As Daylight Fades
Rhyming poetry ~ Rondeau41 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This is incredibly beautiful and descriptive. It brought me a sense of peace that I can't explain, I just know that I was having a bad day, and this cheered me up. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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This is incredibly beautiful and descriptive. It brought me a sense of peace that I can't explain, I just know that I was having a bad day, and this cheered me up. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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Hello Sharon. I am deeply delighted that you received peace and comfort!!! It warms my heart!!! Thank you for your lovely words about the Rondeau.
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
I've gotta tell you, Melissa, I think is a gorgeous rondeau. You have filled twilight with just the right tones, and shades, and even ushered in a few words, that really aren't there. That is the magic of writing.
Very, very well written, and a pleasure to read and review. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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I've gotta tell you, Melissa, I think is a gorgeous rondeau. You have filled twilight with just the right tones, and shades, and even ushered in a few words, that really aren't there. That is the magic of writing.
Very, very well written, and a pleasure to read and review. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 07-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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Oh, Gloria, your words lift my spirits so much. I have had a long break and developed rough poetic edges I did not know I had. Your words of affirmation really bless me. I worked two weeks on it to get it right. :). Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is beautifully expressed in words and image, Melissa. Great job with the style of the rondeau. Your words are descriptive and create great imagery. I like 'lilac flush'.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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Your contest entry is beautifully expressed in words and image, Melissa. Great job with the style of the rondeau. Your words are descriptive and create great imagery. I like 'lilac flush'.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 07-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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Hello Jan. Thanks so very much for your lovely comments on this verse. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Your descriptions are absolutely perfect. I could make a mental image of the scenery. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Your descriptions are absolutely perfect. I could make a mental image of the scenery. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much, Barbara, for your lovely comments!
Melissa
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"As Daylight Fades", is a well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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"As Daylight Fades", is a well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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Hello Duchess. Thanks so much for your lovely review.
Melissa
Hello Melissa,
You deserved the lovely review.
the Duchess
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Beautifully descriptive rhyming Rondeau about the fading of daylight with the colours and sounds of nature. Gorgeous photo you've chosen, lovely presentation, cheers
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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Beautifully descriptive rhyming Rondeau about the fading of daylight with the colours and sounds of nature. Gorgeous photo you've chosen, lovely presentation, cheers
Comment Written 07-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
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Thank you very much, Pearl, for your lovely review.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
Beautiful artwork, and your words suggest the colors in the artwork. You capture the fading colors of twilight. The song of the thrush is another great detail. Your words create such a peaceful picture. All is restful, like the garden. Great job of establishing a mood. Your repeating words "as daylight fades" help put us in the scene. Excellent rhyme, and best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Beautiful artwork, and your words suggest the colors in the artwork. You capture the fading colors of twilight. The song of the thrush is another great detail. Your words create such a peaceful picture. All is restful, like the garden. Great job of establishing a mood. Your repeating words "as daylight fades" help put us in the scene. Excellent rhyme, and best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Judi. I am so glad you like the Rondeau and the repeating Refrain. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are lovely, descriptive, peaceful and creative. I
pondered on "as daylight" fades and how it can be comforting as well
serene. The artwork is just beautiful and adds to the feelings this
poem conveys. Melissa, hope you had a great day!.....Maria
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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The author's words are lovely, descriptive, peaceful and creative. I
pondered on "as daylight" fades and how it can be comforting as well
serene. The artwork is just beautiful and adds to the feelings this
poem conveys. Melissa, hope you had a great day!.....Maria
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Maria. I so appreciate your lovely comments and review for the Rondeau. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
Because I know the difficulties in writing this form, and finding how to fit these rhyming words, I have nothing but admiration for the "ush" sounds, finding them one thing but fitting them is another. Besides, it's a wonderfully fitting theme, and a classic, well done, Melissa, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Because I know the difficulties in writing this form, and finding how to fit these rhyming words, I have nothing but admiration for the "ush" sounds, finding them one thing but fitting them is another. Besides, it's a wonderfully fitting theme, and a classic, well done, Melissa, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Roy. I am glad to read that you like this Rondeau. It took me two weeks to get it right ;). P for Perserverance. LOL. Thanks so much, my friend.
Melissa
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I paid off, they?re no easy Melissa, I?ve always said if you?re not happy with the first draft, try editing until you are! But having said that, I?m a bit impetuous. Heh heh.
Comment from tfawcus
The Rondeau is a lovely form but difficult to execute well in English with the rhyming constraints. Your rhymes in this one fit naturally and without intrusion - quite a feat in itself.
You have created a very atmospheric poem with your well-chosen words and imagery. Much enjoyed.
I particularly liked the euphony of your lines:
"I hear a nestled, sleepy thrush
begin his nightly lullaby,"
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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The Rondeau is a lovely form but difficult to execute well in English with the rhyming constraints. Your rhymes in this one fit naturally and without intrusion - quite a feat in itself.
You have created a very atmospheric poem with your well-chosen words and imagery. Much enjoyed.
I particularly liked the euphony of your lines:
"I hear a nestled, sleepy thrush
begin his nightly lullaby,"
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Tony. I am delighted that you liked the Rondeau. I know you understand all of the moving parts? took me two weeks to get it right. Ugh. Thanks so much :)
Melissa