Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Good

Good story with lots of heart. You have created two very interesting characters. You could do a little better at proofreading. Do you perhaps mean dust motes when you wrote stardust? "His heart rapt (rapped) like..." "He wanted (to) draw closer . . . " "Ripping each others (clothes) off . . . "

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 Comment Written 25-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021

Thanks for your honest and helpful review.

Comment from amahra

Excellent

This was fantastic. I am so happy that he and his wife finally got together. You can tell he is still very much in love with her. I'm also glad the neighbor isn't going to press charges. But that fact that he has another daughter blew me away.
"Luke knew.....He wanted [to] draw closer,..."
"They took turns ripping each other's [clothes] not [cloths]
"My grief.....The letters are from [your] high school sweetheart.]
"She's been trying to [make] contact..."





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 Comment Written 25-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021

Thanks Amahra for the gracious review.