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Secrets in the Wind

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A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime

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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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At least the cookies weren't poisoned! The dialog and interactions are superb--they move the narrative along briskly--grabs and holds. Cynthia is devious!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
    Yes, Cynthia is a bed one... she keeps company with everyone but is friends to few. thanks for the review. Appreciate it very much.

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
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Whew! That was a close call. Good for Allie to come up with the same cover that Darryl did. Hope they can keep a consolidated front against that neighborhood snoop.
Question:
While Allie kept Cynthia company, (When did Allie keep Cynthia company? I would think Allie should stay away from Cynthia and keep Cassidy safely hidden, too! Did you you mean "Cassidy" instead of Cynthia here?)

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
    It was an error and it should have said Cassidy. I thought I changed it immediately after the first review, but I guess not. I will check again. thanks for telling me.

    Thanks so much. Smiles, Carol
reply by lyenochka on 21-Aug-2021
    I could have been working off the old copy. I bring up several posts at once and review the shorter ones first. 😊
Comment from Wendy G
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Cynthia is evil, and it would be best if Liz makes a stand against her visits. The fact that she knows about the child is a real worry. I hope they decide to check why Miguel needed to stop at the church too! Seemingly not important to them to wonder, but we know about Jon! Excellent chapter.
Wendy

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
    It made Hank think a little but his mind was on Emmy too much at the moment. I am sure it will come back into his thoughts. thanks for the review and have a great day!

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
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Great chapter! I just hope Cynthia's cookies aren't poisonous. Good dialogue throughout this chapter. I like the banter between Hank and Emmy. Looking forward to the next segment. Blessings. Carol

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
    No she would never be that obvious. She wants to be a sweet little ole neighbor that no one suspects....except us! LOL

    Thanks so much Carol. Glad you enjoyed it. have a great day!

    Smiles, Carol
reply by Carol Clark2 on 21-Aug-2021
    LOL! You always make me laugh. Have a blessed weekend.
Comment from Jay Squires
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Ha! I love the character you built up with Cynthia. She's feisty and doesn't give up when she's on the scent of something. Speaking of scent, you had to mention chocolate chip cookies, didn't you, Carol? I don't need another ten pounds of Covid weight, LOL. This is a good chapter. You do a good job with Hank and Emmy, as well. Their love for each other shows through. I didn't see any spag.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 21-Aug-2021
    Good day, Jay! How kind of you to stop by and read a chapter of my story. Your thoughts mean a great deal to me so the review was spectacular... especially since you understood and liked my characters. Thank you so much and hope all is well with you.

    Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
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Cynthia can't help herself, a women of strong temperament who eats up strong FBI tough men for breakfast and them spite out the pips afterward. Judy love your story, the dimensions are very cleverly written, with all the characters all coming to connect when you wave your cunning writer's wand, well done Carol, blessings Roy
Typo : Allie will (be) whip up a meal or two.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
    How awesome that you both are reading and loving it. That makes me very very happy. I am thrilled that you think I have this magic wand...actually I am terrified each time I post wondering if it's good enough.

    Thank you again. Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by royowen on 20-Aug-2021
    I used to cringe, but no more, you don?t need to, a fine writer Carol,
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
    Thank you so much. I needed that smile. Hugs, Carol
reply by royowen on 20-Aug-2021
    Most welcome Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
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You're doing a great job with this, Carol. So many little scenes that create tension and suspicion. It's too bad that Liz gives Cynthia any chance to visit at all. That was a close call. Well done!

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 Comment Written 20-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
    Tango and Poppa have their hands full trying to keep Cynthia at bay. She's a snoopy one, for sure. Thanks for the review and for enjoying another chaapter. Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I enjoyed reading but there's a area that's confusing.

While Allie kept Cynthia company, Liz enjoyed the quiet time by reading in the rose, (Where did Allie go when Cynthia was trying to bring the cookies to Liz???) & Allie exited the house carrying a tray with three glasses of iced tea. (What? Where did Alli come from?)

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 Comment Written 20-Aug-2021


reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
    My goof! Allie was with Cassidy in the rear bedroom. Sorry.... Thanks for catching that before anyone else. Appreciate it. Fixed!

    i should know better than to have two people with the same initial... My brain can't comprehend at times.

    Smiles, Carol