Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 34"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
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Comment from Judy Lawless
Oh, thank goodness Michael went looking and at least has an idea what happened to Annie. Holding my breath until Mary brings help from the McKinley Ranch. Another exciting chapter, Carol.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Oh, thank goodness Michael went looking and at least has an idea what happened to Annie. Holding my breath until Mary brings help from the McKinley Ranch. Another exciting chapter, Carol.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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So sorry... I answered a whole page of reviews, hit save, and they vanished with the crash of my computer. Just know that I appreciate your review and enjoyment of the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Excellent chapter, with so much tension. I'm glad Michael has been found and is helping out, thinking of Annie over himself. I so enjoy your book! Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Excellent chapter, with so much tension. I'm glad Michael has been found and is helping out, thinking of Annie over himself. I so enjoy your book! Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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So sorry... I answered a whole page of reviews, hit save, and they vanished with the crash of my computer. Just know that I appreciate your review and enjoyment of the story.
Smiles, Carol
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So sorry for your technical frustrations.
May today be smoother.
Comment from Ric Myworld
And the plot thickens, as I knew it would, but can hardly imagine how much more it possibly could. Even the best selling writers have a tendency to let me get bored, but never do you give me a chance. Thanks for sharing and starting my morning off in fine fashion. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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And the plot thickens, as I knew it would, but can hardly imagine how much more it possibly could. Even the best selling writers have a tendency to let me get bored, but never do you give me a chance. Thanks for sharing and starting my morning off in fine fashion. :-)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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So sorry... I answered a whole page of reviews, hit save, and they vanished with the crash of my computer. Just know that I appreciate your review and enjoyment of the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
What a sad state of affairs. Michael with a broken leg, Annie having been kidnapped. In a way it is fortunate that Michael was able to hear a car take off; that was a hint that Annie was taken. They could have wasted much time looking for her in the woods. Now, with that knowledge they can possibly track down the culprit. But, how?
Ralf
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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What a sad state of affairs. Michael with a broken leg, Annie having been kidnapped. In a way it is fortunate that Michael was able to hear a car take off; that was a hint that Annie was taken. They could have wasted much time looking for her in the woods. Now, with that knowledge they can possibly track down the culprit. But, how?
Ralf
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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So sorry... I answered a whole page of reviews, hit save, and they vanished with the crash of my computer. Just know that I appreciate your review and enjoyment of the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Susan Newell
This is a power-packed chapter with good narrative, action, figurative language and even more suspense. Keep it up!
"Annie. Sebastian." -- exclamation marks?
Caught in the same cloud burst, Michael had sought shelter beneath the trees. -- It would be helpful for him to have a reason to be there.
dog barking, and then, like the eye of a storm, -- very nice
she sunk to the ground, -- sank
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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This is a power-packed chapter with good narrative, action, figurative language and even more suspense. Keep it up!
"Annie. Sebastian." -- exclamation marks?
Caught in the same cloud burst, Michael had sought shelter beneath the trees. -- It would be helpful for him to have a reason to be there.
dog barking, and then, like the eye of a storm, -- very nice
she sunk to the ground, -- sank
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2021
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Michael went for a walk after fighting with Cynthia. He was a mile down the road when the sudden cloud burst erupted and he sought shelter in the trees.
I am happy to put the exclamation marks...bob used to slam me every time I used them. He sent me articles showing how published writers, editors and publishers frowned on their usage.
think I got it...thanks and I am off to try and catch another one.
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Yes, we learned about his walk later.
Re exclamation marks: it's the overuse of them that is problematic -- not places where they are appropriate.
Comment from BethShelby
Well, Michael is still a good guy. I could imagine what a mother dying of cancer would be going through knowing ther daughter is lost. I'm glad Michael is found and Annie can help him. This story just keep getting more complicated. I sure Hank and Garth will solve it all in time. I'm loving it.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Well, Michael is still a good guy. I could imagine what a mother dying of cancer would be going through knowing ther daughter is lost. I'm glad Michael is found and Annie can help him. This story just keep getting more complicated. I sure Hank and Garth will solve it all in time. I'm loving it.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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So sorry... I answered a whole page of reviews, hit save, and they vanished with the crash of my computer. Just know that I appreciate your review and enjoyment of the story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Mary discovers that Annie and Sebastian have vanished and Mary becomes frantic, but not only Mary but Faith likewise, but Mary gets her back into bed. Michael hears the scream, but in responding discovers Sebastian, and falls down a ravine and breaks his leg, poor little Annie, Caldwell's getting desperate, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Mary discovers that Annie and Sebastian have vanished and Mary becomes frantic, but not only Mary but Faith likewise, but Mary gets her back into bed. Michael hears the scream, but in responding discovers Sebastian, and falls down a ravine and breaks his leg, poor little Annie, Caldwell's getting desperate, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Yes, Cynthia tried to make Michael a bad person but I think he cares for the child enough to worry about saving her. Thanks for the review. I am trying to beat the storm.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Umm! Is Michael turning over a new leaf? Oh! No! I like bad guys! And bad girls too.!:) Don't make everybody, goody-goody!:) There should be some 'Chilli Masala' in the story as we Indians say!:):) Seriously. I like how you are taking the story forward with suspense building gradually.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Umm! Is Michael turning over a new leaf? Oh! No! I like bad guys! And bad girls too.!:) Don't make everybody, goody-goody!:) There should be some 'Chilli Masala' in the story as we Indians say!:):) Seriously. I like how you are taking the story forward with suspense building gradually.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Yes, Cynthia tried to make Michael a bad person but I think he cares for the child enough to worry about saving her. Thanks for the review. I guarantee you that everyone is not goody-goody!
Remember the drugs, the kidnapping, the people hidden in the church basement, murders....Ugh!
smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
I was a bit surprised - but very pleased - that Michael has some good qualities, is concerned for Annie above all, and is even starting to see through his aunt and her scheming.
Just a typo in Michael's name: "M... adjusted himself and moaned as pain shot through his leg" (not far from the end).
Love your story.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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I was a bit surprised - but very pleased - that Michael has some good qualities, is concerned for Annie above all, and is even starting to see through his aunt and her scheming.
Just a typo in Michael's name: "M... adjusted himself and moaned as pain shot through his leg" (not far from the end).
Love your story.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Yes, Cynthia tried to make Michael a bad person but I think he cares for the child enough to worry about saving her. Thanks for the review. trying to beat the storm.
smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Whew! So glad that Michael is a good guy after all. I wasn't sure when he left and then somebody grabbed Annie. I hope Mary can get help fast but she's no spring chicken. Maybe now the twins will meet. Hope Garth checks up on the cabin and finds Michael.
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Whew! So glad that Michael is a good guy after all. I wasn't sure when he left and then somebody grabbed Annie. I hope Mary can get help fast but she's no spring chicken. Maybe now the twins will meet. Hope Garth checks up on the cabin and finds Michael.
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Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Yes, Cynthia tried to make Michael a bad person but I think he cares for the child enough to worry about saving her. Thanks for the review.
Smiles, Carol