One Sunny Night
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Comment from lyenochka
Oh, you should have waited until the weekend when I had a six for you! This is the perfect ending - what I was hoping for but I didn't know it would be so soon. I am glad that Starla confessed to misleading Danielle about her relationship with Stewart. Of course, they are meant for each other. But how will their relationship affect their different work? I guess they will learn from each other. Congratulations on finishing!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Oh, you should have waited until the weekend when I had a six for you! This is the perfect ending - what I was hoping for but I didn't know it would be so soon. I am glad that Starla confessed to misleading Danielle about her relationship with Stewart. Of course, they are meant for each other. But how will their relationship affect their different work? I guess they will learn from each other. Congratulations on finishing!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Your comments mean a lot to me. Have to agree that their relationship on conservative measures left showing he agreed with her on the dam but not likely on others -- and probably not for the same reasons.Thanks so much for reading this and letting me know points.
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Enjoyed the story, Marie! 💖
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Backstory would be appreciated. I have no context for this. Regardless, it is well narrated--dialog rings true.
Who is the speaker?:
Danielle stiffened as she gazed over the warm, vibrant face of Starla's mother. "Stewart told me how he relies on you. Loves your cooking and keeping up the house."
Heads up: title/desc. Wedding starts, the groom is---�?�¦
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Backstory would be appreciated. I have no context for this. Regardless, it is well narrated--dialog rings true.
Who is the speaker?:
Danielle stiffened as she gazed over the warm, vibrant face of Starla's mother. "Stewart told me how he relies on you. Loves your cooking and keeping up the house."
Heads up: title/desc. Wedding starts, the groom is---�?�¦
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Many thanks for taking time to read this one and for your very helpful comments.
Comment from JudyE
All's well that ends well and we have a very satisfying ending here.
If it's okay, I picked up a few points but don't feel obliged to take any notice of them.
Mary left her at a back-row seat then turned, rushed away and was carrying the wedding programs. - I might have rearranged this slightly. Maybe: 'Mary left her at a back-row seat then turned and rushed away, carrying the wedding programs.'
Standing beside a high arch vailed in greenery and flowers - spelling - veiled
Slowly, she grasped the sight of a much younger man who stood at the alter - spelling - altar
Starla, had greeted her with a stubbornly jealous attitude - delete comma
Together they reminded each other of the good times - comma needed after 'together'
Best wishes
Judy
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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All's well that ends well and we have a very satisfying ending here.
If it's okay, I picked up a few points but don't feel obliged to take any notice of them.
Mary left her at a back-row seat then turned, rushed away and was carrying the wedding programs. - I might have rearranged this slightly. Maybe: 'Mary left her at a back-row seat then turned and rushed away, carrying the wedding programs.'
Standing beside a high arch vailed in greenery and flowers - spelling - veiled
Slowly, she grasped the sight of a much younger man who stood at the alter - spelling - altar
Starla, had greeted her with a stubbornly jealous attitude - delete comma
Together they reminded each other of the good times - comma needed after 'together'
Best wishes
Judy
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Comment Written 07-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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You are an amazing help. It's always hard for me to believe I hadn't caught spelling errors on such common words. Every change you suggest is wonderful. I very much appreciate all your comments. You are a great help! Thanks a million!