One Sunny Night
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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Alaskastory:
So now Dani has had a semi-wild night on the town, a good night's sleep, and has met the mother of the bride. Even so, she still doesn't know who the groom is, but I'm still betting it is not going to be Stewart. Guess I will have to wait and see.
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Alaskastory:
So now Dani has had a semi-wild night on the town, a good night's sleep, and has met the mother of the bride. Even so, she still doesn't know who the groom is, but I'm still betting it is not going to be Stewart. Guess I will have to wait and see.
Rdfrdmom2
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Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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I very much appreciate your comments and I'm so glad you took time to read this. My next chapter just may be the last. Hope you read it too.
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed this chapter and I'm still in suspense about who's getting married! I know it's Starla and we just met the mother of the bride who seems to know Dani! So glad that she could release some of her pent up anxiety by partying with her friends!
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camara for photos of the pipeline if you want." (camera)
Each refill brought more laugher to her. (laughter) Maybe even remove "to her" or if you want to emphasize her laughing, just "Each refill brought her more laughter"
he whorled her until she was dizzy. (whirled)
pink with white roses loosely covering her breast (bust? or breasts?) She has two breasts so if you use that word, you'd need the plural. Lol. But in dresses, they talk about the bustline.
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Enjoyed this chapter and I'm still in suspense about who's getting married! I know it's Starla and we just met the mother of the bride who seems to know Dani! So glad that she could release some of her pent up anxiety by partying with her friends!
Comments/Suggestions:
camara for photos of the pipeline if you want." (camera)
Each refill brought more laugher to her. (laughter) Maybe even remove "to her" or if you want to emphasize her laughing, just "Each refill brought her more laughter"
he whorled her until she was dizzy. (whirled)
pink with white roses loosely covering her breast (bust? or breasts?) She has two breasts so if you use that word, you'd need the plural. Lol. But in dresses, they talk about the bustline.
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Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Oh, Helen, you are a marvelous help. After reading this so many times, it's hard to believe I missed those typos. Those and all your suggestions thrill me. I promise to make corrections. I'm thinking the next chapter will be the last --maybe. Many hugs!
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I like your characters. Will Dani and Stewart get married next?
My suggestions are just those - other than the typos, it's completely up to you what you want to change.
I make plenty of my own grammar and typing errors! Others point them out to me. When we reread we read with meaning in mind not the nitty-gritty stuff. Great job overall. 💖