Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 27"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
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Comment from royowen
What a great episode, you've managed to weave in another variable into this great plot, there are so many avenues I don't know which one to gaze down, so Emmy has joined Hank, and I think the devil in Hank has been stirred, beautifully written dear Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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What a great episode, you've managed to weave in another variable into this great plot, there are so many avenues I don't know which one to gaze down, so Emmy has joined Hank, and I think the devil in Hank has been stirred, beautifully written dear Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I couldn't resist having a bit of beauty and grace added to so much tragedy and evil. I love how Hank and Emmy connect (I miss that so much). Thanks for stopping by to read.
Smiles, Carol
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Comment from Judy Lawless
You've made good use of dialogue in the chapter, Carol. It has brought Hank and Garth up-to-date on what's going on, and it's shown up what an amazing relationship Hank has with his wife! Now to put those pieces together. Keep it coming. :)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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You've made good use of dialogue in the chapter, Carol. It has brought Hank and Garth up-to-date on what's going on, and it's shown up what an amazing relationship Hank has with his wife! Now to put those pieces together. Keep it coming. :)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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thanks, Judy. I am thrilled that you have enjoyed the chapter and also the relationship between Hank and Emmy. We needed a little love to help us deal with the evil.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gripping and vivid. Superb dialog!
sugg:
"[My thoughts=>I] wonder if he wanted the land bad enough to commit murder.
Approaching 50, some would say Emmy was at the point where her age was encroaching on her incredible looks, but to Hank, she was stunning.
sugg:
Approaching 50, Emmy was at the point where some would say her age was encroaching on her incredible looks, but to Hank, she was stunning.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Gripping and vivid. Superb dialog!
sugg:
"[My thoughts=>I] wonder if he wanted the land bad enough to commit murder.
Approaching 50, some would say Emmy was at the point where her age was encroaching on her incredible looks, but to Hank, she was stunning.
sugg:
Approaching 50, Emmy was at the point where some would say her age was encroaching on her incredible looks, but to Hank, she was stunning.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Suggestions - fixed!
Appreciate the review and your assistance. Thanks as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Why are there always more bad guys than good guys. Seriously, not only in your stories, but in everything I've ever read. I guess, it's because the good guys are always smarter, so it takes less of them. But in reality, we know what isn't true. LOL. Thanks for sharing, and I hope that today is a better day for YOU!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Why are there always more bad guys than good guys. Seriously, not only in your stories, but in everything I've ever read. I guess, it's because the good guys are always smarter, so it takes less of them. But in reality, we know what isn't true. LOL. Thanks for sharing, and I hope that today is a better day for YOU!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thanks for stopping by and wishing better things for me. I am a fighter so it will get better. Appreciate your review about my bad guys... guess I knew more of them than the good guys. LOL You are here as one of my good guys and that makes me smile. Thank you!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm glad Darryl is suspicious of Cynthia, at least he's got his head on straight. And now they know about the gold and the questions the snoopy toe-rag has been asking. Now I want the meeting between Liz and Faith to take place. If Faith dies before Liz has the chance to meet her, she won't be very pleased with the boys. I'm glad Emmy is here. Another lovely, well written chapter, my friend. Well done!! Warm hugs and love. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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I'm glad Darryl is suspicious of Cynthia, at least he's got his head on straight. And now they know about the gold and the questions the snoopy toe-rag has been asking. Now I want the meeting between Liz and Faith to take place. If Faith dies before Liz has the chance to meet her, she won't be very pleased with the boys. I'm glad Emmy is here. Another lovely, well written chapter, my friend. Well done!! Warm hugs and love. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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"snoopy toe-rag" ... I love it! and you are going to throw here in a cesspool. I would never have expected such "head-bashing" from you. LOL Gee! Nancy went over the cliff in the last book...wonder how I deal with Cynthia in this one? Suggestions? LOL
Thanks for stopping by and making my day. Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
I feel better about Daryl. Doesn't sound like he is hiding anything but I wouldn's say the same for Miguel. Hank and Emmy seem very much in love. It doesn't sound as if Daryl is aware that Mary is actually the mother of Faith and Liz but I guess she just found that out herself.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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I feel better about Daryl. Doesn't sound like he is hiding anything but I wouldn's say the same for Miguel. Hank and Emmy seem very much in love. It doesn't sound as if Daryl is aware that Mary is actually the mother of Faith and Liz but I guess she just found that out herself.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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No, Darryl is a good guy, but he does not know Mary is their mother. Jack didn't have the privilege of reading that letter. i wanted to add more to their story but it was getting kind of long. Decided to carry it over to the next chapter I guess. thanks for the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Susan Newell
Good chapter. We're learning more about how some of the things tie together.
Minor notes:
Darryl laughed and walked away.
As the wheels of Emmy's airplane touched the runway, she texted Hank. "I'm here. Can't wait to see you."
-- suggest insert asterisks between above sentences due to change in location.
"Hank, honey." Her face was glowing as she waved and called to Hank.
The sound of her honeyed voice
-- might want to consider changing one of the honeys in above locations (close proximity)
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Good chapter. We're learning more about how some of the things tie together.
Minor notes:
Darryl laughed and walked away.
As the wheels of Emmy's airplane touched the runway, she texted Hank. "I'm here. Can't wait to see you."
-- suggest insert asterisks between above sentences due to change in location.
"Hank, honey." Her face was glowing as she waved and called to Hank.
The sound of her honeyed voice
-- might want to consider changing one of the honeys in above locations (close proximity)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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LOL...I was changing them as I received your review. Almost beat you! Thanks for the review and the suggestions. They are fixed.
Smiles, Carol
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Welcome.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I love the story. Thank you for sharing. I needed a good read.
No, but maybe Faith or the Cranston's lawyers told him something that we don't know." & Learning that her twin sister is dying of cancer is going to be a bitter pill to swallow." (both 'that' need to be omitted.)
"Hank, honey." Her face was glowing as she waved and called to Hank. (passive and can easily turned into active. Her face glowed as she waved and called to Hank.)
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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I love the story. Thank you for sharing. I needed a good read.
No, but maybe Faith or the Cranston's lawyers told him something that we don't know." & Learning that her twin sister is dying of cancer is going to be a bitter pill to swallow." (both 'that' need to be omitted.)
"Hank, honey." Her face was glowing as she waved and called to Hank. (passive and can easily turned into active. Her face glowed as she waved and called to Hank.)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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I wish I could rig this computer so it didn't type that or else alarm bells rang when I did. LOL Fixed!
thank you so much for the help and the review. Glad you are enjoying!
Smiles, Carol
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LOL I do understand.