contest entry, speaks about love, reindeer revenge if not destined, Santa Claus's death is evident; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this, keep posting, I, DR, love reviews; ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you ALCREATOR!
Comment from Theresa Honnigford
I would have given you a higher score, but you offed a reindeer. Thank goodness some of the reindeers took the fight back. Your play on words was amazing. Anyway, not bad, Thanks, Theresa H.
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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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I would have given you a higher score, but you offed a reindeer. Thank goodness some of the reindeers took the fight back. Your play on words was amazing. Anyway, not bad, Thanks, Theresa H.
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Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Sorry!! Santa can be hard to control sometimes when he gets on a bender. Mrs. Clause is trying to get him to become a vegetarian.
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Comment from Maria Amira
Woohoo woww what an excellent exciting piece of writing.. a story that grips you at your first in tale I really enjoyed reading and look forward to reading more from you very very good job! ((;
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Woohoo woww what an excellent exciting piece of writing.. a story that grips you at your first in tale I really enjoyed reading and look forward to reading more from you very very good job! ((;
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much for your words and the gift of a six star review. Hopefully there will be further entries in the series, if I find the time!