Comment from oliver818

Excellent

This is a fun story. I like the way you connect it all together at the end. It's quite a coincidence but not impossible. Well done on this nicely written piece and best of luck with the competition

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021

Thank you so much for your time and review. Not impossible, no ... truth is stranger than fiction sometimes! (However this is fiction, and I wanted an implied happy ending!) Lol.
Wendy

Comment from Annmuma

Excellent

Catches the reader's interest from the first paragraph through the final sneeze. The story itself is quirky and the sneeze amplifies that quirkiness. The odds are so small of a father & son being discovered in this relationship, that it does even occur to the reader until that last sentence. What a imaginative and fertile story source is your mind. Well written and is an excellent contest entry. ann

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021

Thank you so much Ann. What a lovely review!
My husband, son, and my son's three daughters (even the baby) sneeze when they go into the sunshine ... that prompted my imagination. Lol.

Comment from Kooky Clown

Excellent

I just loved reading this it had a lovely sentimental or even romantic theme running through it which I did enjoy. It left me with a lovely warm glow at the end with all kinds of possible ideas as to what else would come of this situation should the story continue. Thanks for sharing. Kooky

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021

Thank you so much for reviewing, much appreciated! The punch-line implies or suggests that Robert may well be the donor father ... so, being fiction, they will marry, and live happily ever after, and you can enjoy that lovely warm glow for quite a while!
Wendy

reply by Kooky Clown on 03-Dec-2021

Thanks for that.

Comment from Theodore McDowell

Excellent

Great story for the writing prompt. A virtual six. A delightful and unexpected implied twist at the end makes the story. I enjoyed the read. Have a great Christmas, Wendy.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021

Thank you so much, I really appreciate your review and great words.
Hoping your Christmas is very special and meaningful too.
Wendy

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

This is an excellent entry into the family story-fiction. The reader absolutely believes the child is also Jack's because it has been such a pleasant story and delightful meeting of two people. How could the three sneezes not mean exactly what they seemed to mean?

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021

Exactly. So glad you got it, and enjoyed it as well. Many thanks for your lovely review.
Wendy

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Well, that was certainly a twist! Holy moly! They were already on their way to a romance, but this is an added bonus. Well done. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021

Thank you so much for your wonderful review, and also your good wishes. So pleased you enjoyed it.
Wendy

Comment from Tina Crute

Excellent

Oh my goodness, what an unexpected ending! At first I was like...that's the end? I don't get it. I was hoping for a happy ending. Then, I re-read it and bam! Jack has Robert's family trait! This is a great entry for the contest because it supports worthy causes...friendship, elderly care and attention, single moms, kids who do not know one parent, and possible some blooming love!
Well done and thoroughly enjoyed!
Tina

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021

Thank you Tina - I am glad you took the time to jump to the right conclusion. I didn't want to spell it out. I appreciate your reading and reviewing, and I am glad you enjoyed it.
Wendy

reply by Tina Crute on 01-Dec-2021

It was just all-around good! It was my pleasure to read it.
Til next story...
Tina

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

LOL A very interesting twist at the end of this writing prompt entry. I enjoyed reading and it caused me to smile at the possibilities.

"They are good for each other," Linda thought happily. (thought should be in italics.)

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021

Thank you so much for reviewing, Barbara - greatly appreciated!

Comment from Judy Lawless

Exceptional

There might be some Canadian blood there somewhere too. The sun often makes me sneeze. lol This is a wonderful story, Wendy. It flows nicely, and you build up our interest, thinking it might be a love story. But then, Jack thinks Linda is married. Then another twist, and we're left speculating on the future. I really enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021

Thank you very much Judy - I am glad you enjoyed. So, is Robert the father of Jack??
Wendy

reply by Judy Lawless on 01-Dec-2021

You're welcome, Wendy. That's the question, isn't it? Sounds like it.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Wendy,

I always like stories with happy ever afters. *smile* Those are mostly the kind I write (when I finally write prose!)

So this obviously appealed to me. The question is how long it takes for the CHARACTERS to figure out what all us readers now know. Hmmm... Interesting~!

PS.
Out of all the family submissions I've read so far, I like yours best -- shhhh....

Thanks! And good luck!

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2021

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021

Thank you so much Robyn. Glad you enjoyed it! (Yes, I wonder how long they took to jump to the one-in-a million conclusion?!) Thanks too for your good wishes. Much appreciated