The Hunt is On
A Trijan Refrain poem25 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Hunt is On", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. This is definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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"The Hunt is On", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. This is definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and stars!
You're very welcome.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a superb, skillfully-composed piece--charming and appealing; specific and expressive in the use of details as you describe the practiced patience and victory of the mama fox.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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This is a superb, skillfully-composed piece--charming and appealing; specific and expressive in the use of details as you describe the practiced patience and victory of the mama fox.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Janice. What a wonderful review!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Yvonne!
Your mother fox sounds much like the one that lives in our valley. I, too, have written about her. Such a delightful character. Sometimes, she comes right up to our windows! Cheeky little bugger!
Love the rhythm and flow of your Trijan Refrain.
If I may, one nit:
The fox lays (lies) = intransitive verb/no object.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hello Yvonne!
Your mother fox sounds much like the one that lives in our valley. I, too, have written about her. Such a delightful character. Sometimes, she comes right up to our windows! Cheeky little bugger!
Love the rhythm and flow of your Trijan Refrain.
If I may, one nit:
The fox lays (lies) = intransitive verb/no object.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Thanks, Diane. I appreciate the review.
Comment from poetwatch
You write with a flair, Damommy Yvonne. :) I think I got that right. I like the Trijan refrain that Jan place up there for us to figure out. Yours is a fun one. I can see you still like to play. Keep up the spirit and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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You write with a flair, Damommy Yvonne. :) I think I got that right. I like the Trijan refrain that Jan place up there for us to figure out. Yours is a fun one. I can see you still like to play. Keep up the spirit and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from dragonpoet
Yvonne,
This is a well done Trijan for the potlatch club. This is such a intricate style. I am a little scared to try it.
The words and artwork matches well.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Yvonne,
This is a well done Trijan for the potlatch club. This is such a intricate style. I am a little scared to try it.
The words and artwork matches well.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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You must try. It's easier than it looks. Thank you.
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I will try. You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from mermaids
We have quite a few foxes here in Falmouth. I love foxes and your words capture beautifully, the life of the mother fox taking care of her young. You have a smooth poetic flow that gives your poem an almost musical feel and flow to it.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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We have quite a few foxes here in Falmouth. I love foxes and your words capture beautifully, the life of the mother fox taking care of her young. You have a smooth poetic flow that gives your poem an almost musical feel and flow to it.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review.
Comment from zanya
The reader is invited to share the moment as the fox prowls and searches for prey to bring home to her 'kits'- superb use of technical terms - a sheer delight to read
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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The reader is invited to share the moment as the fox prowls and searches for prey to bring home to her 'kits'- superb use of technical terms - a sheer delight to read
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review.
Comment from harmony13
The words of this poem are exciting, rhyme well, are descriptive and
creative. The artwork gave this poem a colorful nature based poem.
I enjoyed the read. The poem flows and connects well.
Have a great weekend!....Maria
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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The words of this poem are exciting, rhyme well, are descriptive and
creative. The artwork gave this poem a colorful nature based poem.
I enjoyed the read. The poem flows and connects well.
Have a great weekend!....Maria
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Thank you. I hope you have a good weekend, too.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did an excellent job with a complex style, Yvonne. From the start, your picture sets the tone. Your rhymes work well, there's great smooth flow, the rules are adhered to nicely, and your storyline is well thought out. The refrain works well in all verses to keep the message moving forward--the mother fox is adept at taking care of her babies as is nature's way. However, she doesn't know until the exact minute if she will be successful and therefore the babies will survive because of her hunting skills. This is a great example of the style with the variation in the first line of the verses. This is another of your awesome poems about nature and animals that you write so well.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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You did an excellent job with a complex style, Yvonne. From the start, your picture sets the tone. Your rhymes work well, there's great smooth flow, the rules are adhered to nicely, and your storyline is well thought out. The refrain works well in all verses to keep the message moving forward--the mother fox is adept at taking care of her babies as is nature's way. However, she doesn't know until the exact minute if she will be successful and therefore the babies will survive because of her hunting skills. This is a great example of the style with the variation in the first line of the verses. This is another of your awesome poems about nature and animals that you write so well.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I appreciate it very much!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Another Trojan Refrain by Jan Turner and did a marvellous job here and I enjoyed every word, well rhymed and metered and I heard such a sweet melody here in this nature write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Another Trojan Refrain by Jan Turner and did a marvellous job here and I enjoyed every word, well rhymed and metered and I heard such a sweet melody here in this nature write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Dolly. What a lovely thing to say.