Bending the Rules
Looking back in time....27 total reviews
Comment from Eunice Amero
This sounds like these girls were in an accident and went to Heaven. That would be something. She would see it was a mansion. You did a good job. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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This sounds like these girls were in an accident and went to Heaven. That would be something. She would see it was a mansion. You did a good job. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thank you Eunice for reading the story and for your kind review. Hope you are doing well?
Smiles, Carol
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You are so welcome, But to tell you the truth I'm not doing to good. I got scammed bad and now I can't move from here and I want to so bad. I work after 2 boys and be fore I die I would like to have my own place but I owe my son and I cant move till its paid. So thats my life. Thanks again
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I am so sorry to hear that you are having a difficult time. I shall keep you in my thoughts and prayers.
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Thank you so much. I appreciate it.
Comment from justafan
Your mind is a wonderful place to spend an hour or an afternoon. You amaze me.
This is a moment in time that we all will face at one point. I hope I don't remember how I got there.
Well done, Carol.
Always
Justafan of yours
MIssy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Your mind is a wonderful place to spend an hour or an afternoon. You amaze me.
This is a moment in time that we all will face at one point. I hope I don't remember how I got there.
Well done, Carol.
Always
Justafan of yours
MIssy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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My dear friend, I am so happy to see you. I tried to find you on facebook but there are several with the same name. Maybe you can find Carol Cichella-Jessup easier than I. Thanks for the review and your awesome words. Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I sent u a message on Facebook. Your friend request must be turned off. I can?t send u one
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Ok I will see how I fix that...my son probably can tell me. have a great day, sweetie.
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https://www.facebook.com/carol.cichella
will this help?
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a very written contest entry. I am wondering what happened to the 'guys' were they killed too or didn't they make it to heaven. Humm, you left us wondering. I enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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This is a very written contest entry. I am wondering what happened to the 'guys' were they killed too or didn't they make it to heaven. Humm, you left us wondering. I enjoyed reading and wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Their character left their entry into heaven questionable.... As the young lad said, "They were detained for questioning." LOL Thanks for the review. smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from karenina
Love the way your mind "bend" and reshapes reality in this future flash fiction contest. It'd be a nightmare to have to live the moment of your death, I think! Seems as spiritual/supernatural as it does future fiction--likely this would have fit into either of those categories as well! Sad that even in the future we'll all be addicted to AMAZON! (Giggle)--
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Love the way your mind "bend" and reshapes reality in this future flash fiction contest. It'd be a nightmare to have to live the moment of your death, I think! Seems as spiritual/supernatural as it does future fiction--likely this would have fit into either of those categories as well! Sad that even in the future we'll all be addicted to AMAZON! (Giggle)--
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Luckily, they will never remember any of it.... at least I pray that is how life goes. Only the good shall remain! glad you enjoyed the silly story. Appreciate you trying to review. Hope you are feeling okay....
Love ya, Carol
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Yes. "Trying" is the operative word...
(Thanks Jess!). I think we all ponder what it will be like to pass over. (Not too soon though!)
Karenina
Comment from papa55mike
It can be that quick, too. The life you cherished is lost in a second. It happened to a friend of mine in March. What a wonderfully written story.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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It can be that quick, too. The life you cherished is lost in a second. It happened to a friend of mine in March. What a wonderfully written story.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I've had it happen to several family members and it's like a searing knife when the pain strikes. thank you for your awesome review, your kindness and the stars.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from indigovega
I loved reading this story and everything about it: the way it began, the way you build suspense, and the way the story ended. The end fully justifies the suspense and leaves the reader satisfied and glad to have read a great story.
Good luck for the competition.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I loved reading this story and everything about it: the way it began, the way you build suspense, and the way the story ended. The end fully justifies the suspense and leaves the reader satisfied and glad to have read a great story.
Good luck for the competition.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for your kind review and thoughtfulness. I certainly appreciate every word. Take care and enjoy your weekend.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
Wow, that is an amazing look into the future, Carol! There is no way I could figure out what was happening until the end. If I understand it right, Tania's dad was driving one car, and Jake the other? Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Wow, that is an amazing look into the future, Carol! There is no way I could figure out what was happening until the end. If I understand it right, Tania's dad was driving one car, and Jake the other? Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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You are right! The girls were in the car with Jake and Sam. Tania's dad crashed into them and everyone died... the girls watched from an out of body moment and then at the instant they died they were introduced to heaven. Thanks!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Life changes so fast. One wrong choice. At the wrong place at the wrong time. We never know when it's our time, so we better live each day. Thanks for sharing. Have a wonderful weekend! ((HUG))
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Life changes so fast. One wrong choice. At the wrong place at the wrong time. We never know when it's our time, so we better live each day. Thanks for sharing. Have a wonderful weekend! ((HUG))
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Live it to the fullest, my friend. I look back and think about things I had planned to do someday and now someday is gone. I guess I'm left with one dream... to write and publish my book. I'm working on it so maybe it will happen. Other than that, I will be happy for one more day, smile and laugh with my friends, and look forward to tomorrow till there aren't any more to come.
Hope you are well. Don't be gorging yourself on ribs, seafood or stew. LOL have a great day!
smiles and (((hugs))) Carol
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Yes, sometimes even the best laid plans don't work out. But if we are here and able, we just have to make new plans. Then, if we don't get to follow through, we can leave all the headaches to someone else for as long as they last. Smiles and ((hugs)) Ric
Comment from BethShelby
Cool flash. Drunk drivers often have this kind of future. It is sad that innocent victims lives are cut shot by those who chose to drink and drive. In this case, the drinking father is responsible of the death of his own daughter and friend. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Cool flash. Drunk drivers often have this kind of future. It is sad that innocent victims lives are cut shot by those who chose to drink and drive. In this case, the drinking father is responsible of the death of his own daughter and friend. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thanks, Beth. I hope this out-of-body experience comes across as being in the future because they aren't actually dead until the last moment of the crash. Did you get that from the post?
Smiles, Carol
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I can see that now thinking back but since they were already, dressed in the angel attire except for the wings, it was a bit unclear.
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Hmmm. I am not sure how to change that, but I will think on it for sure. Thanks!
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I'm not suggesting your change anything. It is great just like it is.
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thanks! I am open to suggestions though. Smiles!
Comment from lyenochka
So they were pulled out quickly into Heaven and they left that terrible situation on Earth. I would have hoped that the first person I meet there was Jesus but you have given these girls a happy place to be together.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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So they were pulled out quickly into Heaven and they left that terrible situation on Earth. I would have hoped that the first person I meet there was Jesus but you have given these girls a happy place to be together.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I saw them as in an out-of-body moment... since they weren't really dead yet, just preparing to enter heaven. I think they are about to meet Jesus now.
Smiles, Carol