One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Gypsy Blue
With you image of trees, and the dense fog;
makes your AMERICAN CINQUAIN, a very entry for the contest.
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Gypsy Blue
With you image of trees, and the dense fog;
makes your AMERICAN CINQUAIN, a very entry for the contest.
Gert
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and feedback, Gert ...you are very kind.
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Gypsy Blue
I like your haiku. (writings) so I read them
Gert
Comment from Mark Schardine
thick and wet in silence
witness of life's inequities --
in tears
To someone on the road on a desperate search for work, the injustice of our world is very real, and impossible to overlook.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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thick and wet in silence
witness of life's inequities --
in tears
To someone on the road on a desperate search for work, the injustice of our world is very real, and impossible to overlook.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Mark.
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Comment from lyenochka
I'm always happy to see you enter these site contests! Thank you for telling us about the background of the cinquain!
Your poem describes the feeling of being destitute in spirit very well starting from the external stimulus of the gray morning, taking us into the persons frame of mind and showing us the effect as tears which echo the moisture of the fog. Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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I'm always happy to see you enter these site contests! Thank you for telling us about the background of the cinquain!
Your poem describes the feeling of being destitute in spirit very well starting from the external stimulus of the gray morning, taking us into the persons frame of mind and showing us the effect as tears which echo the moisture of the fog. Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Helen. It's always good to hear from you. I appreciate your time and kind review.
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Comment from dellsworthpoet
Another nice use of imagery. The words are combined in interesting ways. The message is unmistakable.
I have no suggestions.
Thanks for sharing. I was immediately inspired to write this.
In the
shadows of night
nature wets earth's hankie
in rememberance of mankind's
dark deeds.
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Another nice use of imagery. The words are combined in interesting ways. The message is unmistakable.
I have no suggestions.
Thanks for sharing. I was immediately inspired to write this.
In the
shadows of night
nature wets earth's hankie
in rememberance of mankind's
dark deeds.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2021
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Thank you, duchess. It's always good to hear from you. I appreciate your time and kind review.
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You are welcome.