Genius in Love
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Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I like this chapter which shows the blossoming of tender emotions between Cornelius and Jennie. Touching and calling by pet names displays the coming closer of the two. Cililla, the deeper mind, appears to guide him at times of confusion. The story is quite complicated. I like how you structure the dialogue. Always been a learning experience for me. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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I like this chapter which shows the blossoming of tender emotions between Cornelius and Jennie. Touching and calling by pet names displays the coming closer of the two. Cililla, the deeper mind, appears to guide him at times of confusion. The story is quite complicated. I like how you structure the dialogue. Always been a learning experience for me. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Seshadri. I always look forward to your reviews as a kind of touchpoint with how well the play is being received. You are generous and astute, Sir.
Comment from pookietoo
A wonderful script that I enjoyed reading. Keep up the great work writing your scripts. Good luck to you in whatever you do. Take care of yourself. :) :)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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A wonderful script that I enjoyed reading. Keep up the great work writing your scripts. Good luck to you in whatever you do. Take care of yourself. :) :)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading and for your kind words.
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Welcome.
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Welcome.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Genius in Love, Scene 17"
I enjoyed your short script Jay and was very well written.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Looking forward to the next one and have a blessed week!
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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"Genius in Love, Scene 17"
I enjoyed your short script Jay and was very well written.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Looking forward to the next one and have a blessed week!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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I appreciate your reading this, Rickie. Thank you.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! That is a victory for Cornie! He even wants Jennie to call him by a nickname and made a pun out of her aunt's name. AND he made physical contact without flinching. Yep, I agree with your description: "smells like pre-teen spirit" - Cute. Cililla succeeded in helping Cornie have a real friendship.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Wow! That is a victory for Cornie! He even wants Jennie to call him by a nickname and made a pun out of her aunt's name. AND he made physical contact without flinching. Yep, I agree with your description: "smells like pre-teen spirit" - Cute. Cililla succeeded in helping Cornie have a real friendship.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Bless you, Lyenochka. I hope I didn't move too quickly with his growth and make it less than believable. I feel like he enjoys stretching beyond Cililla's expectations (which are his own deeper mind's expectations), and that's causing new synapses to be fired.
I am so privileged to have you as a regular reader of this play. Thank you!
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Great job with your character portrayal and development, Jay!
Comment from Eunice Amero
You did a good job on this story. A script. I never thought l could write a script but lve write one and l think l did okay. I like the love scene here. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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You did a good job on this story. A script. I never thought l could write a script but lve write one and l think l did okay. I like the love scene here. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you for reading it, Eunice.
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you are welcome
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Great dialogue and wonderful way to work past her father's death and into her aunt's odd name. It's so good that Cornie can tell her about playing for graduation. Cililla is such a great conscience.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Great dialogue and wonderful way to work past her father's death and into her aunt's odd name. It's so good that Cornie can tell her about playing for graduation. Cililla is such a great conscience.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Carol. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. The next scene should end it.
Comment from juliaSjames
Hello Jay
It's been a while since I reviewed this script so the plot has got away from me. However I enjoyed the tender awkward interplay in this scene between the two 8th graders. Touching, sharing of confidences..the flow of trust that culminates in Cornie's little joke. Corny humour (sic)!
Feisty Cililla is like a play within a play. Onstage performer in Cornie's mind.
Quick question. I'm not well acquainted with the US school system so am I wrong in thinking these characters are a year younger than average 8th graders?
I applaud your dedication and skill in developing this ambitious script, my friend
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Hello Jay
It's been a while since I reviewed this script so the plot has got away from me. However I enjoyed the tender awkward interplay in this scene between the two 8th graders. Touching, sharing of confidences..the flow of trust that culminates in Cornie's little joke. Corny humour (sic)!
Feisty Cililla is like a play within a play. Onstage performer in Cornie's mind.
Quick question. I'm not well acquainted with the US school system so am I wrong in thinking these characters are a year younger than average 8th graders?
I applaud your dedication and skill in developing this ambitious script, my friend
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Many thanks, Julia, for reading this and your kind comments. About the 8th grade. I was 13 when I entered high school. that would have made me 12 in the 8th grade. But I was among the younger kids in my class. I hope you catch the next scene. It should bring down the curtain for the play.
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Thanks Jay..I grew up in a British colony so I went through 7 yrs of high school from first form to upper sixth. I started at 10 a year younger than average. And yes I'll certainly catch the finale.. Take care!
Comment from amahra
A great gem of a chapter, Jay. I was expecting to hear what made Phyllis faint over the news from Mr. Maneses, but I still love the tender moments with Jennie and Cornelius with Cililla guiding him all the way.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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A great gem of a chapter, Jay. I was expecting to hear what made Phyllis faint over the news from Mr. Maneses, but I still love the tender moments with Jennie and Cornelius with Cililla guiding him all the way.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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The next scene (the final one) will give a little more information about the death of her husband. Thanks for reading this one. Hope to see you for the curtain closer.
Comment from Zhen Xuan Liu
Great job on the script! It is very nicely thought out and connects perfectly with the previous scene. Nice ending. Love it! Keep up the great work! Am excited to read the next scene!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Great job on the script! It is very nicely thought out and connects perfectly with the previous scene. Nice ending. Love it! Keep up the great work! Am excited to read the next scene!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Zhen Xuan. I'm happy to have you read this scene. I think you'll find the next one a satisfying conclusion.
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We see! I am excited!
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We'll See!*
Comment from BethShelby
So that is how Jennie got back into the picture. She didn't seem very unset that her daddy had died. She seems o be very glad to be back with Cornie. I love the way Cillia gets so excited when Cornelius goes further than she expects him to. This is an excellent story. I always look forward to it.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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So that is how Jennie got back into the picture. She didn't seem very unset that her daddy had died. She seems o be very glad to be back with Cornie. I love the way Cillia gets so excited when Cornelius goes further than she expects him to. This is an excellent story. I always look forward to it.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2021
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You're not the first one to mention Jennie's lack of emotional response. I think, though, as a 12 year-old, she's exposing as much of her emotions as she dares to. In the next scene, at the graduation ceremony, I'll make sure that a little more information is exposed.
Thanks, Beth! I appreciate your loyalty to this play. I think you've been here since the beginning.