Sold Out
a 100-word story16 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent final sentence, reversing what we may have thought throughout the reading. Well constructed story, and I hope it does well. Best wishes for your entry.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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An excellent final sentence, reversing what we may have thought throughout the reading. Well constructed story, and I hope it does well. Best wishes for your entry.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Wendy
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting. Good idea to use seniors and have them want to spend their last days together. That fits with FanStory Demographics and many will like that image and idea.
This was a clever theme for you flash fiction tale. I expect this to do will in the voting booth.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Very interesting. Good idea to use seniors and have them want to spend their last days together. That fits with FanStory Demographics and many will like that image and idea.
This was a clever theme for you flash fiction tale. I expect this to do will in the voting booth.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Lance
Comment from Pamela Lear
Sweeeet!! How charming, to see these two folks come together in this story. You have created two characters that we can care about, a setting that is vivid, and conflict that is clear. Kudos! I love that the story leaves me wondering if this is a one-time occurrence, or if it is something this couple role-plays regularly, or maybe they do it every day (or multiple times a day) because of dementia. I don't want to know, I love that it makes me wonder. Best of all, this story made me smile!!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Sweeeet!! How charming, to see these two folks come together in this story. You have created two characters that we can care about, a setting that is vivid, and conflict that is clear. Kudos! I love that the story leaves me wondering if this is a one-time occurrence, or if it is something this couple role-plays regularly, or maybe they do it every day (or multiple times a day) because of dementia. I don't want to know, I love that it makes me wonder. Best of all, this story made me smile!!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Pamela, for the terrific review.
Comment from Susan Newell
You've done an excellent job of telling a complete story in one hundred words. There is very good character development and a complete story. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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You've done an excellent job of telling a complete story in one hundred words. There is very good character development and a complete story. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Susan
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You are welcome.
Comment from equestrik
This is a very cool presentation with your picture to go with your clever write. This is a good entry for the 100 word dash writing prompt. Very clever.
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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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This is a very cool presentation with your picture to go with your clever write. This is a good entry for the 100 word dash writing prompt. Very clever.
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you, equestrik
Comment from royowen
Ahh, when one is sensing rejection, it only a greeting, Amos has come home, without his "hopechest" the trick of these short is to have a great finish, and this one has, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Ahh, when one is sensing rejection, it only a greeting, Amos has come home, without his "hopechest" the trick of these short is to have a great finish, and this one has, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Roy
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Well done
