Lost Tomatoes
tanka17 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Lost Tomatoes", is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. With a minimum of words this talented poet has told it as it is. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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"Lost Tomatoes", is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. With a minimum of words this talented poet has told it as it is. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for the encouraging review. Val
Val, You're more than welcome.
God bless you and have a great week end :)))
the Duchess
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very good image
and nice presentation, Val.
-You wrote a good tanka
with a good topic.
-Your notes are appreciated, too.
-Vivid imagery in the opening
lines sets the scene.
-A good pivot line, followed
by very good concluding lines.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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-Very good image
and nice presentation, Val.
-You wrote a good tanka
with a good topic.
-Your notes are appreciated, too.
-Vivid imagery in the opening
lines sets the scene.
-A good pivot line, followed
by very good concluding lines.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Beautiful review, Pam. Thank you for such lovely words. So nice to know someone out there knows what a "pivot" line is.
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You are very welcome, Val. I think a lot of people know it, they just don't take the time to say it!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
For me blackberries remind me of my Mother as she always made jam with them. Here it is tomatoes and your memories are vivid and honest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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For me blackberries remind me of my Mother as she always made jam with them. Here it is tomatoes and your memories are vivid and honest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to review this little poem.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Poignant reminiscence powerfully rendered in plain words--evocative of regret for days gone by--imagery of fat tomatoes and empty bell jars is stunning.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Poignant reminiscence powerfully rendered in plain words--evocative of regret for days gone by--imagery of fat tomatoes and empty bell jars is stunning.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful review
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your tanka is in great form. I enjoyed reading it. The lines read well, they are smooth, and are filled with great imagery. I could see this as I read. Your words about longing for Mother's voice give a great sense of time and place. Your pivot line works well.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Your tanka is in great form. I enjoyed reading it. The lines read well, they are smooth, and are filled with great imagery. I could see this as I read. Your words about longing for Mother's voice give a great sense of time and place. Your pivot line works well.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Thank you
Comment from Raul1
A well written tanka poem. This poem meets the requirements for the contest. Excellent work! I like your poetry. No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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A well written tanka poem. This poem meets the requirements for the contest. Excellent work! I like your poetry. No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Thanks
Comment from jusylee72
Missing your mother's tomatoes fills the jars of who you are. She helped to create you and you became your own person, one who is beautifully capable of writing poems about your self and your mother. Loved it.
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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Missing your mother's tomatoes fills the jars of who you are. She helped to create you and you became your own person, one who is beautifully capable of writing poems about your self and your mother. Loved it.
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Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2021
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What a lovely review, thank you so much.